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8Moedad
Over too soon! I'll had my hope to that expressed by other readers, that you'll someday finish this story.
8MoedadOver too soon! I'll had my hope to that expressed by other readers, that you'll someday finish this story.
1/28 c10 Moedad
Yay, Ned has a Comanche name! I liked the whole stolen horses event, but I have to ask about the choice to make this an encounter with Blackfeet. There are a lot of tribes (Kiowa, Arapaho, Sioux, Crow, Cheyenne to name just a few) and a thousand miles or more between Comanche and Blackfeet homelands. Were these some southerly ranging Blackfeet, out on an adventure far from home? Had the Comanche really ridden that far north? Or a little of both? Anyway, other than that question, I enjoyed this chapter a lot. I liked the descriptions of the action and Ned's emotions and self-questioning. Well done!
Yay, Ned has a Comanche name! I liked the whole stolen horses event, but I have to ask about the choice to make this an encounter with Blackfeet. There are a lot of tribes (Kiowa, Arapaho, Sioux, Crow, Cheyenne to name just a few) and a thousand miles or more between Comanche and Blackfeet homelands. Were these some southerly ranging Blackfeet, out on an adventure far from home? Had the Comanche really ridden that far north? Or a little of both? Anyway, other than that question, I enjoyed this chapter a lot. I liked the descriptions of the action and Ned's emotions and self-questioning. Well done!
1/28 c8 Moedad
Review for Chapters 5-8. I'm enjoying Ned's "schooling." And finally here in Chapter 8 we get to see Ned missing and thinking about his family! I was wondering if his life back home just plain sucked. He seems to have let Stalking Deer take the place of his own mother fairly easily, but maybe it's a reflection of his hunger for a mother, which might mean he enjoyed a close relationship with his white mother and Stalking Deer gave him a chance to fill that emotional hole, or it might also mean he didn't get along with his mother and Stalking Deer's unexpected kindness won him over quickly as a result. Or somewhere in the middle, I don't know, lol! Looking forward to reading more!
Review for Chapters 5-8. I'm enjoying Ned's "schooling." And finally here in Chapter 8 we get to see Ned missing and thinking about his family! I was wondering if his life back home just plain sucked. He seems to have let Stalking Deer take the place of his own mother fairly easily, but maybe it's a reflection of his hunger for a mother, which might mean he enjoyed a close relationship with his white mother and Stalking Deer gave him a chance to fill that emotional hole, or it might also mean he didn't get along with his mother and Stalking Deer's unexpected kindness won him over quickly as a result. Or somewhere in the middle, I don't know, lol! Looking forward to reading more!
1/20 c4 Moedad
This review is for chapters 2-4. I like how Ned's spirit is instinctively kind of stubborn even when he's afraid. It's serving him well as he adjusts to life as a captive. He seems to be adjusting quickly. There's a little bit of Stockholm Syndrome going on with him and Two Feathers. You've clearly researched Plains Indian lifestyle. The Happy Hunting Ground sounds cliche-ish, but cliches have an origin, and Happy Hunting Ground is an appropriate description of Comanche belief in an afterlife. Their "religion" was rather informal and more personal than corporate.
This review is for chapters 2-4. I like how Ned's spirit is instinctively kind of stubborn even when he's afraid. It's serving him well as he adjusts to life as a captive. He seems to be adjusting quickly. There's a little bit of Stockholm Syndrome going on with him and Two Feathers. You've clearly researched Plains Indian lifestyle. The Happy Hunting Ground sounds cliche-ish, but cliches have an origin, and Happy Hunting Ground is an appropriate description of Comanche belief in an afterlife. Their "religion" was rather informal and more personal than corporate.
1/20 c1 Moedad
Good job setting the scene! I could feel the cold and smell the dust swirling around Ned as the Comanches captured him. I had to look up where Fort Mason was, but that's not your fault. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.
Good job setting the scene! I could feel the cold and smell the dust swirling around Ned as the Comanches captured him. I had to look up where Fort Mason was, but that's not your fault. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.
4/13/2024 c13 ChefJeff
Hello. I have just recently started reading your work. I appreciate your talent. Wondering if Captive will be getting any new chapters, or if you are even still writing. Looking forward to reading your other books for now. Up next, Past and Present Danger.
Hello. I have just recently started reading your work. I appreciate your talent. Wondering if Captive will be getting any new chapters, or if you are even still writing. Looking forward to reading your other books for now. Up next, Past and Present Danger.
6/14/2020 c13 Rebeccamack
I'm. Intrigued by the whole story, I read it all in a few hours, please continue writing, I must know how this story progresses.
I'm. Intrigued by the whole story, I read it all in a few hours, please continue writing, I must know how this story progresses.
12/26/2016 c13 80Paulina Ann
What? Requesting another chapter. :) Usually i don't enjoy reading first person but you do it well. Your story reminds me of "Alone, but Not Alone." Hope you continue. :)
80Paulina AnnWhat? Requesting another chapter. :) Usually i don't enjoy reading first person but you do it well. Your story reminds me of "Alone, but Not Alone." Hope you continue. :)
7/1/2016 c13 160ulstergirl
Aww, Ned had another adventure. :) I'm both intrigued and anxious about this first taste of love... but I'm sure it will be done well. Thanks for writing!
160ulstergirlAww, Ned had another adventure. :) I'm both intrigued and anxious about this first taste of love... but I'm sure it will be done well. Thanks for writing!
6/18/2016 c12 ulstergirl
I really enjoyed Ned's flashback to his previous family. The descriptions of the fire and of their daily lives were very good, too. I'm interested to see what happens next. :)
I really enjoyed Ned's flashback to his previous family. The descriptions of the fire and of their daily lives were very good, too. I'm interested to see what happens next. :)
6/18/2016 c12 max2013
What a powerful chapter. Ned's father was very wise as he spoke about war, and I felt for Ned's loss of his birth family. Just a really good chapter.
What a powerful chapter. Ned's father was very wise as he spoke about war, and I felt for Ned's loss of his birth family. Just a really good chapter.
6/15/2016 c11 ulstergirl
Aww. I'm glad Ned was so brave in battle (in his limited capacity), and it was sweet that he was so touched by his adopted father's pride in him. I'm glad he didn't have to kill anyone, though.
Aww. I'm glad Ned was so brave in battle (in his limited capacity), and it was sweet that he was so touched by his adopted father's pride in him. I'm glad he didn't have to kill anyone, though.