for Fate: OSG6/5/2018 c14 anon
ponies
cancer as fuck
ponies
cancer as fuck
1/29/2018 c4 dragon slayer of death 98
i hope shirou gets his tracing earlier, and finds out he's an incarnation of a sword, also hope he gets his badass bow skills, with him never missing unless he wants to from his learning of kyudo, since shirou finds it easy to throw away his sense of self when shooting, becoming the arrow
i hope shirou gets his tracing earlier, and finds out he's an incarnation of a sword, also hope he gets his badass bow skills, with him never missing unless he wants to from his learning of kyudo, since shirou finds it easy to throw away his sense of self when shooting, becoming the arrow
11/25/2016 c1 
2Kraotop
I love the concept of OSG. It's so evident but for some reason I never found something in the same vein
2KraotopI love the concept of OSG. It's so evident but for some reason I never found something in the same vein
8/29/2016 c13 Guest
umm, there is a reason why they don't share there research... its because the more people who know and use it the weaker the magic becomes... a healing mystery/spell known and used by 10 people might be able to heal all but death but that same mystery/spell known and used by 100 people and it might only be able to heal a couple of broken bones
in conclusion, there is a damn good reason they dont share there mysteries/spell/research
umm, there is a reason why they don't share there research... its because the more people who know and use it the weaker the magic becomes... a healing mystery/spell known and used by 10 people might be able to heal all but death but that same mystery/spell known and used by 100 people and it might only be able to heal a couple of broken bones
in conclusion, there is a damn good reason they dont share there mysteries/spell/research
1/10/2016 c16 jcampbellohten
Edgar says he told Sayaka everything "I've just written down" about their encounter, but he wasn't writing it down, he was telling it to Shirou and Lambda-11. That's why he addressed Shirou directly during it. I thought it was a nice stylistic choice to format his exposition to them in the same way as the journal entries rather than putting a lot of open quotes through that part.
Edgar says he told Sayaka everything "I've just written down" about their encounter, but he wasn't writing it down, he was telling it to Shirou and Lambda-11. That's why he addressed Shirou directly during it. I thought it was a nice stylistic choice to format his exposition to them in the same way as the journal entries rather than putting a lot of open quotes through that part.
1/9/2016 c11 jcampbellohten
"Everyone looked at me for a second": Everyone looked "at Shirou" or "at him" for a second. I usually ignore the spelling/grammar stuff, but that's unusual.
"Everyone looked at me for a second": Everyone looked "at Shirou" or "at him" for a second. I usually ignore the spelling/grammar stuff, but that's unusual.
1/9/2016 c7 jcampbellohten
Are we going to gradually learn the entirety of what happened to Sayaka and the fallout from that?
Are we going to gradually learn the entirety of what happened to Sayaka and the fallout from that?
1/9/2016 c5 jcampbellohten
*reads journal excerpt, looks up names* Okay, he's from Odin Sphere, never mind. Also, I'm 99% sure you mean "cerberus" rather than "Cerebus".
I like what you're doing to semi-fix Shinji and maybe keep him out of the way for the fifth war, and now how apparently Shirou and the Rin will know each other better when the time comes. Also, I may have forgotten to mention it, but I like how Rin's not going to have that whole "I have to be a properly emotionless magus" pressure weighing her down.
*reads journal excerpt, looks up names* Okay, he's from Odin Sphere, never mind. Also, I'm 99% sure you mean "cerberus" rather than "Cerebus".
I like what you're doing to semi-fix Shinji and maybe keep him out of the way for the fifth war, and now how apparently Shirou and the Rin will know each other better when the time comes. Also, I may have forgotten to mention it, but I like how Rin's not going to have that whole "I have to be a properly emotionless magus" pressure weighing her down.
1/8/2016 c3 jcampbellohten
*reads journal excerpt* *remembers Saber's eye colors at the end of .* ...Is Edgar a male Arturia from an alternate dimension who loved his wife beyond anything else?
Hooray for pulling Shirou away from the mindset that gets him broken and turned into Archer!
You don't have to write "... assets" every time you want to refer to breasts. It was funny the first time, but it gets weird reading that repeatedly, like you're squeamish about using the word "breasts". If you want to be polite or decorous or whatever, call the area a woman's "bust".
*reads journal excerpt* *remembers Saber's eye colors at the end of .* ...Is Edgar a male Arturia from an alternate dimension who loved his wife beyond anything else?
Hooray for pulling Shirou away from the mindset that gets him broken and turned into Archer!
You don't have to write "... assets" every time you want to refer to breasts. It was funny the first time, but it gets weird reading that repeatedly, like you're squeamish about using the word "breasts". If you want to be polite or decorous or whatever, call the area a woman's "bust".
1/1/2016 c14 Guest
Wait, so Oswald loved Sayaka? And Chryssie is from My Little Pony?
Wait, so Oswald loved Sayaka? And Chryssie is from My Little Pony?
1/1/2016 c4 Guest
It's Sayaka!
It's Sayaka!
1/1/2016 c3 Guest
Why does Shirou have Sayaka's cutlass? Is Sayaka half-insane or something?
Why does Shirou have Sayaka's cutlass? Is Sayaka half-insane or something?
10/16/2015 c16 10DocHoliday0316
And this was a very nice read. I loved all of the developments in it, including getting more backstory on the OSG and some character development for Shirou. And I did love the world building in it.
10DocHoliday0316And this was a very nice read. I loved all of the developments in it, including getting more backstory on the OSG and some character development for Shirou. And I did love the world building in it.
10/16/2015 c14 DocHoliday0316
Very nice chapter. I like how you've depicted Rin and Sakura's respective relationships with Shirou (due to Sakura living a MUCH more happier life here). ANd I can't wait to see what happened to Sayaka,
Very nice chapter. I like how you've depicted Rin and Sakura's respective relationships with Shirou (due to Sakura living a MUCH more happier life here). ANd I can't wait to see what happened to Sayaka,