for A Gift, an Unkindness9/12/2020 c2 
24ARega1s
Quite an interesting story so far. Ive been quite curious how Harry would turn out if he became an apprentice to Grindlewald
24ARega1sQuite an interesting story so far. Ive been quite curious how Harry would turn out if he became an apprentice to Grindlewald
4/9/2016 c1 19Smiling Seshat
Nicely written. I also like having such a large chapter instead of several short 1K chapters like many authors tend to favour.
19Smiling SeshatNicely written. I also like having such a large chapter instead of several short 1K chapters like many authors tend to favour.
6/16/2015 c2 Guest
Holy Christ this is just...bad...it's really, really bad. Just incredible boring to read and it feels like the characters are speaking at each other, rather than talking to each other.
Holy Christ this is just...bad...it's really, really bad. Just incredible boring to read and it feels like the characters are speaking at each other, rather than talking to each other.
3/13/2015 c1 Ghostofharpast
Update s2ndchances
Update s2ndchances
3/12/2015 c2 Cenright
I know you are trying to introduce your scenes more artistically, but at the same time, the scenes have sometimes made you need 2 or even 3 paragraphs until the reader actually finds out that the scene is happening in a completely different location, with no idea how the characters got there. You jump from Dreamless sleep potion, to dream (assumed to be happening in the hospital), to Astronomy tower with no explanations even hinted at.
I know you are trying to introduce your scenes more artistically, but at the same time, the scenes have sometimes made you need 2 or even 3 paragraphs until the reader actually finds out that the scene is happening in a completely different location, with no idea how the characters got there. You jump from Dreamless sleep potion, to dream (assumed to be happening in the hospital), to Astronomy tower with no explanations even hinted at.
1/19/2015 c2 AidanEngel
Again, doing well with the story, your pacing works, and I'm quite happy you've included the Delacours in this story. Crossovers would work, and could keep Harry from growing too OP as there is always a bigger fish you could pull from another world. I hope you'll continue your tale.
Again, doing well with the story, your pacing works, and I'm quite happy you've included the Delacours in this story. Crossovers would work, and could keep Harry from growing too OP as there is always a bigger fish you could pull from another world. I hope you'll continue your tale.