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for Corporal why do you hate me? Eren x Levi

10/31/2014 c1 j3a4i689
This is very good i want a part 2
Thanks
7/22/2014 c1 3Zombie Mayhem
That was a really good beginning I really like it.
7/11/2014 c1 1blackfox123
I think it's not badly written but the story progresses way too fast, you need to draw it out a lot more. Please keep trying :3
- sorry if there are some mistakes, english isn't my native language -'
6/21/2014 c1 11Not so human anymore
That was good for your first fic. Could be better though. Try keeping them more in character. And don't rush into it like that. It happened too fast. Its okay to drag romance out. Try making the sentences sound more creative. Use different words. Switch them around. Also paragraphs, they exist for a reason. Ask your english teacher. Or look it up. The story just looks better if paragraphs are used right. And I'm not saying any of this to be mean. I'm doing this cause you asked for advice. Reread your work before you post it too. Out loud if you can. See if it sounds good. See how the words flow. You did have at least some flow to that. But other than that the writing seemed pretty good for a first timer. Practice makes perfect. Ugh, I'm done rambling now. I need sleep.

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