for Persona 4: Leave No Words Unspoken12/6/2018 c187 RosyMiranto18
*tumbling weed* Damnit, just when i'm about to go to sleep. Oh well... then again, i'd rather choose to do it now instead of tomorrow because i need to continue my homework tomorrow. Ugh... 4-5 Thousand Words too... this is going to be long...
1a. Ah... it's a nice sight to see a meeting between these opposing forces like this. Nothing better than a good ol' Enemy Mine.
b. Yeah... it makes sense that there only one speaker among them. Although, why did the Crimson Room has one less representative than the Velvet Room in this?
c. Yeah... there's no use to have two factions fight the same person separately instead of making a termporary alliance instead.
d. Although, Margaret brings a good point that the Crimson Room cannot be trusted.
e. Well, at least the deal is going as smooth ad this, as i am expecting it to be more... complicated or chaotic between both sides.
2a. Yeah... that ability is OP. At least nerf it with not being able to summon TVs in the real world as a portal.
b. Oh, Kei, i almost forgot about you. How are you going so far? Considering since you missed out the Valentine's day. By the way, what are you doing on Valentine? Also, do you have any plan to transfer to Yasogami soon... if you're still in the High School?
3a. Well, i didn't expect Mitsuo to be actually got brainwashed considering how obsessed he is... naturally. If it is, then is Oomagatsu did that just in case if Mitsuo's planning anything fishy?
b. Anyway, i must say that this scene is Straight Outta The Ring. Now imagine Mitsuo dressing as Sadako.
c. Football Hooligan Rejects. Nice one, Dylan. But for me, i would say Bonek KW2 instead. (It's an Indonesian joke, ignore it)
d. What? I thought you regretted with Killing Mitsuo that gruesomely. Since when did that changed, Dylan?
4a. Yeah... you really can let loose this time, especially since they are Edo Tenseis. Still, an axe would certainly be handy if you carries it, Dylan. Or at least trying to take your enemies' weapons?
b. That's true... that's quite hypocritical. Not only Mitsuo is in denial on how much Dylan has changed, but also the part when Dylan's not the one killing Mitsuo's parents.
c. I thought you lost "Disappointment" as your berserk button, but it turns out that i was wrong.
d. Enter Shikari? Hm... sounds Japanese so... *facepalm* Of course it's a metal, i shouldn't ask...
e. Wait, since when there's clothesline in Junes' foodcourt? It's a different story in the clothing department though.
f. Haha, too bad that you're just revived and not immortal like those Edo Tenseis, Kubo Mitsuo the Imbecile, mwahahahahaha...
g. I hope it's not "Transforming into a One-Winged Angel in the middle of Junes".
h. Let me guess, you get Gorilla Press from Chase or Robert, isn't it?
i. Of course, uncontrolled power is course cannot prevail over more skilled technique, even if the power is not as strong.
5a. Well, i wasn't expecting your reaction to see your mother to be this... bland. I thought there's a bit of shock into it. *recheck* Oh, she wore a mask. No wonder you took a while for that. But can you tell me why rabbit mask of all things?
b. Still, i wonder how could Miranda didn't immediately attack Mitsuo even if they are on the same side? After all, he's the one who killed her.
c. You know, Oomagatsu, giving the same power with Spitz is not really matter much if he cannot use that properly and or if he's planning something unsculpturous to you, isn't it?
d. So... who do Oomagatsu meant by 'you'. I know it's referring to his sacrifices, but is it for all of Omega Franchise, or is it only for Miranda alone?
e. Yeah... if she only plans to tell the Omega Franchise... but what if she tells the Seekers of Truth about that instead?
6a. Damn, the jail surely has a masive influx of inmates in just less then a month, starting with the Tenmyouji-Wae fiasco.
b. Unnecessary? Sure... but these risks are unavoidable, Doujima-san...
Well, i guess that's all for today. I need to go to bed now. Keep Update!
*tumbling weed* Damnit, just when i'm about to go to sleep. Oh well... then again, i'd rather choose to do it now instead of tomorrow because i need to continue my homework tomorrow. Ugh... 4-5 Thousand Words too... this is going to be long...
1a. Ah... it's a nice sight to see a meeting between these opposing forces like this. Nothing better than a good ol' Enemy Mine.
b. Yeah... it makes sense that there only one speaker among them. Although, why did the Crimson Room has one less representative than the Velvet Room in this?
c. Yeah... there's no use to have two factions fight the same person separately instead of making a termporary alliance instead.
d. Although, Margaret brings a good point that the Crimson Room cannot be trusted.
e. Well, at least the deal is going as smooth ad this, as i am expecting it to be more... complicated or chaotic between both sides.
2a. Yeah... that ability is OP. At least nerf it with not being able to summon TVs in the real world as a portal.
b. Oh, Kei, i almost forgot about you. How are you going so far? Considering since you missed out the Valentine's day. By the way, what are you doing on Valentine? Also, do you have any plan to transfer to Yasogami soon... if you're still in the High School?
3a. Well, i didn't expect Mitsuo to be actually got brainwashed considering how obsessed he is... naturally. If it is, then is Oomagatsu did that just in case if Mitsuo's planning anything fishy?
b. Anyway, i must say that this scene is Straight Outta The Ring. Now imagine Mitsuo dressing as Sadako.
c. Football Hooligan Rejects. Nice one, Dylan. But for me, i would say Bonek KW2 instead. (It's an Indonesian joke, ignore it)
d. What? I thought you regretted with Killing Mitsuo that gruesomely. Since when did that changed, Dylan?
4a. Yeah... you really can let loose this time, especially since they are Edo Tenseis. Still, an axe would certainly be handy if you carries it, Dylan. Or at least trying to take your enemies' weapons?
b. That's true... that's quite hypocritical. Not only Mitsuo is in denial on how much Dylan has changed, but also the part when Dylan's not the one killing Mitsuo's parents.
c. I thought you lost "Disappointment" as your berserk button, but it turns out that i was wrong.
d. Enter Shikari? Hm... sounds Japanese so... *facepalm* Of course it's a metal, i shouldn't ask...
e. Wait, since when there's clothesline in Junes' foodcourt? It's a different story in the clothing department though.
f. Haha, too bad that you're just revived and not immortal like those Edo Tenseis, Kubo Mitsuo the Imbecile, mwahahahahaha...
g. I hope it's not "Transforming into a One-Winged Angel in the middle of Junes".
h. Let me guess, you get Gorilla Press from Chase or Robert, isn't it?
i. Of course, uncontrolled power is course cannot prevail over more skilled technique, even if the power is not as strong.
5a. Well, i wasn't expecting your reaction to see your mother to be this... bland. I thought there's a bit of shock into it. *recheck* Oh, she wore a mask. No wonder you took a while for that. But can you tell me why rabbit mask of all things?
b. Still, i wonder how could Miranda didn't immediately attack Mitsuo even if they are on the same side? After all, he's the one who killed her.
c. You know, Oomagatsu, giving the same power with Spitz is not really matter much if he cannot use that properly and or if he's planning something unsculpturous to you, isn't it?
d. So... who do Oomagatsu meant by 'you'. I know it's referring to his sacrifices, but is it for all of Omega Franchise, or is it only for Miranda alone?
e. Yeah... if she only plans to tell the Omega Franchise... but what if she tells the Seekers of Truth about that instead?
