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11/4/2014 c1 1shelbybde
i liked it! I'm new to the whole Pirate Queen story. Did she really not like her husband, what was it, something with a T, right? I knew she ended up leaving him later on but have no real sense of it all. Anyways, good story. :)
7/5/2014 c1 4NightKnight1831
please continue! I'm intrigued:)
6/27/2014 c1 You Know Who
This was really cool. :D I loved Grania's conflict over viewing her gender as a curse, and then realizing its blessing through her son. :) I also liked her ferocity when confronting the attackers on board her ship. I thought her determination really came through, and her exhaustion. A few suggestions I might make: Beware of the over-use of pronouns. :) It's always a good idea to use the main character's name once or twice in a long paragraph, just to re-emphasize whose perspective this is, and also their individuality. Also, one thing to watch out for would be swapping perspectives to show another character's thoughts in the middle of a scene. I liked Magella's thoughts, but I think it would have been better if they were perceived by Grania, or relayed in some way through her expressions, movements, or dialogue. Perspective changes can always be a little bit jarring in the middle of the action. :) Other than that, great job! Keep at it!
6/28/2014 c1 2ElphabaThroppxx
Yay more Pirate Queen ff. This sounds like a really interesting start. Can't wait to see whats next xx

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