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8/27/2017 c11 Tinatiger44
I love your encouragement!
8/27/2017 c10 Tinatiger44
Your writing encourages me to kick people's heads off like large hands Han
8/27/2017 c9 Tinatiger44
I LOVE this story so much!
8/27/2017 c8 Tinatiger44
This story is almost as entertaining as my dogs
8/27/2017 c1 Guest
Allison gets up from the corner, pulls her black hair back, and surveys her surroundings. I loved this story and the detailing is stupendous. (To check if his is a robot, KICK ITS HEAD OFF)
8/27/2017 c7 Tinatiger44
Love it!
8/27/2017 c6 Tinatiger44
This story make me smile!
8/27/2017 c5 Tinatiger44
Please update! I want to read more!
8/27/2017 c4 Tinatiger44
Very entertaining story!
8/27/2017 c3 Tinatiger44
Great plot!
8/27/2017 c2 Tinatiger44
Great characters!
8/27/2017 c1 Tinatiger44
1/10/2017 c7 ME
Okay, so I just realized that someone else has reviewed this story multiple times under the name "Me". I use ME because they're initials for something, and I am not the same guest. Sorry for the confusion. :/ I'll change my "name" to "Meowen" to prevent further confusion. So sorry.
Anyway, great story so far! Keep it up!
1/9/2017 c1 ME
(I think that I accidentally pressed "Post Review", so this is a continuation of my previous review).
So the insult has no basis to its claim (that she's a bad girl and belongs in jail). However, if you have him take a stab at some of her other attributes and possible weaknesses, like how she probably thinks differently than others or behaves oddly or is odd in general or is an outcast, then the insult has more meaning, and she can come right back around and throw him a stinging retort that will get the readers cheering. Does that make sense? That's my only complaint, everything else was pretty good. :)
1/9/2017 c1 ME
Haha, the orphanage is literally called Moredoor. As in, Mordor. XD And Sunny-Hill could be Hobbiton, and- and-
*cough* Sorry, wrong fandom. Anyways, I like where this is headed! For some reason I was automatically redirected to chapter 11, which was weird and confusing, but now that I know what's going on, this makes a lot more sense! One suggestion, though: the bully's comeback was really quite unintelligent. Instead, you could have him say that it's someone from a mental institution who's come to take her away, to which she could reply that if anyone belongs in an asylum, it's him. Or something like that. The whole "you belong in juvie" hint/insult just doesn't have enough power to it because the reader hasn't been given any indication that that would be a light image concern, and therefore the insult has no basis for its central claim (that
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