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1/25/2016 c1 21Harlequin de Rustre
This has real potential. Your bits of exposition on Naruto's treatment by his peers and of his impression of the Hokage were unecessary by and large.

You kept the tone even, got most of your intended message across, and did so without making Naruto OOC or simply ridiculous.

It's a great fic prompt, if nothing else. If you decided to take this somewhere in the undetermined future, I suggest you make it a very slow climax; if nothing else, a soft touch would be a soul-nourishing tonic.

I've really had enough of all these lowbrow teenage dramas that seem to flood popular fandoms and appreciate the change of pace, is what I mean to say.

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