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5/7/2014 c2 11Midnightestrella
HORY SHEET. Lolz and ROTFL so badly! Hey elizabeta H. Austria! Long time no seeee! :) You seeeeeeeeeeeeee, I'm going great on my PruCan story (The Mask in The Mirror), and looks like you've been keeping up on your UsUk stories too!

BlackComet: Hehehe... I love how this turned out!

Sangre: Pervert.

Comet: *shrugs* We all are.

Galaxy: What ya mean?

Me, Comet, and Sangre: ... -_-' Nevermind.

Galaxy: Why are you guys staring at me?

Comet: Not like nobody has a crush! right? *ignores last subject*

Me: *blush* Ja...pan..

Sangre: *blushes* 2p!Prussia..

Comet: *blushes* 2p!Canada...

Galaxy: Spa...in... *blushes*

Me: ENOUGH BLABBIN'! We're here to review a UsUk story!

all: Right...!

Comet: Whatever.. Need to see if Iggy can open a portal to the 2p!verse...

Sangre: *follows* YOU'RE NOT GOING TO NATION-NAP HIM!

Comet: TOO LATE!

Me and Galaxy: *sighs* Hasta la pasta...

( I was reading such an awesome UsUk fic (yours are too!) by Love-Peace-Anime! :3 I'm haaaaaappy toooooday!)
3/17/2014 c2 Olive-Gravity
XDDDD THIS MADE ME LAUGH SO FUCKING HARD YOU DONT EVEN KNOW
XDDDDDDDDD
3/17/2014 c2 Oost Indie
I actually like the idea of demon-angel school. But for me, this fic was waaaay too rushed. Timeskip is okay, but use it if you really need to. You used a POV in short amount time and changed it too quickly (and you changed POV too much). And don't put Author's Note in the story, you'll messed it up. If you want to tell something, write it on the headnote or the footnote, not in the fic. If you want to explain something from the fic, put a number or * beside it and explain it on the headnote/footnote.

So, there're things you need to know:
1. Don't be too rushed, do it slowly but develope it.
2. You don't need much timeskip to make your story readable.
3. Changing POV quickly from one to another hurt the eyes. Choose words that you could arrange to good sentences so you don't have to change POV. Use one or two POVs instead of three POVs so people wouldn't be confused.
4. Put Author's Note on it's place, not in the fanfic.
5. I make this thing not because I hate you and your fic, but I want to remind you so you wouldn't do the same things in the future.
6. Keep writing.
7. Update asap.

Love,
Oost Indiƫ
2/28/2014 c1 Theonewierdgirl
Really interesting please continue! I really want to find out what happens :D
2/26/2014 c1 Olive-Gravity
Hah. Ha ha. Ha ha, ha ha ha, ha ha ha ha ha ha ha...
(sing it to the tune of that one 1D song... You don't know you're beautiful?)
2/25/2014 c1 NO-LONGER-USED-AT-ALL
XD XD XD This chapter sped through the plot beginning pretty quickly. You need a little beta work (bonjourno!) from someone (coughwhydidntyouaskmeimyourbetacough). I love this idea though. KEEP ON WRITING DEM FICS!

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