
1/5 c19 majere4
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Alas, 70 years of political maneuvering, fighting an upward battle for the good, and being looked to for every little problem had given Albus a complex. To him, there was no way but his way. Everything he did was for a reason, but he had gotten too wrapped up in the end justifying the means. He wasn't a terrible person, just one trying to do what was right. Alas, there is a saying about good intentions.
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Solid. Not quite 'dark lord dumbles', but rather 'well meaning despot' :/
Ahh, so the old 'Ron's not so bad, he's just a pawn, not the Rook he thinks he is.'
It's not badly done, tho I'm wondering how you'll handle the fallout once St. Mungo's finds the compulsions and spell damage. Then again, you've got three chapters left to sew up a metric shite tonne of plot completions, relationships, and oh yeah, defeat tommy boy. I hope you started writing longer chapters, or I'm gonna be ignoring that author's story recs!
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Alas, 70 years of political maneuvering, fighting an upward battle for the good, and being looked to for every little problem had given Albus a complex. To him, there was no way but his way. Everything he did was for a reason, but he had gotten too wrapped up in the end justifying the means. He wasn't a terrible person, just one trying to do what was right. Alas, there is a saying about good intentions.
"
Solid. Not quite 'dark lord dumbles', but rather 'well meaning despot' :/
Ahh, so the old 'Ron's not so bad, he's just a pawn, not the Rook he thinks he is.'
It's not badly done, tho I'm wondering how you'll handle the fallout once St. Mungo's finds the compulsions and spell damage. Then again, you've got three chapters left to sew up a metric shite tonne of plot completions, relationships, and oh yeah, defeat tommy boy. I hope you started writing longer chapters, or I'm gonna be ignoring that author's story recs!
1/5 c18 majere4
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They were a storm.
...
Attention was bound to be on them for a long time to come; it was just who they were.
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Nice job here, an excellent way for Luna to think of them, and it fits really well.
I'm still wondering what's up with Ron's migraines, it looks as though you're going ebil Dumbledore but I'm not sure.
Nev balancing out over a period of a month or two is pretty fast, but the thing is, as long as his friends were consistent, I think he'd be pretty quick to relax with them.
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They were a storm.
...
Attention was bound to be on them for a long time to come; it was just who they were.
"
Nice job here, an excellent way for Luna to think of them, and it fits really well.
I'm still wondering what's up with Ron's migraines, it looks as though you're going ebil Dumbledore but I'm not sure.
Nev balancing out over a period of a month or two is pretty fast, but the thing is, as long as his friends were consistent, I think he'd be pretty quick to relax with them.
1/5 c17 majere4
I love that you're building something with Neville. I've always thought he would be a good partner for Hermione if she and Harry didn't 'click'. Luna is my second fave ship for Harry, so that makes a fun quartet.
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This could be his chance to restore the Malfoy name to its previous illustriousness! He smirked, never let it be said that a Malfoy had shrunk from a challenge.
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meh
I'd love it if you had him really accomplish something on his own merit, but let's be blunt: 4 1/2 years of showing his arse every time he opens his mouth doesn't just go away because 'wait till I tell my death eater' says stop in a single letter.
I love that you're building something with Neville. I've always thought he would be a good partner for Hermione if she and Harry didn't 'click'. Luna is my second fave ship for Harry, so that makes a fun quartet.
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This could be his chance to restore the Malfoy name to its previous illustriousness! He smirked, never let it be said that a Malfoy had shrunk from a challenge.
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meh
I'd love it if you had him really accomplish something on his own merit, but let's be blunt: 4 1/2 years of showing his arse every time he opens his mouth doesn't just go away because 'wait till I tell my death eater' says stop in a single letter.
1/5 c16 majere4
It's funny, I didn't select the story for the pai..trio-ing? anywho, the romance, but rather from an author rec on 'fun, completed stories'. Knowing the end results kinda ruins any sense of mystery, but I bet you had your readers anywhere from bitching to placing bets to raising banners supporting their 'ships'.