6a. Damn, the jail surely has a masive influx of inmates in just less then a month, starting with the Tenmyouji-Wae fiasco.
b. Unnecessary? Sure... but these risks are unavoidable, Doujima-san...
Well, i guess that's all for today. I need to go to bed now. Keep Update!
12/3/2018 c167 
2afterados
Good: Aha, I see that the IPD isn’t completely trusting of the Adachi’s, given that they’re still in a cell (as opposed to roaming completely free from the get go). But also like you say, if they are working together, even a small amount of trust between the IPD and Adachi's is a good idea. I’m on board with this dichotomy between “we need to trust the Adachis,” and “Can we trust the Adachis?” Interesting dynamic.
Improvements: Ah man, that fight in the principal's office felt so predictable. I don’t think there wasn’t any real reason to include it, the scene would have worked just as well as a scene where the principal tries to threaten Dylan and Yu out of starting a rebellion, and then tries to threatens Dylan out of running for student president. I guess my complaint is that it felt very… by the numbers for this series, like a fight we’ve all seen a million times. Obviously I'm not suggesting that fight’s stop altogether or anything like that, but it’s not good when I’m reading the part when the thugs come in, and my reaction is mostly “ah man, here we go again.” (I do approve of Dylan's snark, which basically says what I'm saying here ironically... but Dylan ironically saying "how unoriginal!" alone doesn't make this part less unoriginal, if that make sense.)
2afteradosGood: Aha, I see that the IPD isn’t completely trusting of the Adachi’s, given that they’re still in a cell (as opposed to roaming completely free from the get go). But also like you say, if they are working together, even a small amount of trust between the IPD and Adachi's is a good idea. I’m on board with this dichotomy between “we need to trust the Adachis,” and “Can we trust the Adachis?” Interesting dynamic.
Improvements: Ah man, that fight in the principal's office felt so predictable. I don’t think there wasn’t any real reason to include it, the scene would have worked just as well as a scene where the principal tries to threaten Dylan and Yu out of starting a rebellion, and then tries to threatens Dylan out of running for student president. I guess my complaint is that it felt very… by the numbers for this series, like a fight we’ve all seen a million times. Obviously I'm not suggesting that fight’s stop altogether or anything like that, but it’s not good when I’m reading the part when the thugs come in, and my reaction is mostly “ah man, here we go again.” (I do approve of Dylan's snark, which basically says what I'm saying here ironically... but Dylan ironically saying "how unoriginal!" alone doesn't make this part less unoriginal, if that make sense.)
11/23/2018 c186 RosyMiranto18
RosyMiranto18 chapter 8 . secs ago
Oh shit, just when a new IDBH chapter is around the corner. Bad timing man... bad timing... oh well, time to review then. *sighs*
1a. Question, are the elite members aware that Oomagatsu is just using them as a sacrifice to begin with? And i thought all of their killing spree has gaining enough sacrifices for that.
b. Watching Teenage Miranda here is weird man, revived or not. But why it has to be teenagers? I can also ask the same for the revived members of Omega Franchise.
c. And no, no matter how you would put it, i wouldn't count Saki and Miranda as antagonists... even if they are Edo Tenseis... unless if they are also brainwashed.
d. Hm... how much i would bet that Saki or at least Miranda would commit suicide/seppuku as soon as they saw that it's Yousuke and Dylan that they fought? I know it's futile if they're revived AND immortal, but there's nothing wrong in asking that, isn't it?
2a. Oosoru Tsukune, eh? I wonder who is insane enough to made him a vessel for Oomagatsu? Unless if it's Ikutsuki.
b. Yes, i mispelt his name to Ootsuru instead of Oosoru.
c. And i think you need to try to ask a Kuzunoha, Margaret. Because their ancestor had met Yasomagatsu Hinokami in the past.
d. Hm... that reminds me. What is Chaos' opinion on Oomagatsu anyway?
e. I hope the alternatice you were talking about is just allying with the Crimson Room and not something worse than that.
3a. If they are clearly stalking Yuu and Dylan with 40 people or so, how could no one including the police notice it?
b. I guess Dylan teach Yuu to not be too fettered about potentially killing anuone, right? *sighs*
c. BA? What is that? And why it was called Samoan? Was it really has something to do with Samoan Islands.
d. Hm... why the deaths are 'pointless' here?
4a. Uh... guard, you know that Spitz isn't locked, right? *facepalm*
b. Still, even if i can't guess who he is, i cannot help myself to be dreaded on whoever Spitz looking for.
c. I bet Oomagatsu would make sure that they can only attack and completely muted them. Now if only there's Heaven's Door here... *whistles*
d. Maybe you really shouldn't sleep, Dylan. Who knows about anyone who is smart enough to try assassinate you within your sleep?
Hm... i agree on the part about building things slow, that's good for the pacing. And what's War and Peace? *blank* Oh yeah, that book, it got mentioned in Persona One Last Promise once. So i guess that book is around 750K words and 1225 pages then, i see. Well, i guess that's all for now, gotta take a break before doing the next IDBH Chapter, Ciao and Keep Update!
P.S.: I just noticed that your profile on FF said that you're Italian. So i need to ask something, are you an Italian-American?
P.P.S.: Ignore or even remove the review below, i put that one in the wrong chapter. :BroughyFacepalm:
RosyMiranto18 chapter 8 . secs ago
Oh shit, just when a new IDBH chapter is around the corner. Bad timing man... bad timing... oh well, time to review then. *sighs*
1a. Question, are the elite members aware that Oomagatsu is just using them as a sacrifice to begin with? And i thought all of their killing spree has gaining enough sacrifices for that.
b. Watching Teenage Miranda here is weird man, revived or not. But why it has to be teenagers? I can also ask the same for the revived members of Omega Franchise.
c. And no, no matter how you would put it, i wouldn't count Saki and Miranda as antagonists... even if they are Edo Tenseis... unless if they are also brainwashed.
d. Hm... how much i would bet that Saki or at least Miranda would commit suicide/seppuku as soon as they saw that it's Yousuke and Dylan that they fought? I know it's futile if they're revived AND immortal, but there's nothing wrong in asking that, isn't it?
2a. Oosoru Tsukune, eh? I wonder who is insane enough to made him a vessel for Oomagatsu? Unless if it's Ikutsuki.
b. Yes, i mispelt his name to Ootsuru instead of Oosoru.
c. And i think you need to try to ask a Kuzunoha, Margaret. Because their ancestor had met Yasomagatsu Hinokami in the past.
d. Hm... that reminds me. What is Chaos' opinion on Oomagatsu anyway?
e. I hope the alternatice you were talking about is just allying with the Crimson Room and not something worse than that.
3a. If they are clearly stalking Yuu and Dylan with 40 people or so, how could no one including the police notice it?
b. I guess Dylan teach Yuu to not be too fettered about potentially killing anuone, right? *sighs*
c. BA? What is that? And why it was called Samoan? Was it really has something to do with Samoan Islands.
d. Hm... why the deaths are 'pointless' here?
4a. Uh... guard, you know that Spitz isn't locked, right? *facepalm*
b. Still, even if i can't guess who he is, i cannot help myself to be dreaded on whoever Spitz looking for.
c. I bet Oomagatsu would make sure that they can only attack and completely muted them. Now if only there's Heaven's Door here... *whistles*
d. Maybe you really shouldn't sleep, Dylan. Who knows about anyone who is smart enough to try assassinate you within your sleep?
