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4/16/2015 c2 0 otta 10
U suc. I dun leik u. Gao a wai.
6/30/2014 c1 Shmeagle
You're writing style's good and enjoyable to read, but I think Lea could have had a bit more to do - I know in your author's notes, you said that she'd come to shine, but I think it'd be best if you made her have some time away from Madoka before that just to develop her a bit more, otherwise it'll feel like a rewrite of the show with one extra character. I think all of this would be solved by letting Lea develop even just a little more with both her relationship with Madoka and her personality before chapter three, and your writing style shows that you are capable of doing this in an entertaining way :)

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