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10WoodenStarfish
I’ve never been a fan of a the alpha legion in canon, so I was pleasantly surprised by all the amazing things you did with them here. You made the coldest legion feel the most human, you fit in an eldar/imperium alliance, and you even made the METAL BOXES guy look badass. Now I wonder what a loyalist Sindri is up to. You definitely concluded the indexes on a high note, and I wish GW would make your story a separate setting with its unique models.
I look forward to reading the rest of the story going forwards.
10WoodenStarfishI’ve never been a fan of a the alpha legion in canon, so I was pleasantly surprised by all the amazing things you did with them here. You made the coldest legion feel the most human, you fit in an eldar/imperium alliance, and you even made the METAL BOXES guy look badass. Now I wonder what a loyalist Sindri is up to. You definitely concluded the indexes on a high note, and I wish GW would make your story a separate setting with its unique models.
I look forward to reading the rest of the story going forwards.
2/15 c78 1Maternova
After the revelations in this chapter (I strongly advise any new readers to avoid this one, because reasons), there's a certain joke in the Chinese RH community:
The false protector of Mankind: Omegon and his god-making plan
The true protector of Mankind: Raven Guard and their god-killing plot
OTOH, the Ravens apparently don't know their biggest creation through and through, believing Malice could just be chucked at random stuff as a WMD. This is not good. Morvax may have unwittingly messed up all of Corax's plans after "attack Hydra Cordatus for fresh gene-seed".
1MaternovaAfter the revelations in this chapter (I strongly advise any new readers to avoid this one, because reasons), there's a certain joke in the Chinese RH community:
The false protector of Mankind: Omegon and his god-making plan
The true protector of Mankind: Raven Guard and their god-killing plot
OTOH, the Ravens apparently don't know their biggest creation through and through, believing Malice could just be chucked at random stuff as a WMD. This is not good. Morvax may have unwittingly messed up all of Corax's plans after "attack Hydra Cordatus for fresh gene-seed".
2/14 c18 10WoodenStarfish
You definitely succeeded in making the Raven Guard horrifying. They saw the true nature of chaos and said “if we can’t beat them, make everyone join them.”
10WoodenStarfishYou definitely succeeded in making the Raven Guard horrifying. They saw the true nature of chaos and said “if we can’t beat them, make everyone join them.”
2/11 c17 WoodenStarfish
I really appreciate the thought you put into how the Salamanders sustain themselves and spread their influence to imperial worlds. They are an empire all on their own. Vulkan as a fifth chaos god is an awesome idea.
I really appreciate the thought you put into how the Salamanders sustain themselves and spread their influence to imperial worlds. They are an empire all on their own. Vulkan as a fifth chaos god is an awesome idea.
2/2 c12 WoodenStarfish
I think I like your chaos ultramarines more than the canon loyal ones. They make fantastic villains.
I think I like your chaos ultramarines more than the canon loyal ones. They make fantastic villains.
1/30 c10 WoodenStarfish
Love the irony of chaos iron hands replacing the weak flesh with nurgle’s mutations instead of metal. Also, plague titans sound terrifying
Love the irony of chaos iron hands replacing the weak flesh with nurgle’s mutations instead of metal. Also, plague titans sound terrifying
1/28 c8 WoodenStarfish
I think your Night Lords are my favorite loyalist legion in the story. They’re very inspiringly noble in this dark tale.
I think your Night Lords are my favorite loyalist legion in the story. They’re very inspiringly noble in this dark tale.
1/27 c7 WoodenStarfish
Something I’ve noticed with your chaos primarchs is that the pacing of their corruption is a lot more gradual than the canon chaos primarchs. I think this is a positive, as many of the canon primarchs (especially Angron) felt like they were designed to be villains from day one and feel one dimensional as a result.
But because you are using canonically noble characters and slowly turning them villainous, their arcs are a lot more engaging for me than the canon traitors.
Something I’ve noticed with your chaos primarchs is that the pacing of their corruption is a lot more gradual than the canon chaos primarchs. I think this is a positive, as many of the canon primarchs (especially Angron) felt like they were designed to be villains from day one and feel one dimensional as a result.
But because you are using canonically noble characters and slowly turning them villainous, their arcs are a lot more engaging for me than the canon traitors.
1/27 c6 WoodenStarfish
I love the idea of werewolf possessed space marines prowling the warp like the Wild Hunt. Same for the ragnorok like myths for the wolf time.
This may be your most creative chapter yet.
I love the idea of werewolf possessed space marines prowling the warp like the Wild Hunt. Same for the ragnorok like myths for the wolf time.
This may be your most creative chapter yet.
1/26 c5 WoodenStarfish
Your take on chaos white scars is fascinating and creative. Makes me wish I could see some of these units on the tabletop.
Your take on chaos white scars is fascinating and creative. Makes me wish I could see some of these units on the tabletop.
1/25 c3 WoodenStarfish
The Emperor’s Children are one of my favorite legions, and I’m amazed by the unique story you gave them here.
Btw, did Ostian and Serena survive the war?
The Emperor’s Children are one of my favorite legions, and I’m amazed by the unique story you gave them here.
Btw, did Ostian and Serena survive the war?
1/24 c1 WoodenStarfish
I personally would’ve switched the Iron Fists and Blood Angels in terms of which god they serve. I can see Slaanesh perverting the pain gloves from sources of discipline into masochism, and bloodthirst is totally a Khorne speciality.
But otherwise, I really love this scenario, and think it’s one of the most interesting alt heresies out there.
I personally would’ve switched the Iron Fists and Blood Angels in terms of which god they serve. I can see Slaanesh perverting the pain gloves from sources of discipline into masochism, and bloodthirst is totally a Khorne speciality.
But otherwise, I really love this scenario, and think it’s one of the most interesting alt heresies out there.
1/20 c69 Guest
This is the best alternate version of the Heresy.
This is the best alternate version of the Heresy.
1/18 c66 Guest
"Murdering a High Lord of Terra sounds fcking ilegal...oh, mi colon just..."
Maximilien "The Lawn" Dredd, last words.
"Murdering a High Lord of Terra sounds fcking ilegal...oh, mi colon just..."
Maximilien "The Lawn" Dredd, last words.
1/16 c62 Guest
Oh, IT was in Titan. I tought IT was with the shadowkeepers, sorry for my previus review.
Oh, IT was in Titan. I tought IT was with the shadowkeepers, sorry for my previus review.