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7/26/2014 c1 Guest
Huh, I wonder what is all written in the journal,
Anyway, nice story, if I were to nitpick, I'd say that the presentation isn't the best DON'T GET ME WRONG,
Writing style : Great,
Concept : Great
The only problem is that you scrunched it all up in just 5 paragraphs, maybe spread the words out a little bit more. Like putting in a line of dialogue and maybe a few words of description, then skip a line for the next paragraph, instead of putting it all into just one paragraph.

But that's just a nitpick, over all, nice story

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