4/19/2014 c1 4sayain673
The concept of "taking another zone's story and making them your own" is well-executed in this first chapter. I must say that some of the other stories in this category that include [Original Characters] are mostly stuck in the Japanese server with the canon characters. Seeing the story of new characters in another server with other problems to deal with is a fresh breath of air.

That aside, the writing itself was of excellent quality, with little to no grammar or spelling errors. And for the characters, they seem to be well-balanced and realistic in their interactions with suddenly being sucked into a video game. Your inclusion of the "we can feel pain?!" factor was a wholesome addition as well.

I can honestly say that I haven't been this interested about an [Original Character]-centric story for a very long time, and that I will be following this to the very end. I tip my proverbial hat to you, good sir/ma'am.

May writer's block stay the f*ck away from you,

sayain673