for Prosperity3/12/2015 c1 BlobIsNotOnFanfictionDotNet
aaah very nicely done- it's an interesting concept and your prose is really well executed. a great read, thanks for posting!
aaah very nicely done- it's an interesting concept and your prose is really well executed. a great read, thanks for posting!
5/2/2014 c1 
11Laluzi
Oh, wow. That was powerful and terrifying. And yet, it fits both Wendy and the complete hopelessness of Don't Starve perfectly. Excellent job. And that last line :'c
11LaluziOh, wow. That was powerful and terrifying. And yet, it fits both Wendy and the complete hopelessness of Don't Starve perfectly. Excellent job. And that last line :'c
3/8/2014 c1 17Disciple of Ember
That is some powerful stuff. I love the way you characterized Wendy in this with a perfect mixture of promise and haunting hopelessness. The way you wrote her times of plenty and the sudden transition that followed were excellent and moving.
It isn't just the subject either. The sentences fit together with a very fluid manner, only to be broken up when something major is happening.
"This night, right where she lay, not a moment later, she would be dead. It had been decided." That's got to be my favorite one. The sheer inevitability you fit into those words gives Wendy such a human edge that I honestly don't know how best to describe it.
Long story short, awesome job.
17Disciple of EmberThat is some powerful stuff. I love the way you characterized Wendy in this with a perfect mixture of promise and haunting hopelessness. The way you wrote her times of plenty and the sudden transition that followed were excellent and moving.
It isn't just the subject either. The sentences fit together with a very fluid manner, only to be broken up when something major is happening.
"This night, right where she lay, not a moment later, she would be dead. It had been decided." That's got to be my favorite one. The sheer inevitability you fit into those words gives Wendy such a human edge that I honestly don't know how best to describe it.
Long story short, awesome job.