It's funny, I didn't select the story for the pai..trio-ing? anywho, the romance, but rather from an author rec on 'fun, completed stories'. Knowing the end results kinda ruins any sense of mystery, but I bet you had your readers anywhere from bitching to placing bets to raising banners supporting their 'ships'.
1/5 c14 majere4
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"I have no idea!" Luna said cheerfully as she began to strip.
Harry did a double take before turning around and covering his eyes. "Luna!" he called out in shock.
"Harry!" Luna called back.
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This is perfect Luna!
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"I have no idea!" Luna said cheerfully as she began to strip.
Harry did a double take before turning around and covering his eyes. "Luna!" he called out in shock.
"Harry!" Luna called back.
"
This is perfect Luna!
1/5 c13 majere4
'
we can't just go rushing into this without a plan like a stereotypical Gryffindor." Luna said somewhat reasonably.
"Hey!" Harry yelped indignantly. "I resent that."
"No, you represent that, but that's a whole other matter." Luna managed to giggle slightly
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Luna looked between her friends and smiled thoughtfully. Oh yes, this would work quite nicely.
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I'm immediately thinking of Mr. Burns saying 'excellent'... but, then I try to picture Luna doing that and... can't. It's quite a pickle.
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we can't just go rushing into this without a plan like a stereotypical Gryffindor." Luna said somewhat reasonably.
"Hey!" Harry yelped indignantly. "I resent that."
"No, you represent that, but that's a whole other matter." Luna managed to giggle slightly
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Luna looked between her friends and smiled thoughtfully. Oh yes, this would work quite nicely.
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I'm immediately thinking of Mr. Burns saying 'excellent'... but, then I try to picture Luna doing that and... can't. It's quite a pickle.
1/5 c9 majere4
"
Am I also not supposed to know that you have a very unique birthmark shaped like an otter fishing from the crescent moon on your-"
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*facepalms*
Only Luna
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Am I also not supposed to know that you have a very unique birthmark shaped like an otter fishing from the crescent moon on your-"
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*facepalms*
Only Luna
1/5 c6 majere4
Saw the Dragon Friend thing coming, Hagrid will officially adopt Harry if given half a chance :D
Saw the Dragon Friend thing coming, Hagrid will officially adopt Harry if given half a chance :D
1/5 c5 majere4
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"Only you Harry-" Hermione started.
"Would manage to debunk decades of pureblood beliefs-" Luna continued.
"And get a pet in the process." Hermione finished.
Harry felt a shiver of trepidation go down his spine at the twin speak. What had he gotten himself into?
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Love it! And what else would you name a magical, green-eyed python besides Monty?
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"Only you Harry-" Hermione started.
"Would manage to debunk decades of pureblood beliefs-" Luna continued.
"And get a pet in the process." Hermione finished.
Harry felt a shiver of trepidation go down his spine at the twin speak. What had he gotten himself into?
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Love it! And what else would you name a magical, green-eyed python besides Monty?
1/5 c3 majere4
The idea of 'his dragon' being raised by Ignotus was clever, it's also fun to put timing to those characters and give dragons such an incredible lifespan.
The idea of 'his dragon' being raised by Ignotus was clever, it's also fun to put timing to those characters and give dragons such an incredible lifespan.
1/5 c2 majere4
I like the flow of this... the pacing is a little stilted, but the plot is moving well and the flow from point to point is logical and smoother than a sad majority of ff's.
Making friends with Luna was cool, but I wish you'd have had him use his long hours of practice and 'accio Luna Lovegood's shoes'...
I like the flow of this... the pacing is a little stilted, but the plot is moving well and the flow from point to point is logical and smoother than a sad majority of ff's.
Making friends with Luna was cool, but I wish you'd have had him use his long hours of practice and 'accio Luna Lovegood's shoes'...