Hm... i agree on the part about building things slow, that's good for the pacing. And what's War and Peace? *blank* Oh yeah, that book, it got mentioned in Persona One Last Promise once. So i guess that book is around 750K words and 1225 pages then, i see. Well, i guess that's all for now, gotta take a break before doing the next IDBH Chapter, Ciao and Keep Update!
P.S.: I just noticed that your profile on FF said that you're Italian. So i need to ask something, are you an Italian-American?
P.P.S.: Ignore or even remove the review below, i put that one in the wrong chapter. :BroughyFacepalm:
11/23/2018 c8 RosyMiranto18
Oh shit, just when a new IDBH chapter is around the corner. Bad timing man... bad timing... oh well, time to review then. *sighs*
1a. Question, are the elite members aware that Oomagatsu is just using them as a sacrifice to begin with? And i thought all of their killing spree has gaining enough sacrifices for that.
b. Watching Teenage Miranda here is weird man, revived or not. But why it has to be teenagers? I can also ask the same for the revived members of Omega Franchise.
c. And no, no matter how you would put it, i wouldn't count Saki and Miranda as antagonists... even if they are Edo Tenseis... unless if they are also brainwashed.
d. Hm... how much i would bet that Saki or at least Miranda would commit suicide/seppuku as soon as they saw that it's Yousuke and Dylan that they fought? I know it's futile if they're revived AND immortal, but there's nothing wrong in asking that, isn't it?
2a. Oosoru Tsukune, eh? I wonder who is insane enough to made him a vessel for Oomagatsu? Unless if it's Ikutsuki.
b. Yes, i mispelt his name to Ootsuru instead of Oosoru.
c. And i think you need to try to ask a Kuzunoha, Margaret. Because their ancestor had met Yasomagatsu Hinokami in the past.
d. Hm... that reminds me. What is Chaos' opinion on Oomagatsu anyway?
e. I hope the alternatice you were talking about is just allying with the Crimson Room and not something worse than that.
3a. If they are clearly stalking Yuu and Dylan with 40 people or so, how could no one including the police notice it?
b. I guess Dylan teach Yuu to not be too fettered about potentially killing anuone, right? *sighs*
c. BA? What is that? And why it was called Samoan? Was it really has something to do with Samoan Islands.
d. Hm... why the deaths are 'pointless' here?
4a. Uh... guard, you know that Spitz isn't locked, right? *facepalm*
b. Still, even if i can't guess who he is, i cannot help myself to be dreaded on whoever Spitz looking for.
c. I bet Oomagatsu would make sure that they can only attack and completely muted them. Now if only there's Heaven's Door here... *whistles*
d. Maybe you really shouldn't sleep, Dylan. Who knows about anyone who is smart enough to try assassinate you within your sleep?
Hm... i agree on the part about building things slow, that's good for the pacing. And what's War and Peace? *blank* Oh yeah, that book, it got mentioned in Persona One Last Promise once. So i guess that book is around 750K words and 1225 pages then, i see. Well, i guess that's all for now, gotta take a break before doing the next IDBH Chapter, Ciao and Keep Update!
P.S.: I just noticed that your profile on FF said that you're Italian. So i need to ask something, are you an Italian-American?
Oh shit, just when a new IDBH chapter is around the corner. Bad timing man... bad timing... oh well, time to review then. *sighs*
1a. Question, are the elite members aware that Oomagatsu is just using them as a sacrifice to begin with? And i thought all of their killing spree has gaining enough sacrifices for that.
b. Watching Teenage Miranda here is weird man, revived or not. But why it has to be teenagers? I can also ask the same for the revived members of Omega Franchise.
c. And no, no matter how you would put it, i wouldn't count Saki and Miranda as antagonists... even if they are Edo Tenseis... unless if they are also brainwashed.
d. Hm... how much i would bet that Saki or at least Miranda would commit suicide/seppuku as soon as they saw that it's Yousuke and Dylan that they fought? I know it's futile if they're revived AND immortal, but there's nothing wrong in asking that, isn't it?
2a. Oosoru Tsukune, eh? I wonder who is insane enough to made him a vessel for Oomagatsu? Unless if it's Ikutsuki.
b. Yes, i mispelt his name to Ootsuru instead of Oosoru.
c. And i think you need to try to ask a Kuzunoha, Margaret. Because their ancestor had met Yasomagatsu Hinokami in the past.
d. Hm... that reminds me. What is Chaos' opinion on Oomagatsu anyway?
e. I hope the alternatice you were talking about is just allying with the Crimson Room and not something worse than that.
3a. If they are clearly stalking Yuu and Dylan with 40 people or so, how could no one including the police notice it?
b. I guess Dylan teach Yuu to not be too fettered about potentially killing anuone, right? *sighs*
c. BA? What is that? And why it was called Samoan? Was it really has something to do with Samoan Islands.
d. Hm... why the deaths are 'pointless' here?
4a. Uh... guard, you know that Spitz isn't locked, right? *facepalm*
b. Still, even if i can't guess who he is, i cannot help myself to be dreaded on whoever Spitz looking for.
c. I bet Oomagatsu would make sure that they can only attack and completely muted them. Now if only there's Heaven's Door here... *whistles*
d. Maybe you really shouldn't sleep, Dylan. Who knows about anyone who is smart enough to try assassinate you within your sleep?
Hm... i agree on the part about building things slow, that's good for the pacing. And what's War and Peace? *blank* Oh yeah, that book, it got mentioned in Persona One Last Promise once. So i guess that book is around 750K words and 1225 pages then, i see. Well, i guess that's all for now, gotta take a break before doing the next IDBH Chapter, Ciao and Keep Update!
P.S.: I just noticed that your profile on FF said that you're Italian. So i need to ask something, are you an Italian-American?
11/8/2018 c185 RosyMiranto18
Hm, that is a surprise. Well, I guess I don’t have anything to say today so let’s just get to it. Although, I need to ask something, who is the one who technically rightfully owns Mayonaka, Izanami, Teddie, or is it someone else? And no, Oomagatsu isn’t counted.
1a. You know, I really almost asked about Hollow Forest until I remembered that it got destroyed. Although, how about Kotone’s Dungeon, Fortress of Hatred and also Monochrome Forest?
b. Also, I need to ask, why the Twisted Shopping District specifically? As I think Fortress of Hatred or Monochrome Forest makes more sense narrative-wise.
c. *shudders* Okay, I don’t want to imagine where did they got these sacrifices, but I can’t help myself but to ask.
d. You know, they made an imbecilic mistake here. If they are also using those sacrifices to take control and seal Mayonaka, then why they allowed the SoT to get in and fight them?
2a. Somehow, I disappointed that you didn’t show them doing ‘it’ in the end of the last chapter. *sighs*
b. Yes, Dylan, the Midnight Channel is back. *deadpan*
c. Oh yeah… then how could you are exempt from said rules? Is it just because you have no affiliation with either of them?
d. Somehow Yukiko, I was questioning whether Oomagatsu also contacted Yuu along with Dylan.
3a. *sweatdrop* Look, I know the rooftop is the most secretive you can get in the school, but can you think of another meeting place that is inside.
b. I think Kotone still counts as Lust for Power, even if it’s for something else.
c. Yeah… I wouldn’t be surprised if Yuu is Izanagi’s reincarnation or something like that at this point.
