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12/21/2014 c10 6CrimsonMercenary
This was a very action packed chapter! I very much enjoyed the fight they had with Aizen. You did a great job of handling his dialogue...that guy is so creepy!
12/18/2014 c9 CrimsonMercenary
Such a nice and sweet chapter...but I love the last sentence, it reminds us that much is still about to happen in the story! We are, after all, only in chapter 9.
12/17/2014 c8 CrimsonMercenary
Ahh, now I wonder when she'll be able to achieve bankai again? Its great that Toshiro and Imayru are getting had done such a great job building up there love, that marriage seems fitting for these two characters.

Honestly this chapter could have served as the ending of the story. Her power seems to be under control, she's established a new relationship with Tatsya, the two heroes are getting married...what other conflicts are there to be resolved? Well, I guess that's what chapter 9 is for!
12/16/2014 c7 CrimsonMercenary
I wonder how long she can keep Toshiro away, I'm guessing not even one chapter! I like how you portray Ichigo in this story, he seems a bit more serious and concerned then usual.

A critique, if you will have it, and just a little one at that. You use the word "sarcastically" to much when describing dialogue, especially between Ichigo and Imayru. This causes to problems, it limits your vocab to the reader and it takes away from the individuality of the characters in dialogue. We want two different personalities talking to each other, not the same one. Try saying things like "he spoke with a wry smile," or...I don't know, something else. That's very nit picky, but just a thought I had...have been enjoying it over all!
12/14/2014 c6 CrimsonMercenary
Loved the dynamic between Ichigo and Imayru. Him relating to her with his inner hollow was a great touch, and something I was hoping to see! You also did a great job of painting the picture for us of Toshiro's struggle with Imayru being gone.
12/13/2014 c5 CrimsonMercenary
Wow, what a weird ending to this chapter! Imayru has become like a vampire dragon woman D

Very interesting a very creative. I also like how you alternate POV from Toshiro to Imayru, and its not as confusing as I was thinking it would be.

Kind of weird how Aizen was added to this story, it makes it very AU which is completely okay, just not what I was expecting. You still have my interest!
12/13/2014 c4 CrimsonMercenary
Another good chapter! I liked the change of dynamic. The last two were kind of dark with Imayru almost dying and being tortured. This was had more action towards the end and started off kind of light, which was a nice shift. Incorporating Aizen was a great twist, and I am very intrigued about the serum in her now.

A small critique, though since the story is done it shouldn't matter one bit. Momo is a bit out of character in a seemingly big way, to me. She doesn't seem to care one bit about Aizen. In the show he had a very unhealthy hold over her, so much so that even way after he betrayed them and returned with Espada and she came to face Aizen she still referred to him as Captain. Its creepy and sad how infatuated with Aizen she is even after knowing the true monster. Would have liked to see that dynamic in with your OC universe here.

With that said, I enjoyed the chapter a lot and will read more as I can! I hope the reviews are not getting annoying. I enjoy getting reviews and feedback for all my chapters when I write, and I hope other people like it too.
12/12/2014 c3 CrimsonMercenary
This was a deep chapter! I hadn't expected her to awaken her swords power so quickly in the story, but it definitely adds a new element to the plot. I have no idea how Toshiro will save Imaryu but I exited to discover how!
12/12/2014 c2 CrimsonMercenary
This chapter had it all! Romance, Action, Plot Development, deepening was great!

I did not see it coming that Imyaru is dying...I am interested to see what progresses with that, and can't wait to keep reading!
12/11/2014 c1 CrimsonMercenary
What a good first chapter! You painted a perfect picture of Imayru, I could really visualize her especially her outfit. Also, you kept the not OC's all in character it seems. I enjoyed the small part about Kenpachi picking her up and running to Momo, it definitely would be something I could see happening in the anime!

I look forward to reading your story more, and dropping a review when I can!
11/23/2014 c24 YAY
I look forward to the sequel!
11/6/2014 c19 Alaina Kuski
Wow...i hope that they can pull it off...
11/1/2014 c1 YAY
I really like this story! It is very detailed and the story is good. Keep up the good work! There aren't many Hitsugaya x Hinamori fics anymore(new ones), so I'm curious to see where this one will lead.
10/28/2014 c1 1Liana K. Hourglass
I admit that this is an interesting tale. But, a word of advice, you should place a line to differentiate the scenes. I mean, just now, you put the flashback too close to the present scene I nearly got confuse at the two, until I re-read it again. Nevertheless, you did a good job in creating this. I also hope that you won't mind me putting this into my community.
10/24/2014 c15 Alaina Kuski
I love it!
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