for DPMJ: The Familiar Incident2/20/2017 c1 
2DoomMarine55
Who the fuck is Dante and why should I care about this scrub over The Doctor. You know the actual main character.
2DoomMarine55Who the fuck is Dante and why should I care about this scrub over The Doctor. You know the actual main character.
5/15/2016 c5 Quelthias
First the good.
Grammar, spelling is well edited. The plot flows reasonably well with an entertaining character. The action is very well done, every action I find wanting more.
Criticism
I find the personalities of the nobles and louise strange. Dante defeated three dot mages and Louise still thinks herself superior (even after finding that Dante casted spells...)? Guiche should have learned from Dantes win by preparing for his next duel. Or looked a bit more nervous and wanted to avoid fighting. He may think himself quite strong but Dante just defeated three mages of Guiches caliber.
Improvements
All I can say is to look at what likely changes will happen based upon having dante summoned because the plot will not be stagnant. There will be a massive butterfly effect, especially if the butterfly is part alien.
All in all I enjoyed this fanfic, very few get the doctor well. I will be waiting for the next chapter
First the good.
Grammar, spelling is well edited. The plot flows reasonably well with an entertaining character. The action is very well done, every action I find wanting more.
Criticism
I find the personalities of the nobles and louise strange. Dante defeated three dot mages and Louise still thinks herself superior (even after finding that Dante casted spells...)? Guiche should have learned from Dantes win by preparing for his next duel. Or looked a bit more nervous and wanted to avoid fighting. He may think himself quite strong but Dante just defeated three mages of Guiches caliber.
Improvements
All I can say is to look at what likely changes will happen based upon having dante summoned because the plot will not be stagnant. There will be a massive butterfly effect, especially if the butterfly is part alien.
All in all I enjoyed this fanfic, very few get the doctor well. I will be waiting for the next chapter
10/26/2014 c4 Guest
This is awesome! Please continue i see nothin that needs improving
This is awesome! Please continue i see nothin that needs improving
10/16/2014 c3 mdhunter111
Nice! pretty good story so far! like the way u blended doctor who with assassins creed, and then with familiar of zero. Gave me a new idea to try out. please continue story; looking forward to next chapter
Nice! pretty good story so far! like the way u blended doctor who with assassins creed, and then with familiar of zero. Gave me a new idea to try out. please continue story; looking forward to next chapter
9/29/2014 c4 3Reishin Amara
It would also be Nice if you put a number into the title so we know what goes where.
for instance
DPMJ (Insert number here):The Familiar Incident.
3Reishin AmaraIt would also be Nice if you put a number into the title so we know what goes where.
for instance
DPMJ (Insert number here):The Familiar Incident.
5/14/2014 c2 Yinko
He should have started by executing Colbert, Louise and the blue haired chick, they're the only ones who would try to enforce the stupid thing.
He should have started by executing Colbert, Louise and the blue haired chick, they're the only ones who would try to enforce the stupid thing.
5/14/2014 c1 Yinko
Given just how pathetic the magic of that show is the number of powerful being that get trapped by the familiar bindings in fanfics is completely ridiculous.
Given just how pathetic the magic of that show is the number of powerful being that get trapped by the familiar bindings in fanfics is completely ridiculous.
3/1/2014 c2 joel
hey nice to see u back and wrighting again keep it up
im luving this
hey nice to see u back and wrighting again keep it up
im luving this