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12/1/2024 c5 LSP sucks
Like I send the title, why is she even exist? Her sole purpose is to annoy everybody and make it all about herself. She’s just this random Minor character that’s just there she’s gross lumpy and in honesty I don’t think there’s any fan or Person in the actual cartoon show who likes her beside may be Marcy and she’s gross too I mean seriously She’s literally pulling out a worm or a centipede of her belly button I mean it’s disgusting. I honest to goodness believe that she only bathes once a year. And who knows what she pulled out of her belly button. In any event you have the fat blob and waste of oxygen LSP. and also have marceline, who is attractive but disgusting
12/1/2024 c4 Guest
I think what the other guest reviewer was trying to say was other than Marceline’s musical talents and charm, she’s just a pretty face dealing with the stress of a life and losing her mother and father figure Simon. I feel bad for Simon at the ending of adventure time. It should end differently with like Margo and Betty reuniting with their men and Finn making the sacrifice with the crown, it was the ultimate opportunity to say that sometimes life isn’t what we want it to be, and that sometimes life isn’t fair and not everybody gets happy endings when he said I was probably be going down saving someone that was his opportunity to do the right thing and save Betty from her fate
11/30/2024 c11 Guest
Why does LSP Even exist as a character ? And why does Marceline act just as gross as LSP this morbidly obese blob that is basically a waste of air
11/30/2024 c5 Guest
Like I send the title, why is she even exist? Her sole purpose is to annoy everybody and make it all by herself. She’s just this random Minor character that’s just there she’s gross lumpy and in honesty I don’t think there’s any fan or Person in the actual cartoon show who likes her beside may be Marcy and she’s gross too I mean seriously ill pulling out a worm or a centipede of her belly button I mean it’s disgusting. I honest to goodness believe that she only bathes once a year. And who knows what she pulled out of her belly button. In any event, she may be a pretty face, but her disgusting hygiene makes it impossible for anyone to see her in a romantic light besides maybe Finn who is probably used to her gross habits by now may I admit she has a beautiful voice and she’s not hard on the eyes or anything, but besides having a beautiful voice and a natural talent for singing she’s basically just some golf chair who has disgusting habits
6/9/2023 c12 Shank
Excellent story my Dude I don't like. I LOVE IT SO MUCH. please continue man when you got time don't leave it hanging
7/9/2022 c1 ChaosJevil96
really needs a continuation
3/15/2021 c12 monochromatic madness
Maybe you could do a psychological trap like a creature that becomes what they want the most, like for marciline it would be her mother.
9/21/2020 c12 poper1011
Excelent but continue
6/3/2020 c12 Jojotheshadow
Hope you come back and update this story.
3/22/2020 c2 JumpatRandom
I believe you're still active on the site, so I'll say this: I think you can just rush cheating at the drop of a hat, you could have just simply put how they met and developed on it later.

I hate constructive criticism because it's just saying: "Don't do this, do that!"

I'm sorry if I'm blunt, but I think this is something you need to hear. This character development was sloppy.
11/11/2019 c4 thethethex34
Just want to state, in regards to my earlier review, that I don't hate people who are bisexual.
11/11/2019 c3 thethethex34
To be honest, I am actually rooting for finn to not go back the Flame Princess, and to go meet other people. Maybe he can try it out with Huntress Wizard? Probably not likely in this fanfic, just putting my thoughts out there. Finn and Huntress Wizard is my favorite pairing and it's a bit frustrating when a sizable portion of the fan fictions with this pairing involved either involve a big harem or warp her character til she is nearly unrecognizable, although there are some good ones out there. Im not against harem fanfics, but I get put off when one of the members of a harem is bisexual. It usually leads the fanfic down a weird path when that happens.
4/30/2019 c1 4brandonleewolfe1
Hello are you going to write the next chapter plz
4/26/2019 c5 brandonleewolfe1
Do you need help or your ok
3/18/2019 c1 Timeman
Keep it going!
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