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6/12 c8 4Monster King
Awesomeness
1/28 c1 ravi3072
This is one of the best mass effect cross over I read, please try to continue
1/1 c1 Unicron
I LOVE YOU FOR USING MARS ONE!
5/27/2019 c8 2marius1117
a good fic, would like to see more chapters
10/5/2018 c8 3WhiteElfElder
The Geth have no idea of what they would face should Harry decide to take action against them.
10/5/2018 c6 WhiteElfElder
Where is Harry during all of these latest events?
2/5/2018 c8 mvplourde
Yes! We got better made me laugh so hard. Thank you for writing this.
8/6/2017 c8 shadow
I liked the chapter!
4/22/2017 c4 46Hikari Nova
nice fic so far but every now and then you leave out or add unneeded words
7/14/2016 c8 concept human
Welp it has been two years since you last updated. Either life is kicking your ass or this is abandoned.

With that formally stated, the whole progression of the story is balanced. You've perfectly shown the people the interesting bits while telling them the boring ones. I would suggest rereading some chapters for minor word choice errors like Savage and Savant in this chapter, referring to the omni-tools.

Next, I expected someone else other than canon Udina as the representative considering that you already started with someone from the magical side introducing the Humans to the council; forgot her name.

Third, Obviously there are hidden stuff on the Normandy considering that it is a tech-magic and mass effect type ship. So I would suggest showcasing those in the future. Futhermore, I would suggest going indepth when discussing guns when Garrus is folded into the crew since he's the calibrations guy.

Finally, I'm rather skeptical on how you handled the Eden Prime battle with Potter. You would think that he always had a backup when he couldn't use his magic. I would guess giving him a custom side arm or something just to further show that he's learned his lesson going through numerous wars. Hell I was expecting him having at least a lightsaber for cqc.

That's it for now. I'm hoping that this isn't abandoned or worse.

-CH
6/12/2016 c6 4Revliledpembroke
After further reading, you don't use the word "the" enough.
6/12/2016 c5 Revliledpembroke
Sorry, but I can be really anal about grammar issues I spot, and the more I see, the more frustrated I get, and the ore likely I am to just start flaming. I will try to keep that under control.

I know that certain countries will go into negotiations able to just say things like "England wishes the best to our French neighbors" or something, but you can't do that with others. At least, not in English. It's "The United States of America feels". It's not "United States of America feel." It's also The Federated States of Micronesia, The People Republic of China, the former Soviet Union, and so on. You have to put the word the in front of the name of the government, because it's apart of the nsme of the government. In Mass Effect, it's The Systems Alliance, and in ME2, the question is asked if The Alliance is going to get there in time. Similarly, it's the Asari Republics, the Turian Hierarchy, the Salarian Union, and the Migrant Fleet.
5/26/2016 c8 highrise75
Good story hope to see it updated took me abit to understand the reference at the end but got a laugh out of it thanx
3/23/2016 c1 bendin
OK, a very nice and fast paced story. I hope to see it grows.
I've read your authors profile, you could change dynamics of the story (and leave a ME track of events behind) by including our real world recent events. Imagine the Citadel races as the EU, Batharians as ISIS and System Alliance as Russia (ok, Mr. Putin doesn not wear glases :-) and you can just literally quote daily news...
2/20/2016 c8 rgw
It's pretty rare to find that interesting crossover which isn't simple "Harry in ME verse", but full true crossover with integrated Potterverse and technomagic for humanity. I like it very much and I hope, that you'll continue it.
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