7/21/2014 c13 6RavenShantor
DAAMMMNNNN... Ok I've got to say that was an EXTREMELY well thought out and written story thus far... Character development and deviations from cannon are both properly explained as well as believable. I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with for second year.
That being said I do have a couple of complaints. One of my complaints is that you haven't mentioned Sirius after his release from Azkaban. I understand that he's recovering from his years of incarceration but given that Andromeda his both his cousin and Harri's solicitor I would have expected him to at least have Andromeda send her a letter from him to let her know who he is. My other complaint is that you sent her back to the Dursleys. With all that was stated about her being a Lord and all of the properties she owns why not just allow her stay in the one of her Magically hidden homes?
That's actually it really... Other then repeated how much I loved the story and am looking forward to the next update.
DAAMMMNNNN... Ok I've got to say that was an EXTREMELY well thought out and written story thus far... Character development and deviations from cannon are both properly explained as well as believable. I'm looking forward to seeing what you come up with for second year.
That being said I do have a couple of complaints. One of my complaints is that you haven't mentioned Sirius after his release from Azkaban. I understand that he's recovering from his years of incarceration but given that Andromeda his both his cousin and Harri's solicitor I would have expected him to at least have Andromeda send her a letter from him to let her know who he is. My other complaint is that you sent her back to the Dursleys. With all that was stated about her being a Lord and all of the properties she owns why not just allow her stay in the one of her Magically hidden homes?
That's actually it really... Other then repeated how much I loved the story and am looking forward to the next update.
7/19/2014 c13 4Thrans
I'm all for you continuing, your work has been wonderful.
On another note you pointed out, on the lack of reviews, you may want to look at the story info, aka genre and characters, and at minimum add the Harry Potter character tab, as I rarely look for stories with out activating the most basic of filters (English, 20k words, [Name of character I want to read about] Exclude most common M-Slash parings) By modifying it you could greatly expand your readership.
I'm all for you continuing, your work has been wonderful.
On another note you pointed out, on the lack of reviews, you may want to look at the story info, aka genre and characters, and at minimum add the Harry Potter character tab, as I rarely look for stories with out activating the most basic of filters (English, 20k words, [Name of character I want to read about] Exclude most common M-Slash parings) By modifying it you could greatly expand your readership.
7/16/2014 c13 5Nothorse
Really liked this story. The twists were believable and while some things were a bit convenient (I might have missed it, but I didn't see anything about the animagus fear before the train), The story as a whole worked well, even the nasty parts of it.
For next year? I always hated the possession plot, so some variation that has Ginny getting support would be neat.
Really liked this story. The twists were believable and while some things were a bit convenient (I might have missed it, but I didn't see anything about the animagus fear before the train), The story as a whole worked well, even the nasty parts of it.
For next year? I always hated the possession plot, so some variation that has Ginny getting support would be neat.
7/3/2014 c11 pregar
Pretty good story. I like how organized and well thought out your description of events is. This story is really easy to read, unlike some others. Your pacing may be a bit fast, you sometimes gloss over events (which is fine if nothing changes from canon), but I guess you want to get to higher years.
As to your characters, I think you should not concentrate only on Harri. Her wants and desires are clear, but with your side characters I can only guess (an Interlude from when Draco was send home could have been interesting). And keep in mind they can be completely different from canon, this is your story. Don't let the canon constrain you, if you think something can be done better (I remember you writing something about quiddich?) just make it so. One of the best stories ever had a completely different Triwizard Tournament...
Well, this probably won't get many readers, I felt pretty sick after reading the first chapter so I can imagine nearly every girl dropping this. Quite mature theme and I think you are doing a very good job portraying Harri. I actually find those Aspects of hers completely normal, I think people are using that a lot, most just never bother to put names to them, no?
Huh, that ended up longer than expected :)
Pretty good story. I like how organized and well thought out your description of events is. This story is really easy to read, unlike some others. Your pacing may be a bit fast, you sometimes gloss over events (which is fine if nothing changes from canon), but I guess you want to get to higher years.
As to your characters, I think you should not concentrate only on Harri. Her wants and desires are clear, but with your side characters I can only guess (an Interlude from when Draco was send home could have been interesting). And keep in mind they can be completely different from canon, this is your story. Don't let the canon constrain you, if you think something can be done better (I remember you writing something about quiddich?) just make it so. One of the best stories ever had a completely different Triwizard Tournament...
Well, this probably won't get many readers, I felt pretty sick after reading the first chapter so I can imagine nearly every girl dropping this. Quite mature theme and I think you are doing a very good job portraying Harri. I actually find those Aspects of hers completely normal, I think people are using that a lot, most just never bother to put names to them, no?
Huh, that ended up longer than expected :)
6/23/2014 c1 polluan
It's a good story. Dare I say one of the best interpretations of the heavily abused theme. I am really surprised that there are so few reviews.
When do you plan to introduce Sirius in the mix? Summer after first year?
