for The Dragon Warrior, Young Justice's Newest Member5/8/2015 c5 
99Indigo-Night-Wisp
Wow, I am sooooo sorry that I haven't read this chapter before now. It's been way too long and I apologize.
Looks like Drago isn't all bad! He seems to care about Wally and the team a little bit at least. Hopefully Wally's gonna be okay!
99Indigo-Night-WispWow, I am sooooo sorry that I haven't read this chapter before now. It's been way too long and I apologize.
Looks like Drago isn't all bad! He seems to care about Wally and the team a little bit at least. Hopefully Wally's gonna be okay!
3/20/2015 c5 8Amber Rose Black
This is great! Keep going! Don't ditch your stories for a year like me!
8Amber Rose BlackThis is great! Keep going! Don't ditch your stories for a year like me!
11/2/2014 c4 28DaSwampRat'sCherie
This was a great chapter! I have to say I was a little lost as I don't know who half the characters are, but that's nothing you can helpXD Just a small tip, if you want, rather than writing " (Break) ", you can always put that line thing, or maybe center some *** or something - it will be understood:) Break works too of course:) I'm curious to see just what they'll find when they head to the North Pole, things seem to be picking up
28DaSwampRat'sCherieThis was a great chapter! I have to say I was a little lost as I don't know who half the characters are, but that's nothing you can helpXD Just a small tip, if you want, rather than writing " (Break) ", you can always put that line thing, or maybe center some *** or something - it will be understood:) Break works too of course:) I'm curious to see just what they'll find when they head to the North Pole, things seem to be picking up
11/2/2014 c3 DaSwampRat'sCherie
Oops, I didn't even realize I'd never read this chapter! Sorry about that:/ At any rate, this was a good chapter; it set the stage a little more for Drago's character and his past experiences and left the reader wanting to know what exactly happened.
I loved the comment about Superman's strand of hair, lol
Oops, I didn't even realize I'd never read this chapter! Sorry about that:/ At any rate, this was a good chapter; it set the stage a little more for Drago's character and his past experiences and left the reader wanting to know what exactly happened.
I loved the comment about Superman's strand of hair, lol
10/23/2014 c4 99Indigo-Night-Wisp
Ah! Wally's coming back!
Wow, Drago really doesn't like Batman. I'm trying to think of people who hate him enough to train babies to kill him on site, but nothings actually popping up...
Anyway, great job, see you next time!
99Indigo-Night-WispAh! Wally's coming back!
Wow, Drago really doesn't like Batman. I'm trying to think of people who hate him enough to train babies to kill him on site, but nothings actually popping up...
Anyway, great job, see you next time!
10/22/2014 c4 Guest
FYI Ra'as All Ghul is actually Ra's Al Ghul look it up in the comics or online.
FYI Ra'as All Ghul is actually Ra's Al Ghul look it up in the comics or online.
10/19/2014 c3 MJ
Very good please update soon
Very good please update soon
8/15/2014 c3 Indigo-Night-Wisp
Heeeeey.
So Superman needs to back off, seriously. And of course Diana appreciates getting some proper respect. :)
WHO IS DRAGO I NEED TO KNOOOOOOOOW. :)
Heeeeey.
So Superman needs to back off, seriously. And of course Diana appreciates getting some proper respect. :)
WHO IS DRAGO I NEED TO KNOOOOOOOOW. :)
8/15/2014 c2 Indigo-Night-Wisp
I thought I'd read the second chapter but apparently not. Sorry!
Oh, this is getting good now.
Flash tho: "I mean, we all hate you Bats, but why would he HATE you?"
Ah! Drago knows Ra's!
I thought I'd read the second chapter but apparently not. Sorry!
Oh, this is getting good now.
Flash tho: "I mean, we all hate you Bats, but why would he HATE you?"
Ah! Drago knows Ra's!
8/5/2014 c3 68xmenfan33
Great chapter. :)
lol, I've said that before about Superman, that his secret hinges on a pair of glasses. :)
68xmenfan33Great chapter. :)
lol, I've said that before about Superman, that his secret hinges on a pair of glasses. :)
8/2/2014 c2 28DaSwampRat'sCherie
This chapter was very wellwritten and the story is moving along! Nicely done:)
28DaSwampRat'sCherieThis chapter was very wellwritten and the story is moving along! Nicely done:)
7/25/2014 c2 68xmenfan33
This guy is cryptic. I don't blame Batman for not trusting him really. Good chapter.
68xmenfan33This guy is cryptic. I don't blame Batman for not trusting him really. Good chapter.
7/21/2014 c1 99Indigo-Night-Wisp
Hey, you!
