for Gohan's Redemption6/3/2014 c3 
44the bird of the chapel
Story's being too slow. You've got the premise and obviously you can write, so I think you can do better with the pacing. Too many thoughts. Didn't really read; just skimmed through since it didn't grab my attention. Thought I was reading a DBZ fanfic and not a crossover, even though I get that you were trying to set things up first.
44the bird of the chapelStory's being too slow. You've got the premise and obviously you can write, so I think you can do better with the pacing. Too many thoughts. Didn't really read; just skimmed through since it didn't grab my attention. Thought I was reading a DBZ fanfic and not a crossover, even though I get that you were trying to set things up first.
4/1/2014 c2 1TS24
Really great story so far, very interested in seeing what will happen next
Update Soon
1TS24Really great story so far, very interested in seeing what will happen next
Update Soon
3/31/2014 c2 Innocentsmile
Keep it up dude .gr8 story :)
Keep it up dude .gr8 story :)
3/31/2014 c2 Guest
No proud dsiyan would enjoy watching amother siyan suffer under gtieza. Radiz is just a Scumbag
No proud dsiyan would enjoy watching amother siyan suffer under gtieza. Radiz is just a Scumbag
3/30/2014 c2 Young IV
This story is great and I'm sure people won't waiting longer for longer chapters
This story is great and I'm sure people won't waiting longer for longer chapters
3/25/2014 c1 Guest
Not bad
Not bad