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8/19/2015 c1 9Pink-Angel-1992
Nice short story. Can definatly see Ed as being an over protective brother.
2/21/2015 c1 15Kai's kitty
Poor Al XD I can imagine how much he suffers with these two ...
this was so good! I really enjoyed reading it : D
6/27/2014 c1 Moonfire14
Loved it. So funny XD And YES to Roy as a sexy nurse.
6/10/2014 c1 41Bishie Huntress
ROFL! This is great! XD

There are a few little things. "Whoa" has the "h" right after the "w". When you said that Al asked "unregenerately", I'm not sure what you meant. And right at the end, the milk carton nearly missed him, which means it hit him. Is that what you wanted?

Other than that, I didn't notice anything. The sexy nurse thing was great all around. XD And the bit with Al's "final innocence". And Ed: "Obviously, there's something up with her!" XDD As odd as this is, I can totally see the characters acting this way. Fantastic job!
5/27/2014 c1 2HelixForTheStars
D YES. YES. ALL THE YES.
5/24/2014 c1 25AA Addict
That was awesome! I could totally see Ed being all over protective brother about Al's relationships! Makes sense. I have a little sister, and this dude in my form high fives her then jokily says that he'll date her. Then I go all Ed on him! _'

Heh, Ed's first time was with Roy and now he's stuck with him forever!
5/18/2014 c1 18bitagent
Lmfao that was adorable! I loved it! Roy would deffinitely make a sexy nurse no doubt about it Cx
5/17/2014 c1 Guest
Go Al! Getcha freak on! Ed would do something like that.

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