for Flames of the Heart3/15/2021 c12 monochromatic madness
Maybe you could do a psychological trap like a creature that becomes what they want the most, like for marciline it would be her mother.
Maybe you could do a psychological trap like a creature that becomes what they want the most, like for marciline it would be her mother.
3/22/2020 c2 JumpatRandom
I believe you're still active on the site, so I'll say this: I think you can just rush cheating at the drop of a hat, you could have just simply put how they met and developed on it later.
I hate constructive criticism because it's just saying: "Don't do this, do that!"
I'm sorry if I'm blunt, but I think this is something you need to hear. This character development was sloppy.
I believe you're still active on the site, so I'll say this: I think you can just rush cheating at the drop of a hat, you could have just simply put how they met and developed on it later.
I hate constructive criticism because it's just saying: "Don't do this, do that!"
I'm sorry if I'm blunt, but I think this is something you need to hear. This character development was sloppy.
11/11/2019 c4 thethethex34
Just want to state, in regards to my earlier review, that I don't hate people who are bisexual.
Just want to state, in regards to my earlier review, that I don't hate people who are bisexual.
11/11/2019 c3 thethethex34
To be honest, I am actually rooting for finn to not go back the Flame Princess, and to go meet other people. Maybe he can try it out with Huntress Wizard? Probably not likely in this fanfic, just putting my thoughts out there. Finn and Huntress Wizard is my favorite pairing and it's a bit frustrating when a sizable portion of the fan fictions with this pairing involved either involve a big harem or warp her character til she is nearly unrecognizable, although there are some good ones out there. Im not against harem fanfics, but I get put off when one of the members of a harem is bisexual. It usually leads the fanfic down a weird path when that happens.
To be honest, I am actually rooting for finn to not go back the Flame Princess, and to go meet other people. Maybe he can try it out with Huntress Wizard? Probably not likely in this fanfic, just putting my thoughts out there. Finn and Huntress Wizard is my favorite pairing and it's a bit frustrating when a sizable portion of the fan fictions with this pairing involved either involve a big harem or warp her character til she is nearly unrecognizable, although there are some good ones out there. Im not against harem fanfics, but I get put off when one of the members of a harem is bisexual. It usually leads the fanfic down a weird path when that happens.
41/27/2019 c12 Yo
It me that finn hurt Phoebe but it like the opposite phoebe hurt finn hey can you do ice finn meet ice finn you a man need a maid x3 time
It me that finn hurt Phoebe but it like the opposite phoebe hurt finn hey can you do ice finn meet ice finn you a man need a maid x3 time
9/21/2018 c12 Guest
Please do more
Please do more
9/20/2018 c6 et-reader97
Great chapter I think you did a good job on the wedding scen but I do think that you could have went into more detail about the decorations or maybe have Finn put in some "special touches". It would show the time and effort he was willing to put into planning not only Simons wedding but his and flame princess's formerly potential wedding. Keep up the good work.
Great chapter I think you did a good job on the wedding scen but I do think that you could have went into more detail about the decorations or maybe have Finn put in some "special touches". It would show the time and effort he was willing to put into planning not only Simons wedding but his and flame princess's formerly potential wedding. Keep up the good work.
9/20/2018 c4 et-reader97
OH how Flame Princess suffers for what she did. I like how you going to have Finn say zap when he freeze's things it was always funny. Keep up the good work.
OH how Flame Princess suffers for what she did. I like how you going to have Finn say zap when he freeze's things it was always funny. Keep up the good work.