Please have Bellatrix escape from Azkaban in a year or two. I think that Harri should naturally show much empathy for her. She is by far the most interesting Death Eater character and I can hardly imagine her not being heavily abused and indoctrinated in order to become the only female Inner circle. I also hope and expect that Harriet will be grey in alignment, so making a deep connection with Bella can be interesting and insert drama (i.e. Neville).
Btw, why do you have duck face selfy of a chubby brown haired girl as an image for this story? The eyes are coloured green, but if it's supposed to be a representation of Harri, it doesn't really make sense.
It's a good story. Dare I say one of the best interpretations of the heavily abused theme. I am really surprised that there are so few reviews.
When do you plan to introduce Sirius in the mix? Summer after first year?
Please have Bellatrix escape from Azkaban in a year or two. I think that Harri should naturally show much empathy for her. She is by far the most interesting Death Eater character and I can hardly imagine her not being heavily abused and indoctrinated in order to become the only female Inner circle. I also hope and expect that Harriet will be grey in alignment, so making a deep connection with Bella can be interesting and insert drama (i.e. Neville).
Btw, why do you have duck face selfy of a chubby brown haired girl as an image for this story? The eyes are coloured green, but if it's supposed to be a representation of Harri, it doesn't really make sense.
5/20/2014 c5 31Sakura Lisel
*lol* Why's Snape picking on Harri? Seeing how everyone is expecting a BOY named Harry Potter, and Snape should be just as confused about the whole GIRL Harri Potter that showed up instead, why's he picking on a kid who may or may not be the child of his childhood enemy and the woman he once loved just because her last name is Potter? *lol* Or did Dumbledore confess to him about what he did to Harry all those years ago?
Is Sirius going to show up to 'talk' with Harri any time soon? Depending on whether or not the old coot tells her godfather the TRUTH about who and where his godSON really? *lol*
Though when Harri was asking the hat if there was any way to change herself 'back' to her 'proper' gender, I hope she wasn't asking because she actually WANTS to be 'turned back' into a boy. She's been a girl LONGER than she's ever been a boy, so why would she WILLINGLY want to turn back to a gender that's both foreign and alien to her, just because everyone else around her is expecting her to be that gender? *lol* She should remain a girl since that's what she's been for the last ten years, in both mind, body and spirit. If they change her back now, what would that accomplish other than having to learn how to be a boy and drop everything girl about her that she grew up with despite what the Dursleys tried. *lol*
Is there going to finally be a talk/confrontation between her and the old coot about the whole 'wrong' gender issue coming up soon?
*lol* Why's Snape picking on Harri? Seeing how everyone is expecting a BOY named Harry Potter, and Snape should be just as confused about the whole GIRL Harri Potter that showed up instead, why's he picking on a kid who may or may not be the child of his childhood enemy and the woman he once loved just because her last name is Potter? *lol* Or did Dumbledore confess to him about what he did to Harry all those years ago?
Is Sirius going to show up to 'talk' with Harri any time soon? Depending on whether or not the old coot tells her godfather the TRUTH about who and where his godSON really? *lol*
Though when Harri was asking the hat if there was any way to change herself 'back' to her 'proper' gender, I hope she wasn't asking because she actually WANTS to be 'turned back' into a boy. She's been a girl LONGER than she's ever been a boy, so why would she WILLINGLY want to turn back to a gender that's both foreign and alien to her, just because everyone else around her is expecting her to be that gender? *lol* She should remain a girl since that's what she's been for the last ten years, in both mind, body and spirit. If they change her back now, what would that accomplish other than having to learn how to be a boy and drop everything girl about her that she grew up with despite what the Dursleys tried. *lol*
Is there going to finally be a talk/confrontation between her and the old coot about the whole 'wrong' gender issue coming up soon?
5/17/2014 c2 31Sakura Lisel
If the old coot tries to 'fix' her and finally reverse the spell he cast all those years ago, I hope Harri makes his life miserable. *lol* Harri has spent the last decade growing up thinking and believing she's a GIRL. Everyone who knows her in the muggle world knows she's a girl. So what now, she's supposed to give up her girlhood and become the BOY she was originally born as because of the headmasters bright idea to magically hide her under the wrong gender for the last ten years? when they meet and Dumbldork starts talking about 'changing her back' she should refuse and demand to have a CHOICE in what gender SHE wants to be instead of having the ONLY gender shes ever known be stripped from her if SHE doesnt want it taken away. *lol*
If the old coot tries to 'fix' her and finally reverse the spell he cast all those years ago, I hope Harri makes his life miserable. *lol* Harri has spent the last decade growing up thinking and believing she's a GIRL. Everyone who knows her in the muggle world knows she's a girl. So what now, she's supposed to give up her girlhood and become the BOY she was originally born as because of the headmasters bright idea to magically hide her under the wrong gender for the last ten years? when they meet and Dumbldork starts talking about 'changing her back' she should refuse and demand to have a CHOICE in what gender SHE wants to be instead of having the ONLY gender shes ever known be stripped from her if SHE doesnt want it taken away. *lol*