4a. And where did that temple come from?!
b. Uh… I check the recap, specifically chapter 162 and I found that there’s someone called Wesley, Wesley Coyle, a member of Isshaku’s Killer Club. Why did you choose the same name and is this unintentional?
c. Wait, have I noticed why there are no woman in Omega Franchise? And I think I could ask the same for Isshaku’s Killer Club. It feels jarring for me when I think about it.
5a. So that answers it, the murders are randomly and sporadically happening across the world. Even though I know each TV is a portal to different places in Mayonaka, that doesn’t leave the question of how the Omega Franchise can leave while at it seems, Teddie is the only one who can summon the exit- oh, that answers it.
b. And I guess the frustration is contagious, Yuu.
c. Wait a second, if Oomagatsu can create the exit… does that mean he and Teddie has a mysterious connection in some way? I’m dreading the answer, but I honestly hope that there is a connection between them.
d. Yeah, belief, just throw some newly-created meatbuns instead of people, and the sacrifices are gone.
e. So… the sacrifices are either the Seekers of Truth or the Omega Franchise. No matter which side who won, you would still won? Tch, I guess this ‘game’ is rigged from the beginning, remind me of a certain sinner.
f. To be honest, those lightning and mountains are going to be good effect… or traps *sighs*.
Well, I guess that’s all for today. So yeah, see you later and Keep Update! Although we might be talking about IDBH a little bit once Sunday comes.
Hm, that is a surprise. Well, I guess I don’t have anything to say today so let’s just get to it. Although, I need to ask something, who is the one who technically rightfully owns Mayonaka, Izanami, Teddie, or is it someone else? And no, Oomagatsu isn’t counted.
1a. You know, I really almost asked about Hollow Forest until I remembered that it got destroyed. Although, how about Kotone’s Dungeon, Fortress of Hatred and also Monochrome Forest?
b. Also, I need to ask, why the Twisted Shopping District specifically? As I think Fortress of Hatred or Monochrome Forest makes more sense narrative-wise.
c. *shudders* Okay, I don’t want to imagine where did they got these sacrifices, but I can’t help myself but to ask.
d. You know, they made an imbecilic mistake here. If they are also using those sacrifices to take control and seal Mayonaka, then why they allowed the SoT to get in and fight them?
2a. Somehow, I disappointed that you didn’t show them doing ‘it’ in the end of the last chapter. *sighs*
b. Yes, Dylan, the Midnight Channel is back. *deadpan*
c. Oh yeah… then how could you are exempt from said rules? Is it just because you have no affiliation with either of them?
d. Somehow Yukiko, I was questioning whether Oomagatsu also contacted Yuu along with Dylan.
3a. *sweatdrop* Look, I know the rooftop is the most secretive you can get in the school, but can you think of another meeting place that is inside.
b. I think Kotone still counts as Lust for Power, even if it’s for something else.
c. Yeah… I wouldn’t be surprised if Yuu is Izanagi’s reincarnation or something like that at this point.
4a. And where did that temple come from?!
b. Uh… I check the recap, specifically chapter 162 and I found that there’s someone called Wesley, Wesley Coyle, a member of Isshaku’s Killer Club. Why did you choose the same name and is this unintentional?
c. Wait, have I noticed why there are no woman in Omega Franchise? And I think I could ask the same for Isshaku’s Killer Club. It feels jarring for me when I think about it.
5a. So that answers it, the murders are randomly and sporadically happening across the world. Even though I know each TV is a portal to different places in Mayonaka, that doesn’t leave the question of how the Omega Franchise can leave while at it seems, Teddie is the only one who can summon the exit- oh, that answers it.
b. And I guess the frustration is contagious, Yuu.
c. Wait a second, if Oomagatsu can create the exit… does that mean he and Teddie has a mysterious connection in some way? I’m dreading the answer, but I honestly hope that there is a connection between them.
d. Yeah, belief, just throw some newly-created meatbuns instead of people, and the sacrifices are gone.
e. So… the sacrifices are either the Seekers of Truth or the Omega Franchise. No matter which side who won, you would still won? Tch, I guess this ‘game’ is rigged from the beginning, remind me of a certain sinner.
f. To be honest, those lightning and mountains are going to be good effect… or traps *sighs*.
Well, I guess that’s all for today. So yeah, see you later and Keep Update! Although we might be talking about IDBH a little bit once Sunday comes.
10/30/2018 c166 afterados
Good: I love that you’re bringing in older characters from previous arcs! Like I never thought we’d see Irina again, but bam, there she is! That’s awesome. (I almost forgot about her, so maybe a quick reminder of her backstory with the SoT would be good, but her existence at all in this chapter is such a huge positive!) Ha, Irina’s deadpan is great, I love the line “You certainly haven’t lost the ability to make friends,” wonderful snark. And the reasoning that the SoT give for siding with them as opposed to the Tenmyouji-Wae alliance totally makes sense - those guys absolutely can't be trusted, and it makes sense to join forces and drive them out while they still can. Zane is a bit overdramatic imo, BUT him getting Demiurge as a foil to Demogorgon is awesome, I feel like it’s going to build up to a demiurge/demogorgon fight and I can’t wait for that! (Hahaha and I love the “another undisclosed location (hoo boy)” location!)
Improvements: A few odd phrases could be modified. Why does Marie “sort of” swivel around in her chair? You could leave out the “sort of.” And Irina’s suggestion that it’d be easier for Yu’s group to talk… I disagree, having one spokesperson for the group would make things less confusing, since they talked beforehand and are thus likely on the same page. And Yu’s response doesn’t make sense to me either. He responds to [why arent the others talking?] with [because someone has been selling info about Dylan killing Mitsuo.] ...Huh? Those are unrelated comments? And Yosuke has a later comment that is really useless, saying [there are either more or less people than expected, so I don’t know if I’m disappointed or not.]. That’s… just a very silly comment to make, and doesn't add anything to the story. Also, how would Zane know about Demogorgon? It’s make more sense for Demiurge to explain it than to have Zane already know.
Good: I love that you’re bringing in older characters from previous arcs! Like I never thought we’d see Irina again, but bam, there she is! That’s awesome. (I almost forgot about her, so maybe a quick reminder of her backstory with the SoT would be good, but her existence at all in this chapter is such a huge positive!) Ha, Irina’s deadpan is great, I love the line “You certainly haven’t lost the ability to make friends,” wonderful snark. And the reasoning that the SoT give for siding with them as opposed to the Tenmyouji-Wae alliance totally makes sense - those guys absolutely can't be trusted, and it makes sense to join forces and drive them out while they still can. Zane is a bit overdramatic imo, BUT him getting Demiurge as a foil to Demogorgon is awesome, I feel like it’s going to build up to a demiurge/demogorgon fight and I can’t wait for that! (Hahaha and I love the “another undisclosed location (hoo boy)” location!)
Improvements: A few odd phrases could be modified. Why does Marie “sort of” swivel around in her chair? You could leave out the “sort of.” And Irina’s suggestion that it’d be easier for Yu’s group to talk… I disagree, having one spokesperson for the group would make things less confusing, since they talked beforehand and are thus likely on the same page. And Yu’s response doesn’t make sense to me either. He responds to [why arent the others talking?] with [because someone has been selling info about Dylan killing Mitsuo.] ...Huh? Those are unrelated comments? And Yosuke has a later comment that is really useless, saying [there are either more or less people than expected, so I don’t know if I’m disappointed or not.]. That’s… just a very silly comment to make, and doesn't add anything to the story. Also, how would Zane know about Demogorgon? It’s make more sense for Demiurge to explain it than to have Zane already know.
