for Luffy's Renewed Adventure2/27/2024 c116 
17AeroJester203
LOL, I just imagined Sanji trying to woo Jewelry Bonnie just so Luffy “won’t get this one”, only for his flirting to go over her head every time. And if he ever found out her actual age, any hearts would abruptly pop as he feels that mortification you described.
17AeroJester203LOL, I just imagined Sanji trying to woo Jewelry Bonnie just so Luffy “won’t get this one”, only for his flirting to go over her head every time. And if he ever found out her actual age, any hearts would abruptly pop as he feels that mortification you described.
2/26/2024 c116 776The Cowardly Christian
I'm sorry for all the negative comments, I really did like this story...
Uh, if your having trouble, I've been known to help people out with their writing, I could help you if you want...
776The Cowardly ChristianI'm sorry for all the negative comments, I really did like this story...
Uh, if your having trouble, I've been known to help people out with their writing, I could help you if you want...
2/24/2024 c92 DogmaticNonsense
the hardest part to deal with is that you make luffy perfectly copy his manga actions like he remembers ever single step he took, it doesnt make sense when you do that but then you also have luffy conveniently forget things for you to follow og plot. dont do that in the rewrite, please.
the hardest part to deal with is that you make luffy perfectly copy his manga actions like he remembers ever single step he took, it doesnt make sense when you do that but then you also have luffy conveniently forget things for you to follow og plot. dont do that in the rewrite, please.
2/24/2024 c81 DogmaticNonsense
first get your crew stronger... entire point of going back...
hasnt done anything of the sort for 81 chapters. in fact, he only added more weak people to worry about and has only talked about it with his crew 1 time
first get your crew stronger... entire point of going back...
hasnt done anything of the sort for 81 chapters. in fact, he only added more weak people to worry about and has only talked about it with his crew 1 time
2/24/2024 c69 DogmaticNonsense
took you 69 chapters to finally start addressing the whole point of luffy coming back and just simply talk about actually making his crew stronger.
and almost 20 of zoro knowing he died in the future, failing their crew, and needing to get stronger but saying nothing about it. and close to 40 of him knowing about haki mind you. maybe you'll finally start adding some of your own plot...
took you 69 chapters to finally start addressing the whole point of luffy coming back and just simply talk about actually making his crew stronger.
and almost 20 of zoro knowing he died in the future, failing their crew, and needing to get stronger but saying nothing about it. and close to 40 of him knowing about haki mind you. maybe you'll finally start adding some of your own plot...
2/22/2024 c116 Guest
Semangat! Aku akan tunggu!
Semangat! Aku akan tunggu!
2/24/2024 c63 DogmaticNonsense
see, this was well done and a clever way to get vivi to join. make your rewrite 'this'. use og timeline as a buffer when you need it and youll have people singing praises
see, this was well done and a clever way to get vivi to join. make your rewrite 'this'. use og timeline as a buffer when you need it and youll have people singing praises
2/22/2024 c116 Guest
sorry for all the bad reviews! i havent been online in ffn recently but seeing you write on here still makes me happy even if it's an announcement. i think i read this fic in 2020, so it's been 4 years. I love the long journeys and despite its simularities to the anime/manga, it still had differences like new crewmembers and what not that made me enjoy it. looking forward to the rewrite! and take your time of course! a good book doesn't write itself in a day _
sorry for all the bad reviews! i havent been online in ffn recently but seeing you write on here still makes me happy even if it's an announcement. i think i read this fic in 2020, so it's been 4 years. I love the long journeys and despite its simularities to the anime/manga, it still had differences like new crewmembers and what not that made me enjoy it. looking forward to the rewrite! and take your time of course! a good book doesn't write itself in a day _
2/23/2024 c52 DogmaticNonsense
rlly? nerf luffy just to follow og plot. again.
youre making it difficult to keep giving benefit of the doubt. i hope some change happens soon. already halfway through whats written so far.
looking forward to the rewrite.
rlly? nerf luffy just to follow og plot. again.
youre making it difficult to keep giving benefit of the doubt. i hope some change happens soon. already halfway through whats written so far.
looking forward to the rewrite.
2/23/2024 c51 DogmaticNonsense
im starting to see why youre doing a rewrite at this point. i tried. ill give the rewrite a look...
im starting to see why youre doing a rewrite at this point. i tried. ill give the rewrite a look...
2/23/2024 c50 DogmaticNonsense
im sorry, dude, but cmon. you could try and make it something unique. the very few parts you did yourself were decent but theyre so few and far between that its simple to miss.
itd be exactly the same as op if you didnt just add more crew members. where is the fanfiction? where is the new story? why am i just reading a written out manga panel nearly every single chapter?
youre not a bad writer, so cmon man, dont be scared to change the storyline a bit. have more fun with it
im sorry, dude, but cmon. you could try and make it something unique. the very few parts you did yourself were decent but theyre so few and far between that its simple to miss.
itd be exactly the same as op if you didnt just add more crew members. where is the fanfiction? where is the new story? why am i just reading a written out manga panel nearly every single chapter?
youre not a bad writer, so cmon man, dont be scared to change the storyline a bit. have more fun with it
2/21/2024 c116 Guest
I don’t know who the fuckboys are who were flaming u but ignore them I liked ur story still do was it perfect no but that’s ok it’s ok to follow the same path but different in terms of out comes with new members and other stuff like new powers to people who don’t get them in the anime an that’s ok I hope u keep writing and take ur time I know I will enjoy it as much as this one
I don’t know who the fuckboys are who were flaming u but ignore them I liked ur story still do was it perfect no but that’s ok it’s ok to follow the same path but different in terms of out comes with new members and other stuff like new powers to people who don’t get them in the anime an that’s ok I hope u keep writing and take ur time I know I will enjoy it as much as this one
2/23/2024 c116 1Fireburner267
So I haven’t finished reading this yet but for the jewelry bonney why not age her up it is an au and as the author you hold the power to determine character ages
1Fireburner267So I haven’t finished reading this yet but for the jewelry bonney why not age her up it is an au and as the author you hold the power to determine character ages
2/23/2024 c47 DogmaticNonsense
why are you nearly going word for word retelling of the og story? youve basically copy pasted 80% of this story. the parts you changed are barely noticable too.
i get working with a template but this is too much. im here to read a ff not reread the manga
why are you nearly going word for word retelling of the og story? youve basically copy pasted 80% of this story. the parts you changed are barely noticable too.
i get working with a template but this is too much. im here to read a ff not reread the manga