for Strike Witches: Multi-Universe6/15/2014 c1 VSX-2018
Extra review to Chapter 3.
I'd like to see the otherwolders explain to the witches' about their otherworld's counterparts of the WWII aces.
I also want to see the 501st try out the pants that the witches and wizards from the other reality wear and test it out on their Striker Units. If these pants worked, Minna need the permissions from the otherworld officers and officials about requests to send some of these pants to Neue Karlsland Technisch Ministerium, so that the Neue Karlsland scientists and Ursula Hartmann can replicate, create and manufactured these pants that allows the witches to flow their magic to their Striker Units, but Ursula will test these pants first, and then gave it to other witches squadron to test it out. These new magic pants will be given to all witches in the future, and the first witches squadron to receive these pants will be the 501st JFW.
Hopefully the other world witches and wizards have an extra sets of magic pants.
Extra review to Chapter 3.
I'd like to see the otherwolders explain to the witches' about their otherworld's counterparts of the WWII aces.
I also want to see the 501st try out the pants that the witches and wizards from the other reality wear and test it out on their Striker Units. If these pants worked, Minna need the permissions from the otherworld officers and officials about requests to send some of these pants to Neue Karlsland Technisch Ministerium, so that the Neue Karlsland scientists and Ursula Hartmann can replicate, create and manufactured these pants that allows the witches to flow their magic to their Striker Units, but Ursula will test these pants first, and then gave it to other witches squadron to test it out. These new magic pants will be given to all witches in the future, and the first witches squadron to receive these pants will be the 501st JFW.
Hopefully the other world witches and wizards have an extra sets of magic pants.
6/10/2014 c3 VSX-2018
Not so bad, but there are many errors. For one, you should use the word "multiverse" instead, and maybe change the title Strike Witches: Multiverse or Strike Witches: The Multiverse or something else instead.
Yes, I wonder what would the witches be when James explain what is Hentai and JAV (Japanese Adult Video). Their reaction is of course, priceless.
Keep it up.
Not so bad, but there are many errors. For one, you should use the word "multiverse" instead, and maybe change the title Strike Witches: Multiverse or Strike Witches: The Multiverse or something else instead.
Yes, I wonder what would the witches be when James explain what is Hentai and JAV (Japanese Adult Video). Their reaction is of course, priceless.
Keep it up.
6/6/2014 c3 
1Kilo 6
...There are so many mistakes, I'm not going to even list them all. But what I can see is that 1) it's been some time since you've read or watched the series, 2) you're not using a program like Word to type these chapters out, and 3) you've got a lot of great ideas.
1Kilo 6...There are so many mistakes, I'm not going to even list them all. But what I can see is that 1) it's been some time since you've read or watched the series, 2) you're not using a program like Word to type these chapters out, and 3) you've got a lot of great ideas.
6/6/2014 c3 Warrior 318
Nice chapter, you manage to pull this story very well and add some humor in it. But still, you need to be more careful with what you wrote since I spotted few grammar mistakes here. Also, make sure you make a spell check that should keep you off the hook. Not to mention, nice chapter as well. I'm looking forward to what'll happen next in this fic. Keep it up!
Nice chapter, you manage to pull this story very well and add some humor in it. But still, you need to be more careful with what you wrote since I spotted few grammar mistakes here. Also, make sure you make a spell check that should keep you off the hook. Not to mention, nice chapter as well. I'm looking forward to what'll happen next in this fic. Keep it up!
6/1/2014 c2 VSX-2018
This chapter is great, but you still need to get a beta-reader, just in case. By the way, how good is your World History subject, because the 501st needs to learn about the other world's history, including World War I and World War II.
This chapter is great, but you still need to get a beta-reader, just in case. By the way, how good is your World History subject, because the 501st needs to learn about the other world's history, including World War I and World War II.
6/1/2014 c2 Kilo 6
Wow, how'd you screw up Hijikata's rank in a single sentence? Ensign's an officer, Petty Officer is a non-commissioned (i.e. enlisted) officer.
Militarily speaking, a rocket is any unguided, self propelled warhead. A missile is pretty much the same, but is a guided system.
Also, you got a lot of grammatical errors, despite having many sentences that are correct...
Wow, how'd you screw up Hijikata's rank in a single sentence? Ensign's an officer, Petty Officer is a non-commissioned (i.e. enlisted) officer.
Militarily speaking, a rocket is any unguided, self propelled warhead. A missile is pretty much the same, but is a guided system.
Also, you got a lot of grammatical errors, despite having many sentences that are correct...
5/30/2014 c2 asdfdfgse4q4w
Greetings from Thailand.
Well, the word "With Out" should be "Without" , "Boundariaes" to "Boundaries" and the abbreviation might be changed to "AWWB".
Other than those misspelling stuff, I like your story and can't wait for the next chapter.
Greetings from Thailand.
Well, the word "With Out" should be "Without" , "Boundariaes" to "Boundaries" and the abbreviation might be changed to "AWWB".
Other than those misspelling stuff, I like your story and can't wait for the next chapter.
5/28/2014 c1 Guest
Sweet can't wait seriously I can't get that chapter out as fast as u can manage while retaining the quality use gave this chapter.
Sweet can't wait seriously I can't get that chapter out as fast as u can manage while retaining the quality use gave this chapter.
5/26/2014 c1 1Gamerman22
Cool! I'll said the strike witches will be in for surprise. 2 thump up for this story
1Gamerman22Cool! I'll said the strike witches will be in for surprise. 2 thump up for this story