10/30/2018 c165 afterados
Good: I like the quick update on the school alliance between Rise and Steve, it combines a bit of plot progression with a short Rise/Steve moment, all in a nicely condensed passage. And wow, I wasn’t expecting Takeru and Laura to break up! I agree that getting her away from everything going on in Inaba isa good idea, as well and her wanting to see her parents. (This may be a bit rushed, but overall its a good move since Laura didn’t play much of a role in the story after she was rescued.) Oh snap, welcome back to the story adachi bros! This chapters full of cool surprises!
Improvements: There are a few instances in the Dojima/Daniel dialogue where you write out the exposition, and then say “Daniel provided as succinct a summary of the Demogorgon Project as he could.” But it’d be better to instead write “Daniel said” or “Daniel replied” - you don't need to summarize what just happened since you just wrote out his words. If you excluded the dialogue, then the summary is definitely good. But since it’s included, you don't need it. Ah, and that was a pretty big side step on Daniel’s part for how he knows of personas - normal research wouldn’t be able to help him find it. More explanation would be nice (though if this leads into a Daniel plot point later, ignore this). I do like that the Adachi bros are back… but this scene does reinforce for me that I have no clue what Tohru’s personality is. Sometimes he’s beyond evil, and just goes into /truly disgusting/ territory, and then sometimes he’s more of an antihero. More clarity/consistency on this would be nice. Smaller notes on the Adachi bros scene: How does Dojima know Adachi is calling before he speaks, since the phone he’s using is stolen? And how does he know about all the stuff that’s been happening outside with the triad, and yakuza, etc? It’s totally possible he knows from rumors through the prison grapevine, but explaining as much would be good.
Good: I like the quick update on the school alliance between Rise and Steve, it combines a bit of plot progression with a short Rise/Steve moment, all in a nicely condensed passage. And wow, I wasn’t expecting Takeru and Laura to break up! I agree that getting her away from everything going on in Inaba isa good idea, as well and her wanting to see her parents. (This may be a bit rushed, but overall its a good move since Laura didn’t play much of a role in the story after she was rescued.) Oh snap, welcome back to the story adachi bros! This chapters full of cool surprises!
Improvements: There are a few instances in the Dojima/Daniel dialogue where you write out the exposition, and then say “Daniel provided as succinct a summary of the Demogorgon Project as he could.” But it’d be better to instead write “Daniel said” or “Daniel replied” - you don't need to summarize what just happened since you just wrote out his words. If you excluded the dialogue, then the summary is definitely good. But since it’s included, you don't need it. Ah, and that was a pretty big side step on Daniel’s part for how he knows of personas - normal research wouldn’t be able to help him find it. More explanation would be nice (though if this leads into a Daniel plot point later, ignore this). I do like that the Adachi bros are back… but this scene does reinforce for me that I have no clue what Tohru’s personality is. Sometimes he’s beyond evil, and just goes into /truly disgusting/ territory, and then sometimes he’s more of an antihero. More clarity/consistency on this would be nice. Smaller notes on the Adachi bros scene: How does Dojima know Adachi is calling before he speaks, since the phone he’s using is stolen? And how does he know about all the stuff that’s been happening outside with the triad, and yakuza, etc? It’s totally possible he knows from rumors through the prison grapevine, but explaining as much would be good.
10/29/2018 c164 afterados
Good: I haven't mentioned it yet, but I’m /so stoked/ that you’ve cut down a lot on the sex. It makes these chapters much more enjoyable when the characters are just talking and not ALWAYS leaping at each other! Props here for Marie and Yu just going to sleep in the same bed without having sex. Haha oh man, I love the line “it was at that point Kotone knew he fucked up!” It should probably be an improvement tbh, since it’s kinda out of tone with the scene… but it cracked me up, so its a positive for me! Also, cool idea for Kotone to have a pre-sent message on his phone, but I’d like to know how it was sent! And oh boy, two new groups are being introduced now with the X-Laws and the Wae Triad… again, it’s crazy how many ideas you’re cramming into this story!
Improvements: I am still confused as to why Kotone wouldn’t tell the Tenmyouji’s his goals, or why they weren’t public knowledge in the first place. Since Kotone is clearly Mitsuo’s brother, and he told them that Dylan killed Mitsuo… I feel like it’s not a secret. Plus, they’re after the same thing anyways, so why would Kotone even want to keep it a secret? Moving on, Demogorgon is cool, BUT it definitely needs more background/explanation for this story. I know (just from google) that it’s a demon in the other games, but it seems to me to be less like a persona and more like a demon. Basically, I’d just like more explanation for why it can eat people, or why Kotone can immediately summon it outside the TV world with no practice. Last, I’m wondering if it’s getting to be too many groups involved now, since I’m having trouble keeping track of some of them… but, despite that, I’m interested to see how this all plays out, and how the groups will act and react with each other!
Good: I haven't mentioned it yet, but I’m /so stoked/ that you’ve cut down a lot on the sex. It makes these chapters much more enjoyable when the characters are just talking and not ALWAYS leaping at each other! Props here for Marie and Yu just going to sleep in the same bed without having sex. Haha oh man, I love the line “it was at that point Kotone knew he fucked up!” It should probably be an improvement tbh, since it’s kinda out of tone with the scene… but it cracked me up, so its a positive for me! Also, cool idea for Kotone to have a pre-sent message on his phone, but I’d like to know how it was sent! And oh boy, two new groups are being introduced now with the X-Laws and the Wae Triad… again, it’s crazy how many ideas you’re cramming into this story!
Improvements: I am still confused as to why Kotone wouldn’t tell the Tenmyouji’s his goals, or why they weren’t public knowledge in the first place. Since Kotone is clearly Mitsuo’s brother, and he told them that Dylan killed Mitsuo… I feel like it’s not a secret. Plus, they’re after the same thing anyways, so why would Kotone even want to keep it a secret? Moving on, Demogorgon is cool, BUT it definitely needs more background/explanation for this story. I know (just from google) that it’s a demon in the other games, but it seems to me to be less like a persona and more like a demon. Basically, I’d just like more explanation for why it can eat people, or why Kotone can immediately summon it outside the TV world with no practice. Last, I’m wondering if it’s getting to be too many groups involved now, since I’m having trouble keeping track of some of them… but, despite that, I’m interested to see how this all plays out, and how the groups will act and react with each other!
10/29/2018 c163 afterados
Good: I still really don’t like all the gore-porn stuff that happens from time to time in this fic… but having said that, /great/ scene with Zane showing up and kicking butt. And his motives, as explained later in the chapter, are fantastic because they totally explain his actions in a believable way! Zane doesn’t want to be dishonorable because he’s trying to bring honor to his family name. That explains why he didn’t immediately kill Kotone when he had the chance. Oho, and as Russ mentions, even more crime families in the area… I smell a mob war coming. And I will say - I am a /big/ fan of the other High Schools coming together to potentially take down the family. It’s still really ridiculous, but hey, the Seekers of Truth took down gods, who knows what these other high schoolers can do!?