First, I really like that you took the time to include Kaldur's directions. A lot of the time, I don't see a lot of actual detail in strategy when it comes to fanfic, simply because strategy can be hard to plan! But you included it, and gave Kaldur his due, and that is excellent!
Everything flows really nicely too. From the first Zeta beam breech to the actual appearance of the intruder, I didn't get lost at all.
The boys chattering about video game assassins is hilarious and totally something they would do. :)
Interesting first chapter! Obviously I love the idea of saving Wally, and it will be intriguing to see how the process would work in your fic. Great job!
99Indigo-Night-WispHey, you!
First, I really like that you took the time to include Kaldur's directions. A lot of the time, I don't see a lot of actual detail in strategy when it comes to fanfic, simply because strategy can be hard to plan! But you included it, and gave Kaldur his due, and that is excellent!
Everything flows really nicely too. From the first Zeta beam breech to the actual appearance of the intruder, I didn't get lost at all.
The boys chattering about video game assassins is hilarious and totally something they would do. :)
Interesting first chapter! Obviously I love the idea of saving Wally, and it will be intriguing to see how the process would work in your fic. Great job!
7/19/2014 c1 28DaSwampRat'sCherie
I have to say I love your writing style. It provides enough details to give a clear mental picture, yet it doesn't spend so much time on the little things that the reader gets bored and loses interest. The plot certainly seems to be interesting and you did a great job of leaving the chapter off at a point that leaves people wanting to come back for more! Good job on you first fic! :)
28DaSwampRat'sCherieI have to say I love your writing style. It provides enough details to give a clear mental picture, yet it doesn't spend so much time on the little things that the reader gets bored and loses interest. The plot certainly seems to be interesting and you did a great job of leaving the chapter off at a point that leaves people wanting to come back for more! Good job on you first fic! :)
7/18/2014 c1 anon
I saw your profile see my chapter two reviews of Shuffle or Boogie by Sadistic Lunatic
Vandal Savage, King Kull, Ra’s al Ghul, Night Haunter- Brighthammer- Dark Claw Amalgam
Baphomet- Onomatopoeia’s fake hero ID, Huntress’s protégé
Lex Luthor, Aleander Luthor Sr/Jr./Mazahs/Alexis
Aqua-Mariner, Amalgam Namor, Aquaman and Dead KingAtlan/Sea King/Thanatos/Kordax/The Thirst; Ocean Master Black Manta
Astarte/Veronica Cale Theana, Paula/Gerta von Gunther, Bruna-Brunhilde, Gudra/Gundra, Deva, Dark Angel, Miss Gsptlsnz
Gargareans, Mythlands-Cosmopolitan, Multiethnic/Omniethnic
Black Adam, Osiris, Neron, Despero
Red King
Master of the World, Leader/Maestro, Kang, Doctor Doom, White Wolf/Man-Ape/Killmonger, Mandarin, Baron Mordo, Tomi Shishido-The Hand, Apocalypse- all cool X-Men villains, Kingpin- The Owl/Count Nefaria/Mr. Negative/The Hood, Red Skull- Wolfgang von Strucker/Zemo/Viper, Scoprio- Nick Fury's brothers
Maybe Dracula Vampire Kingdom on the Moon
Wonder Woman kicks Batman's butt every time they fight because that's what happens when a normal person goes against a super of that caliber with no kryptonite factor, of course they also have similar tactical mindsets or at least fighting skills and with her superior abilities she obviously has the advantage
You can only call Waller a villain in that she'll sacrifice the one for the many, she has a moral line and whether you agree with her or not it does not move, she's made Bats back down and acknowledge she has a point the CSA the Justice Lords
Most of the heroes consider Fury a good guy because the thought of him being a villain is too terrifying, you will never be as bada$$ as this World War II vet from New York's Hell's Kitchen, Fury started fighting the Nazis with his band of brothers the Howling Commandos first before moving onto more esoteric foes of humanity. It was sometime between moving to work for the CIA and fighting a hate-ray powered clone of Adolf Hitler alongside a walking pile of rocks that Fury realized that when the going gets weird, the weird turn pro. And thus has followed a several decade long Crowning Moment Of Awesome
