
6/12/2015 c1 Femalefan
This has a potential to be a good story but you really need a beta. You have some spelling/grammar errors, each time a character speaks it needs to be on a separate line e.i
Char 1 "(speech)"
Char 2 ("speech")
Paragraphs need to be separated as wall of text is hard to read. Also students to start going to Hogwarts until they're 11 and yet you have Harry's age as 10.
*Slytherin *Gryffindor
This has a potential to be a good story but you really need a beta. You have some spelling/grammar errors, each time a character speaks it needs to be on a separate line e.i
Char 1 "(speech)"
Char 2 ("speech")
Paragraphs need to be separated as wall of text is hard to read. Also students to start going to Hogwarts until they're 11 and yet you have Harry's age as 10.
*Slytherin *Gryffindor