Improvements: I am trying to hold back judgment for long term things, but I have a bunch of shorter-term improvements this chapter (sorry, I know this isn’t exactly fun to read!). First, doesn’t Mitch’s deal with Dylan mean a lot less now that the info is out in the open? I’m presuming everyone will get to know about Dylan killing Mitsuo, so expunging his record may be meaningless now. That isn’t my “improvement”, in fact I think that’s a really awesome twist! But I do think that fact (that the meaning of the deal is different now that the fact Dylan killed Mitsuo is out) should be mentioned. I also think that Yukiko is a bit inconsistent between this chapter and the previous one - last chapter, she says that they should consider “putting aside conventional morality,” but in this chapter she’s shocked that Dylan thinks killing Kotone is the only way. That seems contradictory to me. It’s also worth mentioning that the man in the mask (Zane) is, well, in a mask, so it might be hard to tell if he’s “sneering” or “smiling”, etc. as described in that section where he’s introduced. Also, while I love Zane’s motivations, I do wonder why he showed up in the first place? Since he was too late to stop Kotone from killing that person, he just showed up to mess up Kotone and leave, thus blowing some of the element of surprise he could’ve gotten by revealing himself later. Another note, why would the Tenmyouji family be upset that Kotone is using them for revenge for Mitsuo? Not to mention, it’s mentioned later in the same chapter that they actually know /because of Kotone/ that Dylan killed Mitsuo, so I think they could connect the dots. And dude, I don’t think the Tenmyouji family would be worried about “exposing their plans,” in reference for why they wouldn’t just let Isshaku win the election. Everyone seems to know the new principal is in their pocket, and their crime activity in the area has been extensive and noticed - if they wanted to lay low, they’d need to undo a LOT of what’s already done. In fact, a few paragraphs later, Tenmyouki Oroku /comes out on stage/ with the new principal! And then threatens the high school! Not exactly laying low.
Good: I still really don’t like all the gore-porn stuff that happens from time to time in this fic… but having said that, /great/ scene with Zane showing up and kicking butt. And his motives, as explained later in the chapter, are fantastic because they totally explain his actions in a believable way! Zane doesn’t want to be dishonorable because he’s trying to bring honor to his family name. That explains why he didn’t immediately kill Kotone when he had the chance. Oho, and as Russ mentions, even more crime families in the area… I smell a mob war coming. And I will say - I am a /big/ fan of the other High Schools coming together to potentially take down the family. It’s still really ridiculous, but hey, the Seekers of Truth took down gods, who knows what these other high schoolers can do!?
Improvements: I am trying to hold back judgment for long term things, but I have a bunch of shorter-term improvements this chapter (sorry, I know this isn’t exactly fun to read!). First, doesn’t Mitch’s deal with Dylan mean a lot less now that the info is out in the open? I’m presuming everyone will get to know about Dylan killing Mitsuo, so expunging his record may be meaningless now. That isn’t my “improvement”, in fact I think that’s a really awesome twist! But I do think that fact (that the meaning of the deal is different now that the fact Dylan killed Mitsuo is out) should be mentioned. I also think that Yukiko is a bit inconsistent between this chapter and the previous one - last chapter, she says that they should consider “putting aside conventional morality,” but in this chapter she’s shocked that Dylan thinks killing Kotone is the only way. That seems contradictory to me. It’s also worth mentioning that the man in the mask (Zane) is, well, in a mask, so it might be hard to tell if he’s “sneering” or “smiling”, etc. as described in that section where he’s introduced. Also, while I love Zane’s motivations, I do wonder why he showed up in the first place? Since he was too late to stop Kotone from killing that person, he just showed up to mess up Kotone and leave, thus blowing some of the element of surprise he could’ve gotten by revealing himself later. Another note, why would the Tenmyouji family be upset that Kotone is using them for revenge for Mitsuo? Not to mention, it’s mentioned later in the same chapter that they actually know /because of Kotone/ that Dylan killed Mitsuo, so I think they could connect the dots. And dude, I don’t think the Tenmyouji family would be worried about “exposing their plans,” in reference for why they wouldn’t just let Isshaku win the election. Everyone seems to know the new principal is in their pocket, and their crime activity in the area has been extensive and noticed - if they wanted to lay low, they’d need to undo a LOT of what’s already done. In fact, a few paragraphs later, Tenmyouki Oroku /comes out on stage/ with the new principal! And then threatens the high school! Not exactly laying low.
10/29/2018 c162 afterados
Good: Always love some Dylan introspection (with Yukiko). As he says, the “Old Dylan” would have solved the initial problem much faster… but just killing/incapacitating people doesn’t /really/ solve more problems than it creates in the long run, as Dylan has learned/is learning. Hm, and interesting that Yukiko’s talking about putting aside conventional morality… wonder what she’s thinking? (Yeah Travis gets me! Why would a Yakuza family take over a high school? Unless they’re trying to fully destroy everything about Dylan’s life, which is probably their goal. So… I just answered my own question. Nevermind.) And I like that Dylan and Kotone are both taken to the police, and I like Dylan’s deal with Mitch - cool opportunities for new story stuff!
Improvements: I think this is just my personal preference, but I don’t really like how much Dylan’s insults are so gratuitous (and oddly gay-focused?). To me it seems a bit much, even for an antihero like Dylan. (After reading over this review again - I’m hesitant about including this as an “improvement” at all, since it really is my opinion - not necessarily anything you need to do about it, Dylan doesn’t /need/ to be anything you don’t want him to be. I’ve decided to include my opinion just so you know it, though again, it’s just my opinion - this isn’t as much of an “improvement” as “thing I’m not a fan of.”) Also - when Dylan sees Mitch after he takes out the assassin, Mitch couldn’t know that the assassin and the police officer had been killed since he hadn’t left his (Mitch's) office yet, right? (Also, as you mentioned in the AN, some parts of this were disjointed… but, overall, it really wasn’t that disjointed, so I wouldn’t worry that much about it.)
Good: Always love some Dylan introspection (with Yukiko). As he says, the “Old Dylan” would have solved the initial problem much faster… but just killing/incapacitating people doesn’t /really/ solve more problems than it creates in the long run, as Dylan has learned/is learning. Hm, and interesting that Yukiko’s talking about putting aside conventional morality… wonder what she’s thinking? (Yeah Travis gets me! Why would a Yakuza family take over a high school? Unless they’re trying to fully destroy everything about Dylan’s life, which is probably their goal. So… I just answered my own question. Nevermind.) And I like that Dylan and Kotone are both taken to the police, and I like Dylan’s deal with Mitch - cool opportunities for new story stuff!
Improvements: I think this is just my personal preference, but I don’t really like how much Dylan’s insults are so gratuitous (and oddly gay-focused?). To me it seems a bit much, even for an antihero like Dylan. (After reading over this review again - I’m hesitant about including this as an “improvement” at all, since it really is my opinion - not necessarily anything you need to do about it, Dylan doesn’t /need/ to be anything you don’t want him to be. I’ve decided to include my opinion just so you know it, though again, it’s just my opinion - this isn’t as much of an “improvement” as “thing I’m not a fan of.”) Also - when Dylan sees Mitch after he takes out the assassin, Mitch couldn’t know that the assassin and the police officer had been killed since he hadn’t left his (Mitch's) office yet, right? (Also, as you mentioned in the AN, some parts of this were disjointed… but, overall, it really wasn’t that disjointed, so I wouldn’t worry that much about it.)
10/22/2018 c184 RosyMiranto18
Wait, this is the Valentine’s Chapter. Somehow, I am disappointed and expected it to be at least 5000 words… unless if you planned to make this two chapters instead of one. Speaking of expectation, I honestly thought the Valentine’s Chapter is in the next one and not this one. But oh well… I guess beggars can’t be choosers. Well, time to review now *checking my checklist* there’s so much to check here.
