for Duel Academy's Dark Duelist7/9/2014 c1 zero
For the pairing i vote blair or dark magician girl to be with naruto
For the pairing i vote blair or dark magician girl to be with naruto
7/9/2014 c1 
2VeilSlide
You seem to have a decent understanding of how to write a duel. However, a major misplay is the use of Hammer Shot after bringing back Blue-Eyes. Hammer Shot destroys the monster with the most ATK points on the field, which was Blue-Eyes at the time. The Dark Illusion was wasted there. My advice is to study up on the cards you write about and their rulings. This chapter is a good attempt at a first story. Also, I think contacting a person who has a good grasp of Yu-Gi-Oh rules and cards would help in writing future duels. I hope you continue to write and improve as a writer. Good luck.
2VeilSlideYou seem to have a decent understanding of how to write a duel. However, a major misplay is the use of Hammer Shot after bringing back Blue-Eyes. Hammer Shot destroys the monster with the most ATK points on the field, which was Blue-Eyes at the time. The Dark Illusion was wasted there. My advice is to study up on the cards you write about and their rulings. This chapter is a good attempt at a first story. Also, I think contacting a person who has a good grasp of Yu-Gi-Oh rules and cards would help in writing future duels. I hope you continue to write and improve as a writer. Good luck.
7/9/2014 c1 Mzr90
Hmm...an interesting fic so far and you've got a good handle on the characters.
Anyway I hope to see more and if you're untested then check out some challenges I got.
Hmm...an interesting fic so far and you've got a good handle on the characters.
Anyway I hope to see more and if you're untested then check out some challenges I got.
7/9/2014 c1 5ParanoidParrot076
I didnt think people still wrote these, so you are now a rarity. The writing was good and the dule system works well, I could totally see the thing working. Keep going!
5ParanoidParrot076I didnt think people still wrote these, so you are now a rarity. The writing was good and the dule system works well, I could totally see the thing working. Keep going!