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3/8/2014 c4 jugglequeen
Angela is a bit unfair to my mind. It sure wasn't Tony's intention to kill Michael, Michael himself could've easily prevented by stopping at the red light. I understand that she's terrified but I hope she'll reconcile with Tony soon. I wonder what you have in store for them.
3/9/2014 c5 121GoldenGirlSherry
Sherry Huh? LOL It was cool reading about the rest of the family and what is happening in their lives. I have to agree with Jugglequeen. It's not Tony's fault that Michael died and Angela really overreacted. I hope she comes to her senses!
3/9/2014 c5 30jugglequeen
Well, Tony is not exactly the right person to come to for getting advice on how to committ to a relationship - it has taken him 7 years and a watch to make him committ to his love!

It's good that he wants to fight for his marriage though, actually in my mind, he hasn't done so much wrong, he only refused to have dinner with Michael, he didn't wish for him to die. So I think Angela overreacted a little by moving out of the house. It wasn't fair to hold him responsible for Michael ignoring a red light, whatever his reason might have been. I wonder how you bring them back together, IF you bring them back together.
3/8/2014 c4 121GoldenGirlSherry
Yikes! What a shocker! Michael's dead. Angela leaves Tony. Very nice job keeping us on the edge of our seats!
3/8/2014 c4 19stayathomemum
Wow, Tony's being quite harsh. Michael's dying-you think he'd go to the dinner to support Jonathan at the very least.
Interested to see where this is going.

(you're doing better with the paragraph structure and not using random caps so much. . good improvement)
3/8/2014 c4 30jugglequeen
Okay, unexpected turn, which is good ... interesting plot you've got here. Why is Tony so unfriendly? Michael didn't do anything to him, a dinner wouldn't be too much to ask. I'm really looking forward to what happens next, so don't let us wait too long. Good job!
3/7/2014 c3 121GoldenGirlSherry
AWWWW what a sweet and touching chapter.
3/7/2014 c2 GoldenGirlSherry
Anna Marie Micelli - what a pretty name! So did Michael come back to be with Angela before he died? Unless he is lying. ...?
3/7/2014 c2 13kirsty2765
Sweet, this little girl, but one thing I don't get: Why felt Angela passion for her ex-husband?
3/6/2014 c1 5luvlucy7
aw! that little girl sounds so interesting! I like to read when T & A have kids.
3/5/2014 c1 121GoldenGirlSherry
Very good beginning. :)
3/5/2014 c1 19stayathomemum
An intriguing beginning. Why would Michael be returning after so many years? The kid seems cute.
But yes, I agree with jugglequeen: the random use of caps is distracting and you need paragraph breaks. (Is your Ipad giving you problems again?)
3/5/2014 c1 13kirsty2765
What could Michael want? And a choice? If I was Angela it would be easy for me to choose:-) I hope there will be more soon.
And I agree with jugglequeen, what is it with the caps? I don't get it.
3/5/2014 c1 30jugglequeen
Like Tony I'm wondering what Michael wants from them. He obviously didn't know that Tony and Angela had a daughter, maybe that frustrates his inital plan? It's an interesting and intriguing start, I hope you come up with the continuation soon.

One request though for this text is a bit hard to read - put some paragraphs in there, seperate the direct speech from the narrative part, and try to get rid of these caps. Although I'm used to caps as a German, as we have lots of them in our language, they confuse me in an English text.
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