for Dragon Age: Dovahkiin7/15/2018 c5 Been A While
You probably won't read this but I thought I'd say my piece regardless. When I started this I was excited. A sufficiently powerful DB in thedas. But nothing changed. On a grand scale Miara might as well not be there. I stopped reading because at this point it would be like playing origins again with commentary and follower support from the DB. It's a crossover. deviation would have been nice.
You probably won't read this but I thought I'd say my piece regardless. When I started this I was excited. A sufficiently powerful DB in thedas. But nothing changed. On a grand scale Miara might as well not be there. I stopped reading because at this point it would be like playing origins again with commentary and follower support from the DB. It's a crossover. deviation would have been nice.
7/1/2018 c10 Darkmaster10000000
Wait did you. . . . . Oh my God you did. YOU MADE A 'FEMALE' SHEOGORATH!
Wait did you. . . . . Oh my God you did. YOU MADE A 'FEMALE' SHEOGORATH!
2/15/2018 c16 jack
would really like to see more of this story
would really like to see more of this story
2/14/2018 c2 Guest
"Your" indicates belonging.
"You're" is short for "you are".
"Your" indicates belonging.
"You're" is short for "you are".
1/18/2018 c2 dveth
This story isn't written in the present tense or past. It switches between the two, sometimes within the same sentence. That's a big problem. Unfortunately, since that's the biggest problem I've seen so far, it's still better in regard to grammar and spelling than many stories I've read on this site. But still. If you want to read a story that has good grammar, let this one pass.
This story isn't written in the present tense or past. It switches between the two, sometimes within the same sentence. That's a big problem. Unfortunately, since that's the biggest problem I've seen so far, it's still better in regard to grammar and spelling than many stories I've read on this site. But still. If you want to read a story that has good grammar, let this one pass.
1/17/2018 c16 person
Oooooo. :D
Oooooo. :D
12/21/2017 c14 Face Yourself
Story went strong for a while, but really kinda started dragging the last couple chapters - which is odd, because the Fade was my favorite part of the game in Origins. Ah well. Still a good read, just... not as good as chapters 5-12 or so.
Story went strong for a while, but really kinda started dragging the last couple chapters - which is odd, because the Fade was my favorite part of the game in Origins. Ah well. Still a good read, just... not as good as chapters 5-12 or so.
11/20/2017 c16 CapriSunnyD
This is such an interesting and fun story. I can't remember the last time I enjoyed a story so much that I actually read the whole thing in one sitting. I hope to see you continue it someday!
This is such an interesting and fun story. I can't remember the last time I enjoyed a story so much that I actually read the whole thing in one sitting. I hope to see you continue it someday!
10/14/2017 c16 
5WBXtreme234
Also you really should have had either Miara or Serana sing The Dragonborn Comes because that would make sense for them to do like before she told them she was Dragonborn
5WBXtreme234Also you really should have had either Miara or Serana sing The Dragonborn Comes because that would make sense for them to do like before she told them she was Dragonborn
10/11/2017 c16 WBXtreme234
Please continue this. This is one of the stories on this site in my opinion
Please continue this. This is one of the stories on this site in my opinion
8/24/2017 c13 kitten198485
Wow glad i remembered Alando-Sul from Battle of the red mountain. :P very interesting twist going on here.
Wow glad i remembered Alando-Sul from Battle of the red mountain. :P very interesting twist going on here.
8/16/2017 c2 2rc48177
The part where they are comparing cultures comes off as pretty preachy. Mages in thedas always have a very real chance of being possessed or manipulated by demons, their history has formed their culture, for good or worse, and there are constant threats to the survival of their civilization around every dark corner. Tamerial is a high fantasy, Dragon age is a dark heroic fantasy.
2rc48177The part where they are comparing cultures comes off as pretty preachy. Mages in thedas always have a very real chance of being possessed or manipulated by demons, their history has formed their culture, for good or worse, and there are constant threats to the survival of their civilization around every dark corner. Tamerial is a high fantasy, Dragon age is a dark heroic fantasy.