1a. Thank you for everyone they cared about, indeed. Thank you for making that idea a thing, Rise.
b. I somehow wanted Yuu to joked and said “It’s ‘Give Your Big Bro Chocolate’ Day”.
c. Hahaha, and don’t forget about your Living Chocolate, Marie XD
2a. Yuu is #1 again, figures, as obvious as Marquez winning in a MotoGP race, much to my dismay.
b. Ouch, care to tell me how or why did your rank slipped, Dylan?
3a. Speaking of which, did Kanami send you a chocolate, Travis?
b. Also, Takeru, did Laura (not S. Arseid, but Monroe. Too much playing Cold Steel here) gives you anything as well?
c. Uh… can you make that Cooking Showdown scene between Yousuke and Chie someday in the future?
4a. I honestly still wondering why the beach is deserted at that time, considering that it’s likely to be a popular dating spot.
b. To be honest, I didn’t know Yukiko making quips.
c. And where did you get that bike, Dylan? I’m imagining it to be either a Streetfighter, Touring Bike, Cruiser Bike, or Chopper.
d. No Living Chocolate, no…
I guess you make this chapter to be more heartwarming than funny, much to my disappointment. And please put the lemon as a separate fic soon enough. Well, I got to hide my own sadness, so yeah, Keep Update.
Wait, this is the Valentine’s Chapter. Somehow, I am disappointed and expected it to be at least 5000 words… unless if you planned to make this two chapters instead of one. Speaking of expectation, I honestly thought the Valentine’s Chapter is in the next one and not this one. But oh well… I guess beggars can’t be choosers. Well, time to review now *checking my checklist* there’s so much to check here.
1a. Thank you for everyone they cared about, indeed. Thank you for making that idea a thing, Rise.
b. I somehow wanted Yuu to joked and said “It’s ‘Give Your Big Bro Chocolate’ Day”.
c. Hahaha, and don’t forget about your Living Chocolate, Marie XD
2a. Yuu is #1 again, figures, as obvious as Marquez winning in a MotoGP race, much to my dismay.
b. Ouch, care to tell me how or why did your rank slipped, Dylan?
3a. Speaking of which, did Kanami send you a chocolate, Travis?
b. Also, Takeru, did Laura (not S. Arseid, but Monroe. Too much playing Cold Steel here) gives you anything as well?
c. Uh… can you make that Cooking Showdown scene between Yousuke and Chie someday in the future?
4a. I honestly still wondering why the beach is deserted at that time, considering that it’s likely to be a popular dating spot.
b. To be honest, I didn’t know Yukiko making quips.
c. And where did you get that bike, Dylan? I’m imagining it to be either a Streetfighter, Touring Bike, Cruiser Bike, or Chopper.
d. No Living Chocolate, no…
I guess you make this chapter to be more heartwarming than funny, much to my disappointment. And please put the lemon as a separate fic soon enough. Well, I got to hide my own sadness, so yeah, Keep Update.
10/7/2018 c161 afterados
Good: Interesting way to show the extent to which the poor principal was killed, with the morgue scene. And in general, good plot progression with the intro to the bounties on everyone’s heads introduced in the same chapter as the first assassin. I also enjoyed the little character moments here, Yu and Marie’s short dialogue (and Marie’s snarky “that doesn’t sound very good”) were my favorite.
Improvements: The only new character oddity here was the assassin not immediately killing Yu, but hey: maybe as Yukiko/Dylan mention, they thought a high schooler would be a pushover.
Good: Interesting way to show the extent to which the poor principal was killed, with the morgue scene. And in general, good plot progression with the intro to the bounties on everyone’s heads introduced in the same chapter as the first assassin. I also enjoyed the little character moments here, Yu and Marie’s short dialogue (and Marie’s snarky “that doesn’t sound very good”) were my favorite.
Improvements: The only new character oddity here was the assassin not immediately killing Yu, but hey: maybe as Yukiko/Dylan mention, they thought a high schooler would be a pushover.
10/7/2018 c160 afterados
Good: Super solid that Dylan’s really thinking about doing the right thing now. And just as solid that everyone’s rationally thinking about what would be the best choice - Dylan staying free and taking them down does seem to be the best choice, since the police and law enforcement can’t seem to catch Isshaku and the others.
Improvements: Given how outlandish things are getting (and my previous mistakes in judging too soon) I’m gonna wait to see how this arc plays out before I start really critiquing. (But atm, I will still say I don’t get how Isshaku hasn’t been caught yet, since he still keeps on showing up to school.)
Good: Super solid that Dylan’s really thinking about doing the right thing now. And just as solid that everyone’s rationally thinking about what would be the best choice - Dylan staying free and taking them down does seem to be the best choice, since the police and law enforcement can’t seem to catch Isshaku and the others.
Improvements: Given how outlandish things are getting (and my previous mistakes in judging too soon) I’m gonna wait to see how this arc plays out before I start really critiquing. (But atm, I will still say I don’t get how Isshaku hasn’t been caught yet, since he still keeps on showing up to school.)
10/5/2018 c183 RosyMiranto18
Hm… a hidden reference, eh? I am thinking it has something to do with a. Kingdom Hearts, b. what Aki is going to do in the next chapter of IDBH, c. RA Kartini’s compilation letters entitled “Out of Darkness to Light” (as I am an Indonesian), or d. The Smiths’ “There is a Light that Never Goes Out”. Well, I guess I have to wait until the next chapter for the full answer then.
Anyway, I think I understand now why did you take so long for this chapter, so let’s just get to review now.
1a. Haha, I know the situation, but it’s still amusing to see everyone’s preparing to enjoy themselves whilst a disaster is approaching, even though I know they’re preparing for both.
b. *groan* Here we go again… Mitsuo… question, what IF we told Mitsuo that it’s actually Isshaku? IF we CAN? *sighs*
c. What? Why Switzerland of all places? I thought it’s Neutral Land.
d. Hm… why did you say ‘ironically’? Did Calloway expected the Government to control him more upon his promotion to the Taskforce Director.
e. You know, I wouldn’t be surprised if Omega Franchise sniff Asuka or any other Senran Kagura Cast’s connection to the SoT, but I we know it’s a good thing that they didn’t notice.
2a. Okay, two questions, how could Mitsuo gain access to Dylan’s number even if he can hack more or less. Second, yes, I’m pretty sure there’s no one that can be ‘M’ other than Mitsuo, is that correct? Though IF it is not Mitsuo, then who else with M for an initial?
b. Then again, we saw Roz got revived, we saw Shinji got revived, we saw Strega and some other old foes (in more ways than one), so Mitsuo getting revived is no surprise. I mean, the number of people being revived here is much larger than IDBH.
3a. Uh… what kind of weapons the massacred has again? Considering that with Invoker, one shot/touch alone is One-hit Kill, what kind of weapon that is capable enough to counter it?
b. So there are indeed Willing Non-revived Omega Franchise members, after all… sighs… okay.
c. Onodera Kirei… I figured if you named him after Kotomine Kirei. -_-
d. Sighs… can they eat regular foods like a regular person? If not, then they are really zombies, both figuratively and literally.
e. Reckoning, another nod to Camellia of Constancy again, perhaps?
f. I know Mitsuo essentially owed and loyal to Oomagatsu now, but I expected him to be too defiant to call anyone Master, even if it’s something (no, not someone) like Oomagatsu.
