for Dragon Age: Dovahkiin4/10/2016 c13 Xuan Tian Shang Ti
Seriously? Dawn Dusk? Seriously? And the Dragon Born is meant to also be the child of Akatosh...so she's the child of an Aedra and a Daedra? (teasing over)
Really good story though. I love it :)
Seriously? Dawn Dusk? Seriously? And the Dragon Born is meant to also be the child of Akatosh...so she's the child of an Aedra and a Daedra? (teasing over)
Really good story though. I love it :)
4/10/2016 c13 RadioPoisoning
Damn, Miraak is unfathomably powerful lore-wise. While Miara took him down once she didn't have to worry about anyone else at the time.
Damn, Miraak is unfathomably powerful lore-wise. While Miara took him down once she didn't have to worry about anyone else at the time.
4/9/2016 c13 megacarroll
uh-oh Miraak the guy who could bend dragons to his will if he returns nothing on thedas could stop him.
And I must say typical wynn the moment Miara shows her power she immediately believes that such power is dangerous and needs to be controlled even and actually wanted to turn them into the Templars even though they are not citizens of thedas I cant wait for the revelation that Miria revels how old she is that should make wynn quite.
And I do like how you shown that Wynn is not universally respected since Brianna dislikes her.
uh-oh Miraak the guy who could bend dragons to his will if he returns nothing on thedas could stop him.
And I must say typical wynn the moment Miara shows her power she immediately believes that such power is dangerous and needs to be controlled even and actually wanted to turn them into the Templars even though they are not citizens of thedas I cant wait for the revelation that Miria revels how old she is that should make wynn quite.
And I do like how you shown that Wynn is not universally respected since Brianna dislikes her.
4/9/2016 c13 The Crimson Thief
Oh snap! This story is getting thrilling, love it. Heh looking forward to the next chapter, bet it's going to be even better.
Oh snap! This story is getting thrilling, love it. Heh looking forward to the next chapter, bet it's going to be even better.
3/20/2016 c1 
6evevee
Having read to the end of this story, I will leave a review on the first chapter for those interested in reading. The story itself is well written, albeit plagued with syntax errors and dropped words. The entire story so far has also be a complete canon rehash. The actions of the Dragonborn have no effect whatsoever on the story line so far. If you've never played Dragon Age, then it could be an interesting story. If you have played the game, then you know exactly what happens when and no new or altered events take place. Much of the actual dialogue is taken directly from the game with a few added lines from the Dragonborn, much of which adds little to the story itself and is instead a method by which to inform readers of the Dragonborn's abilities and how they are different from those of Thedas. I do not recommend this story to any who have played DA or to anyone who wishes to see an altered timeline due to the presence of an outside character.
TL;DR: Comprehensible but boring canon rehash.
6eveveeHaving read to the end of this story, I will leave a review on the first chapter for those interested in reading. The story itself is well written, albeit plagued with syntax errors and dropped words. The entire story so far has also be a complete canon rehash. The actions of the Dragonborn have no effect whatsoever on the story line so far. If you've never played Dragon Age, then it could be an interesting story. If you have played the game, then you know exactly what happens when and no new or altered events take place. Much of the actual dialogue is taken directly from the game with a few added lines from the Dragonborn, much of which adds little to the story itself and is instead a method by which to inform readers of the Dragonborn's abilities and how they are different from those of Thedas. I do not recommend this story to any who have played DA or to anyone who wishes to see an altered timeline due to the presence of an outside character.
TL;DR: Comprehensible but boring canon rehash.
3/16/2016 c2 5Anon Of The Sea
I would like to say, first off, that I love the story. But by talos, the writing needs proofreading/an editor. I can taste a good storyline, so I'm sticking out the reading, but it's not always easy. It's probably turned off more than a few readers
5Anon Of The SeaI would like to say, first off, that I love the story. But by talos, the writing needs proofreading/an editor. I can taste a good storyline, so I'm sticking out the reading, but it's not always easy. It's probably turned off more than a few readers
2/17/2016 c2 Lord of Bones
...the hell would a Dunmer care about slavery, even of other elves? I know that there's this tendency to turn the races of Tamriel into Americanized mutations of their original selves, but the average Dunmer isn't going to give a crap.
Frickin' hell, given Dunmer history and Mer history in general, your character would think that the Dalish really, really suck. They're like primitive Bosmer who ended up enslaved to MEN.
...the hell would a Dunmer care about slavery, even of other elves? I know that there's this tendency to turn the races of Tamriel into Americanized mutations of their original selves, but the average Dunmer isn't going to give a crap.
Frickin' hell, given Dunmer history and Mer history in general, your character would think that the Dalish really, really suck. They're like primitive Bosmer who ended up enslaved to MEN.
1/27/2016 c2 Alkeni
An interesting start. Where is Serena?
An interesting start. Where is Serena?
1/16/2016 c12 The-Proto-Crab
Dear Arch
I dont know what to say. This story is simply fantastic and raises really interesting points that I never thought of before apart from the fact Molag bal is a douch because he is a douch. I find how you used the mixture of magic from both worlds rather interesting and how conjuration is basically blood magics older brother but it does get me thinking, Could someone who is a expert in in the conjuration school and had knowledge about the sprites of the fade be able to summon a sprite from the fade with risking it being corrupted and turning into a demon. I cant wait to see the dailishs (Spelling?) reaction to seeing a dark elf that has lived for so long but saying that I pity them too since they will have to deal with Mr hentai tentacle god trying to steal their knowledge but I think Sanguine will like the Lady of the forest. Enough of my fanboying I just wanted to say thank you for writing this and I wanted to ask a few questions.
Question one is would Miara be able to make golems using the anvil of the void and soul gems?
Question two is would that dadric prince of disease have any interest in the blight or the corruption it brings?
third question is could the Maker be how the freldens see the Adra only due to there lack of magic they all look the same?
My last question is would Miara be able to control darkspawn if she takes the Arch demons soul?
Thank you for reading and I hope you keep on the good work.
P.S. Morrigan and Oghren are the best companions.
Dear Arch
I dont know what to say. This story is simply fantastic and raises really interesting points that I never thought of before apart from the fact Molag bal is a douch because he is a douch. I find how you used the mixture of magic from both worlds rather interesting and how conjuration is basically blood magics older brother but it does get me thinking, Could someone who is a expert in in the conjuration school and had knowledge about the sprites of the fade be able to summon a sprite from the fade with risking it being corrupted and turning into a demon. I cant wait to see the dailishs (Spelling?) reaction to seeing a dark elf that has lived for so long but saying that I pity them too since they will have to deal with Mr hentai tentacle god trying to steal their knowledge but I think Sanguine will like the Lady of the forest. Enough of my fanboying I just wanted to say thank you for writing this and I wanted to ask a few questions.
Question one is would Miara be able to make golems using the anvil of the void and soul gems?
Question two is would that dadric prince of disease have any interest in the blight or the corruption it brings?
third question is could the Maker be how the freldens see the Adra only due to there lack of magic they all look the same?
My last question is would Miara be able to control darkspawn if she takes the Arch demons soul?
Thank you for reading and I hope you keep on the good work.
P.S. Morrigan and Oghren are the best companions.
1/10/2016 c2 Ulfric
U wot m8! Do u wanna go!
U wot m8! Do u wanna go!