Why he is cooler than you will ever be: He has a Flying Car, he parks this Flying Car in his Flying Base filled with Life Model Decoys and psychic spies, he's fought radioactive robots in space, he's chased a warlord to another dimension to fight psychic duels with his literal Eyepatch of Power, he's hunted Godzilla, he is a Badass Normal feared by Nigh Invulnerable beings, he is feared by Nigh Invulnerable beings because he has demonstrated the "nigh" portion by killing several, he never looks at explosions, he does, however ride motorcycles through explosions while shirtless and Dual Wielding Laser Pistols, he is literally ageless, he once willingly turned himself into an Eldritch Abomination to save reality, he's beaten up Adolf Hitler on more than one occasion
Antimatter Earth-3 Alexander Luthor/Mazahs/Doc Savage/Edison Rex/Axel Brass (Century Babies)/Xanatos/Hank Scorpio/Oliver Warbucks-self-made man, never lost the common touch and never forgot where he came from, felt strongly that business owners had a responsibility to treat their employees fairly and had an equally great hatred of corruption
I always imagined nanotech like Spawn or the Darklings, Matrix, Satan Girl, Belinda Zee, Supragirl, Superior Girl, Divine, Nuclear Men, Bizarros-stronger, Smarter, faster, tougher, better looking than Supes, Ms. Gsptlsnz, OMACS, Warsuits Luthor's power armor, Havokoids, Warmaker 1s, Alphina Brainiacs Indigo, enhanced Doomsday clones (Steel/Cyborg Superman/Eradicator, Tactile TK), Doomslayer, Superdoom, World Killers, Paragon, Vartox, Amazo
Darklings-symbiotes/Super-Adaptoids/Demogoblin
Asteroid M(s)-Krakoa- Savageland(s), Danger, (Zero-Techno-organic-Technoarchy, Phalanx, Barbuda, Builders
Rao's familiars- Flamebird and Nightwing
Familiars- Wolves, Scratch-9-Gyrinx-Sabretooth/Witch familiar/pharaoh-Alley-Kat-Abra (Sleen),Ravens (American Eagle), Monkey, Winged Unicorn, Gryphon, (Black, White, Gray, Rainbow) Phoenix, Phaethon and Savitar, the sun dogs (dragons-cat to Kaiju sized)- born out of Solaris' own nuclear furnace, and heir to his hydrogen-fueled power and fury Octus, the eight-dimensional cephalopod - from the bottom of the seas of neptune. While it is impossible for creatures limited to a three-dimensional perception of the universe to fully understand his powers, his weird limpet grenades have proven to be most effective weapons.
Wormhole - unfathomable denizens of the black gulfs between stars, with the ability to bend space and time to his command
Flashpoint/Epsilon: Magog, Tokyo Rose (Darklings from Darkness (as well as symbiote/Super-Adaptoid/Demogoglin) like giant robots and monsters like Kaiju as well as cyborg demonic ninjas and Samurais, Manotaur, XXX like 666, NIL-8, Americommando-Major Glory
Stormwatch: Mr. Majestic, Midnighter, Century Babies amalgam-Doc Savage, Jenny Quarx-Mystechnician, King of Cities/Wyld, John Lynch/TAO
Prime/Elven
Manchester Black-Telekinesis telepathy, symbiote/symbeast(s)-(Darkness/Angelus/Witchblade/Spawn), magic club, magic hat from which can pull anything; Manchester Black Americanitis John Smith- shirt with American flag and baseball bat-Shine/Bright Knight-Shade, Angelus etc
Billy Butcher; Good Homelander/Major Glory-The Boys coat etc., Becky Butcher, Greg D. Mallory, Tommy Monaghan- Ace of Winchesters, Jesse Custer-Preacher, Max Damage
I saw your profile see my chapter two reviews of Shuffle or Boogie by Sadistic Lunatic
Vandal Savage, King Kull, Ra’s al Ghul, Night Haunter- Brighthammer- Dark Claw Amalgam
Baphomet- Onomatopoeia’s fake hero ID, Huntress’s protégé
Lex Luthor, Aleander Luthor Sr/Jr./Mazahs/Alexis
Aqua-Mariner, Amalgam Namor, Aquaman and Dead KingAtlan/Sea King/Thanatos/Kordax/The Thirst; Ocean Master Black Manta
Astarte/Veronica Cale Theana, Paula/Gerta von Gunther, Bruna-Brunhilde, Gudra/Gundra, Deva, Dark Angel, Miss Gsptlsnz
Gargareans, Mythlands-Cosmopolitan, Multiethnic/Omniethnic
Black Adam, Osiris, Neron, Despero
Red King
Master of the World, Leader/Maestro, Kang, Doctor Doom, White Wolf/Man-Ape/Killmonger, Mandarin, Baron Mordo, Tomi Shishido-The Hand, Apocalypse- all cool X-Men villains, Kingpin- The Owl/Count Nefaria/Mr. Negative/The Hood, Red Skull- Wolfgang von Strucker/Zemo/Viper, Scoprio- Nick Fury's brothers
Maybe Dracula Vampire Kingdom on the Moon
