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4/10/2016 c1 ima
please write another story
11/1/2014 c1 aaa
Grant actually did try to harm himself in the new season. Hope to read more of your work
7/23/2014 c1 3shadow375
Dark, short and cute! I like it! Thanks for writing this! :)
7/23/2014 c1 13StardustOwl
Are you kidding, this is really great! I love how you explain his feelings so well, this story is so absorbing, I feel like I am really there. Your writing creates a lot of empathy for Ward and makes him seem genuinely human. It was really sad when Grant decided to kill himself, but the ending was lovely; it was so nice how he woke up to his team and how Skye said 'we love you'.

Overall, the grammar and tenses are really good, although you made a few mistakes, I tried to research it but couldn't find much, so sorry if I don't make sense, I have never tried to explain tenses before. But feel free to PM me if you need anything clarifying.

'Don't misjudged him' should be 'Don't misjudge him', misjudged is the past version of the verb, and you are telling the readers not to misjudge him now, as they are reading it, so it is present.
'He didn't sought for' should be 'he didn't seek for,' didn't is past because the story is in the past tense, however seek should not be in the past as it is something which he was (not) going to do in the future.
'did tortured' should be 'did torture' because if you have 'did' you cannot have the past tense of a verb next to it, you already know that it is past because 'did' is past tense.
'didn't noticed' should be 'didn't notice' because again, even 'did not' cannot have the past tense of a verb next to it, this is the negative of the past simple.
(They could both also be 'had tortured' and 'hadn't noticed' because the torture had happened and him noticing had not happened)

Everywhere else though the tenses and grammar are perfect as far as I can see. This is a really brilliant story and I was not trying to be hateful, I was just trying to help. I would really be very interested to read more of your stories as they are clearly excellent and you are a very talented author!
7/22/2014 c1 Olicityforever
Hi. Love this one, i think this story can be more longer... But congratulations!

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