for King of Dragons8/26/2015 c2 
1NotMadeYet
I can definitely see some improvements to this story. but also some downsides to it. A good thing is that it is going into a bit more detail from the original. A bad thing was the way you wrote the chapters, ie. some of the sentences would have possibly made more sense on the same lines. But who am I to judge?
Anyways, keep up the good work
-Ashurí
1NotMadeYetI can definitely see some improvements to this story. but also some downsides to it. A good thing is that it is going into a bit more detail from the original. A bad thing was the way you wrote the chapters, ie. some of the sentences would have possibly made more sense on the same lines. But who am I to judge?
Anyways, keep up the good work
-Ashurí
5/18/2014 c2 Guest
This is great, I love reading this but one thing you need to improve is this: Frostbite's character is similar to Hiccup's right? His weapon needs to be words and sarcasm, so try adding a little bit more sarcasm into this.
This is great, I love reading this but one thing you need to improve is this: Frostbite's character is similar to Hiccup's right? His weapon needs to be words and sarcasm, so try adding a little bit more sarcasm into this.
5/6/2014 c1 22GrimCreeper
Okay, changing the plot is good. Also, you need to work on your spelling and stop the line breaks. Put in detail and make the chapters longer. Many readers love detailed and long stories. It's not a bad start, if I should say. I've read the original story and it was good. Your job now is to make it better. Also, why not try mashing up the two original stories in this story? It's going to look better. I wish this will help you.
-Grim
22GrimCreeperOkay, changing the plot is good. Also, you need to work on your spelling and stop the line breaks. Put in detail and make the chapters longer. Many readers love detailed and long stories. It's not a bad start, if I should say. I've read the original story and it was good. Your job now is to make it better. Also, why not try mashing up the two original stories in this story? It's going to look better. I wish this will help you.
-Grim
5/5/2014 c1 Scorpion6955
Dude, you did a great job. I published the author's notes. You might however want to reread your future writing to see if some sentences make sense. Otherwise, great job, keep going, I like it.
And by the way it's Scorpion6955 not 6995, but it's forgivable.
Dude, you did a great job. I published the author's notes. You might however want to reread your future writing to see if some sentences make sense. Otherwise, great job, keep going, I like it.
And by the way it's Scorpion6955 not 6995, but it's forgivable.