Wonder Woman kicks Batman's butt every time they fight because that's what happens when a normal person goes against a super of that caliber with no kryptonite factor, of course they also have similar tactical mindsets or at least fighting skills and with her superior abilities she obviously has the advantage
You can only call Waller a villain in that she'll sacrifice the one for the many, she has a moral line and whether you agree with her or not it does not move, she's made Bats back down and acknowledge she has a point the CSA the Justice Lords
Most of the heroes consider Fury a good guy because the thought of him being a villain is too terrifying, you will never be as bada$$ as this World War II vet from New York's Hell's Kitchen, Fury started fighting the Nazis with his band of brothers the Howling Commandos first before moving onto more esoteric foes of humanity. It was sometime between moving to work for the CIA and fighting a hate-ray powered clone of Adolf Hitler alongside a walking pile of rocks that Fury realized that when the going gets weird, the weird turn pro. And thus has followed a several decade long Crowning Moment Of Awesome
Why he is cooler than you will ever be: He has a Flying Car, he parks this Flying Car in his Flying Base filled with Life Model Decoys and psychic spies, he's fought radioactive robots in space, he's chased a warlord to another dimension to fight psychic duels with his literal Eyepatch of Power, he's hunted Godzilla, he is a Badass Normal feared by Nigh Invulnerable beings, he is feared by Nigh Invulnerable beings because he has demonstrated the "nigh" portion by killing several, he never looks at explosions, he does, however ride motorcycles through explosions while shirtless and Dual Wielding Laser Pistols, he is literally ageless, he once willingly turned himself into an Eldritch Abomination to save reality, he's beaten up Adolf Hitler on more than one occasion
Antimatter Earth-3 Alexander Luthor/Mazahs/Doc Savage/Edison Rex/Axel Brass (Century Babies)/Xanatos/Hank Scorpio/Oliver Warbucks-self-made man, never lost the common touch and never forgot where he came from, felt strongly that business owners had a responsibility to treat their employees fairly and had an equally great hatred of corruption
I always imagined nanotech like Spawn or the Darklings, Matrix, Satan Girl, Belinda Zee, Supragirl, Superior Girl, Divine, Nuclear Men, Bizarros-stronger, Smarter, faster, tougher, better looking than Supes, Ms. Gsptlsnz, OMACS, Warsuits Luthor's power armor, Havokoids, Warmaker 1s, Alphina Brainiacs Indigo, enhanced Doomsday clones (Steel/Cyborg Superman/Eradicator, Tactile TK), Doomslayer, Superdoom, World Killers, Paragon, Vartox, Amazo
Darklings-symbiotes/Super-Adaptoids/Demogoblin
Asteroid M(s)-Krakoa- Savageland(s), Danger, (Zero-Techno-organic-Technoarchy, Phalanx, Barbuda, Builders
Rao's familiars- Flamebird and Nightwing
Familiars- Wolves, Scratch-9-Gyrinx-Sabretooth/Witch familiar/pharaoh-Alley-Kat-Abra (Sleen),Ravens (American Eagle), Monkey, Winged Unicorn, Gryphon, (Black, White, Gray, Rainbow) Phoenix, Phaethon and Savitar, the sun dogs (dragons-cat to Kaiju sized)- born out of Solaris' own nuclear furnace, and heir to his hydrogen-fueled power and fury Octus, the eight-dimensional cephalopod - from the bottom of the seas of neptune. While it is impossible for creatures limited to a three-dimensional perception of the universe to fully understand his powers, his weird limpet grenades have proven to be most effective weapons.
Wormhole - unfathomable denizens of the black gulfs between stars, with the ability to bend space and time to his command
Flashpoint/Epsilon: Magog, Tokyo Rose (Darklings from Darkness (as well as symbiote/Super-Adaptoid/Demogoglin) like giant robots and monsters like Kaiju as well as cyborg demonic ninjas and Samurais, Manotaur, XXX like 666, NIL-8, Americommando-Major Glory
Stormwatch: Mr. Majestic, Midnighter, Century Babies amalgam-Doc Savage, Jenny Quarx-Mystechnician, King of Cities/Wyld, John Lynch/TAO
Prime/Elven
Manchester Black-Telekinesis telepathy, symbiote/symbeast(s)-(Darkness/Angelus/Witchblade/Spawn), magic club, magic hat from which can pull anything; Manchester Black Americanitis John Smith- shirt with American flag and baseball bat-Shine/Bright Knight-Shade, Angelus etc
Billy Butcher; Good Homelander/Major Glory-The Boys coat etc., Becky Butcher, Greg D. Mallory, Tommy Monaghan- Ace of Winchesters, Jesse Custer-Preacher, Max Damage