for A Caskket Story10/1/2014 c1 Guest
You say you aren't good at writing. As someone who works with writers a lot, let me give you one tip on how to avoid a very, very, very common and odd error.
I don't think I have ever seen anyone write something like "her was getting a good start...", but put a second person into it and suddenly grammar goes right out the window. " Her and someone were getting a good start..."
Just as you would use "She" - "She was getting a good start..." You do the same thing when there is another person involved. "SHE and Castle were getting a good start...".
"She" does things. It is the subject form, the acting form, the doing form of the feminine pronoun, regardless of whether there is another person involved. You might well say, "She writes stories." Or she and Sue write stories.
"Her" is done things to. It is the predicate form, the acted upon form, the done things to form of the feminine pronoun
, regerdless of whether there is another person involved. You might well say, "I gave a story to her.". Or " I gave a story to her and Sue."
Lastly, I hope to skip a "normal" reaction here. It seems that the best writers welcome it when someone points out such an error, so they can correct it. Usually, the worse a person writes, the more furious they are if they are corrected. Go figure.
You say you aren't good at writing. As someone who works with writers a lot, let me give you one tip on how to avoid a very, very, very common and odd error.
I don't think I have ever seen anyone write something like "her was getting a good start...", but put a second person into it and suddenly grammar goes right out the window. " Her and someone were getting a good start..."
Just as you would use "She" - "She was getting a good start..." You do the same thing when there is another person involved. "SHE and Castle were getting a good start...".
"She" does things. It is the subject form, the acting form, the doing form of the feminine pronoun, regardless of whether there is another person involved. You might well say, "She writes stories." Or she and Sue write stories.
"Her" is done things to. It is the predicate form, the acted upon form, the done things to form of the feminine pronoun
, regerdless of whether there is another person involved. You might well say, "I gave a story to her.". Or " I gave a story to her and Sue."
Lastly, I hope to skip a "normal" reaction here. It seems that the best writers welcome it when someone points out such an error, so they can correct it. Usually, the worse a person writes, the more furious they are if they are corrected. Go figure.
4/21/2014 c3 Guest
very good story
very good story
4/21/2014 c2 Guest
Not to be mean but even if you know that you're not a good writer, maybe you shouldn't write ...
Not to be mean but even if you know that you're not a good writer, maybe you shouldn't write ...
4/21/2014 c1 Guest
"Caskett", not "Caskket" ...
"Caskett", not "Caskket" ...
3/28/2014 c2 guest
Please read some other stories by other good authors and then write. The correct way to write a conversation is with quotation marks not the pov bs you have in here.
Also at 4 weeks pregnant all. There is a sac that may contain an embryo, heart beats start at 6 to 8 weeks
You need a lot of practice and help because you need to do research on what is happening medically and then on how to write. A lot of help with that
Please read some other stories by other good authors and then write. The correct way to write a conversation is with quotation marks not the pov bs you have in here.
Also at 4 weeks pregnant all. There is a sac that may contain an embryo, heart beats start at 6 to 8 weeks
You need a lot of practice and help because you need to do research on what is happening medically and then on how to write. A lot of help with that
3/29/2014 c1 
1Castlelover2
I'm sorry to say this but I found this story very difficult to read. It might help if you could proof read or get a beta.
1Castlelover2I'm sorry to say this but I found this story very difficult to read. It might help if you could proof read or get a beta.
3/26/2014 c1 Guest
It's Caskett, not Caskket.
You're story isn't really a story due to the fact that it's a just a giant paragraph. Don't put "flashback starts" it's better if you use italics, that shows that the writing is a flashback. Keep writing though, you can only get better.
It's Caskett, not Caskket.
You're story isn't really a story due to the fact that it's a just a giant paragraph. Don't put "flashback starts" it's better if you use italics, that shows that the writing is a flashback. Keep writing though, you can only get better.