for The Creator and its Creation11/9/2014 c2 MewSnowfire
This is a great story! Please continue!
I want to see Danny and Kaai fight some ghosts...
This is a great story! Please continue!
I want to see Danny and Kaai fight some ghosts...
7/24/2014 c2 
5MayflowerBlues
2 foute in di 2de chap: "looks like someone had a rouh" en "Its okay, wasn't your quickly."
Plus in di eerste chap: '"I do not know everything, Daniel. I just watch the parade go by from above." His mentor explained. "I know that but I just didn't expect you to not know what happend to me." The halfa said.' Sal beter wees da.
En n paar ander dinge. Dan is baie OOC. Ek sal you beta as j will. LOVE DI FIC!
5MayflowerBlues2 foute in di 2de chap: "looks like someone had a rouh" en "Its okay, wasn't your quickly."
Plus in di eerste chap: '"I do not know everything, Daniel. I just watch the parade go by from above." His mentor explained. "I know that but I just didn't expect you to not know what happend to me." The halfa said.' Sal beter wees da.
En n paar ander dinge. Dan is baie OOC. Ek sal you beta as j will. LOVE DI FIC!