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for One shot introducing princes Lillian

9/2/2014 c1 keverlyhoutz
That story was way too short for me! I want to know what happens next
8/12/2014 c1 Prof. Zed
Great job, a few issues but otherwise well done :) The storyline sounds good, kudos on that. My only issues are as follows: 1: Tigers can't be white with orange stripes. There are Siberian tigers and white tigers only. 2: Jafar not able to deal with a child without his powder stuff is a little too unbelievable - think of what he accomplished in Aladdin(regardless of whether it was before this or not). 3: Some grammar issues; for example, lack of punctuation in some sentences and leaving out speechmarks(")etc. I did like Jasmine's jealousy - shows a side of her the reader would never have seen before, rather than see her as a sweet, kind princess all the time. I like it, you should definitely consider updating often and work hard to become even better :D
4/5/2014 c1 1Wilhelm Wigworthy
Interesting. Please keep writing! I really like this! :)

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