Yeah, despite the prospect of extending this Arc for a while, I think this version is indeed turned out much better. After all, the plot of ‘Dylan getting kidnapped or falling into an obvious trap for no reason’ is getting overdone for me (I blame you, Dr. Cuvier) And don’t worry about a shorter chapter like this, I’m completely fine with it.
Anyway, I’m pretty sure you have some questions on the latest IDBH chapter, particularly with the Gekkoukan Scene (which is actually per my request). If you have any question, just tell me what they are on PM, otherwise, I’m going to reply a part your review instead.
Well, I guess that’s pretty much it for today. See you in the PM and Keep Update!
P.S.: Here are some kanjis of characters appearing on that aforementioned scene. Beware, some characters are going be more important than you think. If you want to ask anything about the meaning or anything, feel free to do so too.
Eshigawa Riku:画師川 陸
Hikari Sora:光 空
Honda Kuroshio:本多 黒潮
Kimura Aki:木村 秋
Maeda Kiyoshi:前田 清
Midoriyama Amaya:緑山 天矢
Minamata Yamaiko:水俣 病子
Nagano Umi:長野 海
Reiki Asuka:玲綺 飛鳥
Saitou Daijirou:斎藤 大二郎
Saitou Michimitsu:斎藤 道三
Shimizu Kazada:清水 風田
Shion Tomoya:紫苑 友家
Tomochika Shiori:友近 潮理
Tomonori Ueda:友則 上田
Yoshida Takahashi:吉田 鷹橋
Hm… a hidden reference, eh? I am thinking it has something to do with a. Kingdom Hearts, b. what Aki is going to do in the next chapter of IDBH, c. RA Kartini’s compilation letters entitled “Out of Darkness to Light” (as I am an Indonesian), or d. The Smiths’ “There is a Light that Never Goes Out”. Well, I guess I have to wait until the next chapter for the full answer then.
Anyway, I think I understand now why did you take so long for this chapter, so let’s just get to review now.
1a. Haha, I know the situation, but it’s still amusing to see everyone’s preparing to enjoy themselves whilst a disaster is approaching, even though I know they’re preparing for both.
b. *groan* Here we go again… Mitsuo… question, what IF we told Mitsuo that it’s actually Isshaku? IF we CAN? *sighs*
c. What? Why Switzerland of all places? I thought it’s Neutral Land.
d. Hm… why did you say ‘ironically’? Did Calloway expected the Government to control him more upon his promotion to the Taskforce Director.
e. You know, I wouldn’t be surprised if Omega Franchise sniff Asuka or any other Senran Kagura Cast’s connection to the SoT, but I we know it’s a good thing that they didn’t notice.
2a. Okay, two questions, how could Mitsuo gain access to Dylan’s number even if he can hack more or less. Second, yes, I’m pretty sure there’s no one that can be ‘M’ other than Mitsuo, is that correct? Though IF it is not Mitsuo, then who else with M for an initial?
b. Then again, we saw Roz got revived, we saw Shinji got revived, we saw Strega and some other old foes (in more ways than one), so Mitsuo getting revived is no surprise. I mean, the number of people being revived here is much larger than IDBH.
3a. Uh… what kind of weapons the massacred has again? Considering that with Invoker, one shot/touch alone is One-hit Kill, what kind of weapon that is capable enough to counter it?
b. So there are indeed Willing Non-revived Omega Franchise members, after all… sighs… okay.
c. Onodera Kirei… I figured if you named him after Kotomine Kirei. -_-
d. Sighs… can they eat regular foods like a regular person? If not, then they are really zombies, both figuratively and literally.
e. Reckoning, another nod to Camellia of Constancy again, perhaps?
f. I know Mitsuo essentially owed and loyal to Oomagatsu now, but I expected him to be too defiant to call anyone Master, even if it’s something (no, not someone) like Oomagatsu.
Yeah, despite the prospect of extending this Arc for a while, I think this version is indeed turned out much better. After all, the plot of ‘Dylan getting kidnapped or falling into an obvious trap for no reason’ is getting overdone for me (I blame you, Dr. Cuvier) And don’t worry about a shorter chapter like this, I’m completely fine with it.
Anyway, I’m pretty sure you have some questions on the latest IDBH chapter, particularly with the Gekkoukan Scene (which is actually per my request). If you have any question, just tell me what they are on PM, otherwise, I’m going to reply a part your review instead.
Well, I guess that’s pretty much it for today. See you in the PM and Keep Update!
P.S.: Here are some kanjis of characters appearing on that aforementioned scene. Beware, some characters are going be more important than you think. If you want to ask anything about the meaning or anything, feel free to do so too.
Eshigawa Riku:画師川 陸
Hikari Sora:光 空
Honda Kuroshio:本多 黒潮
Kimura Aki:木村 秋
Maeda Kiyoshi:前田 清
Midoriyama Amaya:緑山 天矢
Minamata Yamaiko:水俣 病子
Nagano Umi:長野 海
Reiki Asuka:玲綺 飛鳥
Saitou Daijirou:斎藤 大二郎
Saitou Michimitsu:斎藤 道三
Shimizu Kazada:清水 風田
Shion Tomoya:紫苑 友家
Tomochika Shiori:友近 潮理
Tomonori Ueda:友則 上田
Yoshida Takahashi:吉田 鷹橋
9/24/2018 c159 afterados
Good: Wow. Ok. I need to apologize.
I did NOT expect Dylan’s recent killing of people to be brought up again in this way, not to mention his past murder of Mitsuo. I thought it was going to be just another casual murder that wasn’t really mentioned again but… I was really, really wrong.
The general premise of this whole scene (I mean, c’mon, WHY IS ISSHAKU EVEN ALLOWED IN SCHOOL) is totally absurd, and the fact that his whole gang shows up to beat up the other candidates is even more so. But despite that, I’m really stoked that the villains are showing many of the awful things Dylan has done in the past, and in such a public venue, since it reminds everyone (audience included) that Dylan may be our protagonist (at least, one of them), but he is definitely not always a nice guy. Really good job here! (Not to mention I just noticed the line about the IPD coming, so you also addressed my complaint in the last chapter about law enforcement! Oh man, dude, this is awesome for me!)
Improvements: The premise as a whole was a bit absurdist, as mentioned above, but honestly I’m betting that was the intention anyways!
Good: Wow. Ok. I need to apologize.
I did NOT expect Dylan’s recent killing of people to be brought up again in this way, not to mention his past murder of Mitsuo. I thought it was going to be just another casual murder that wasn’t really mentioned again but… I was really, really wrong.
The general premise of this whole scene (I mean, c’mon, WHY IS ISSHAKU EVEN ALLOWED IN SCHOOL) is totally absurd, and the fact that his whole gang shows up to beat up the other candidates is even more so. But despite that, I’m really stoked that the villains are showing many of the awful things Dylan has done in the past, and in such a public venue, since it reminds everyone (audience included) that Dylan may be our protagonist (at least, one of them), but he is definitely not always a nice guy. Really good job here! (Not to mention I just noticed the line about the IPD coming, so you also addressed my complaint in the last chapter about law enforcement! Oh man, dude, this is awesome for me!)
Improvements: The premise as a whole was a bit absurdist, as mentioned above, but honestly I’m betting that was the intention anyways!