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12/10/2021 c18 9sherryola
Bella is 17. She doesn't need a guardian and the authorities wouldn't bother with a kid that old. I think in Washington state she might even be legal.
5/22/2021 c1 DawnScarlet19610
The number of spelling mistakes... wow
2/4/2021 c2 miakayuki1989
well that was short.
2/4/2021 c1 miakayuki1989
ok this looks interesting
3/2/2019 c4 carlabordon92
La premisa sonaba tan bien
9/29/2017 c5 Guest
you need to do some serious review/editing. Almost every other sentence has a typo in it and it detracts from the story. only to ch 5 and i don't want to read more if i have to keep guessing about what your sentences mean
8/27/2017 c31 1sunfun
Interesting Story.
1sunfun
6/28/2017 c2 2nya mayaha nya
I read the summary and absolutely loved the idea... However you made several errors the most important being that when a person is in a coma for months let alone years they need physical therapy to help them relearn to swallow, walk, etc. Not to mention the time it would take to get her body capable of digesting solid food again. That you had Bella out of the hospital after only a week with no PT or even having Charlie there to sign her discharge papers broke my suspension of disbelief. She would have needed several months of PT to regain the muscles, stamima, and control needed to walk again, maybe even crutches for a time, and not mention how anorexic her body would appear to be after years of being on iv' s. Other than that I do like what you have so far. If done right all you would need to do is add a paragraph or two to fix it.
6/22/2017 c31 LAB1
What an interesting change to canon Twilight! A very enjoyable story to read!
3/15/2017 c32 Suzy-Chapstick
Terrific fic! Now I'm on to the sequel!
6/22/2016 c29 Motherof8
That was exciting
6/22/2016 c25 Motherof8
That was good.
6/22/2016 c23 Motherof8
Good story. I am enjoying it
6/22/2016 c18 Motherof8
It's his own dumb fault
6/22/2016 c17 Motherof8
Good story
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