for When the heartache ends9/28/2014 c1 
1nalufanforever123
I CRIED SO MUCH! BYW, I SUPPORT HORO X SHUICHI, SO THIS WAS REALLY GOOD FOR THE CAPS QUEEN (ME) KEEP WRITING STUFF LIKE THIS, YOU ARE REALLY GOOD AT IT!
JAZ
1nalufanforever123I CRIED SO MUCH! BYW, I SUPPORT HORO X SHUICHI, SO THIS WAS REALLY GOOD FOR THE CAPS QUEEN (ME) KEEP WRITING STUFF LIKE THIS, YOU ARE REALLY GOOD AT IT!
JAZ
6/3/2014 c1 Ruke
I'm a fan of Gravitation :D and like shuichi and yuki personally. please write more. Oh i would like to suggest one little thing, in the sentence "The next day..." if you put a comma (,) after the word "day" and a second "the" before "cause" it would make that sentence sound a bit better. For example, "The next day, the cause of death..." but it's your writing, just thought i'd help a tiny bit and offer a friendly suggestion. Good luck and please keep writing this one!
I'm a fan of Gravitation :D and like shuichi and yuki personally. please write more. Oh i would like to suggest one little thing, in the sentence "The next day..." if you put a comma (,) after the word "day" and a second "the" before "cause" it would make that sentence sound a bit better. For example, "The next day, the cause of death..." but it's your writing, just thought i'd help a tiny bit and offer a friendly suggestion. Good luck and please keep writing this one!
5/23/2014 c1 1I-Love-Trunks1
It's so sad that Eiri died. Poor Shuichi. It's nice that Hiroshi was there to try and help him.
I loved this story so much!
1I-Love-Trunks1It's so sad that Eiri died. Poor Shuichi. It's nice that Hiroshi was there to try and help him.
I loved this story so much!