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6Nemris
Ah, finally the the Legion of the Arch-Traitor himself. I sure have had been waiting for this.
You did really good job with the blueberries. Never been a fan of Ultramarines, but I sure enjoyed this chapter. The fall of one of the most respected Legions and Primarchs happened in such a finely crafted way, very nice work. A lot of important characters mentioned here, always interesting to hear about how some of the famous Marines are doing in this universe.
What I find particularly interesting is that Ultramarines have a major warp rift all for themselves. The Ruinstorm seems to have turned five hundred world really upside down. It has become a hellhole filled with infighting when Guilliman is not around. Nicely brings to mind the breaking of Canon Sons of Horus after the Heresy and before the Black Legion.
Whoah, two simultaneous Black Crusades that destroyed one another... This might be one of the most Chaos things I have ever heard.
Keep up the Good work.
6NemrisAh, finally the the Legion of the Arch-Traitor himself. I sure have had been waiting for this.
You did really good job with the blueberries. Never been a fan of Ultramarines, but I sure enjoyed this chapter. The fall of one of the most respected Legions and Primarchs happened in such a finely crafted way, very nice work. A lot of important characters mentioned here, always interesting to hear about how some of the famous Marines are doing in this universe.
What I find particularly interesting is that Ultramarines have a major warp rift all for themselves. The Ruinstorm seems to have turned five hundred world really upside down. It has become a hellhole filled with infighting when Guilliman is not around. Nicely brings to mind the breaking of Canon Sons of Horus after the Heresy and before the Black Legion.
Whoah, two simultaneous Black Crusades that destroyed one another... This might be one of the most Chaos things I have ever heard.
Keep up the Good work.
4/23/2016 c12 tmsax
I am enjoying the Roboutian Heresy so far - whilst the premise is simple, this is not a bad thing, as it gives the story time to develop naturally.
The inversion of the Horus Heresy as a concept is fascinating enough, but this chapter on the Legion that led the Heresy in this universe is I think the second best so far, with only the chapter on the Night Lord's surpassing it so far (although I am waiting for the Thousand Sons turn - I want my loyalist Egyptian Space Sorcerers damn it!).
The use of Be'lakor is interesting and supportable in canon - it is implied that the Chaos Gods and the Demons in Fantasy are the same as that in 40K (although who knows now with the Age of Sigmar stuff coming along /sigh).
I am interested in seeing how Mortarion will be done - to the best of my knowledge, he is mostly an unknown amongst the Primarchs, even the with the seemingly endless new Horus Heresy books. However, from what we do know he should be vehemently anti psyker and therefore not really get on with Magnus and hate the new version of the Decree of Nikaea. Although this is an inversion universe, so I suppose anything goes.
My only real criticism so far is that it is a little light on the whole on events after the Heresy itself, although this may be being saved for the proposed Times of Ending fanfiction that may appear. It is also about the Roboutian Heresy itself, so that is also not overly surprising I suppose.
Other than that though, a truly wonderful addition to an interesting what if inversion of the 40K universe.
I am enjoying the Roboutian Heresy so far - whilst the premise is simple, this is not a bad thing, as it gives the story time to develop naturally.
The inversion of the Horus Heresy as a concept is fascinating enough, but this chapter on the Legion that led the Heresy in this universe is I think the second best so far, with only the chapter on the Night Lord's surpassing it so far (although I am waiting for the Thousand Sons turn - I want my loyalist Egyptian Space Sorcerers damn it!).
The use of Be'lakor is interesting and supportable in canon - it is implied that the Chaos Gods and the Demons in Fantasy are the same as that in 40K (although who knows now with the Age of Sigmar stuff coming along /sigh).
I am interested in seeing how Mortarion will be done - to the best of my knowledge, he is mostly an unknown amongst the Primarchs, even the with the seemingly endless new Horus Heresy books. However, from what we do know he should be vehemently anti psyker and therefore not really get on with Magnus and hate the new version of the Decree of Nikaea. Although this is an inversion universe, so I suppose anything goes.
My only real criticism so far is that it is a little light on the whole on events after the Heresy itself, although this may be being saved for the proposed Times of Ending fanfiction that may appear. It is also about the Roboutian Heresy itself, so that is also not overly surprising I suppose.
Other than that though, a truly wonderful addition to an interesting what if inversion of the 40K universe.
4/22/2016 c12 Teefplucka
I was thinking that after writing about the astartes legions' backgrounds, you should write a synopsis of the events and confrontations that led up to Calgar and his merry band, alongside a RG contingent and an ascended Ventanus among other allies, breaking out of the Ruinstorm and wreaking havoc on the Imperium while Gage and Be'lakor are off joining the 13th Black Crusade at Cadia, and in response some WB heroes along with Honsou try to repel them. In short, a reversed version of the Invasion of Ultramar in canon.
I was thinking that after writing about the astartes legions' backgrounds, you should write a synopsis of the events and confrontations that led up to Calgar and his merry band, alongside a RG contingent and an ascended Ventanus among other allies, breaking out of the Ruinstorm and wreaking havoc on the Imperium while Gage and Be'lakor are off joining the 13th Black Crusade at Cadia, and in response some WB heroes along with Honsou try to repel them. In short, a reversed version of the Invasion of Ultramar in canon.
4/22/2016 c12 13The Incredible Muffin
While this was awesome to read, I can't help but hate the Ultrasmurfs just as much. They annoy me when they're loyal, and they annoy me as traitors. Seriously, alternate Imperium, keep these guys locked away!
13The Incredible MuffinWhile this was awesome to read, I can't help but hate the Ultrasmurfs just as much. They annoy me when they're loyal, and they annoy me as traitors. Seriously, alternate Imperium, keep these guys locked away!
4/22/2016 c12 2Darkerpaths
"Let us sit upon the ground and tell sad stories of the deaths of kings..."
Very good chapter, I like the detail you put into events in this heresy.
And what was that? War of the Beast or something, that sounds new.
A few missing letters but I think this is one of your best. Looking forward to more.
2Darkerpaths"Let us sit upon the ground and tell sad stories of the deaths of kings..."
Very good chapter, I like the detail you put into events in this heresy.
And what was that? War of the Beast or something, that sounds new.
A few missing letters but I think this is one of your best. Looking forward to more.
4/22/2016 c12 69Jaenera Targaryen
Ah, so just as the self-sacrifice of his mother showed Curze the true path, so too did the ignoble death of his mother turned Guilliman into a path of madness.
Be'lakor...nice, a very nice callback to the glory days before of Age of Sigmarines.
Guilliman is alive, eh? But then again so are Magnus (who if I interpret the Dark Angels Index Astartes' article and the part where he fights Lion has the Emperor's scepter), Angron, Fulgrim, and Lorgar (even if they are wandering around somewhere) based on the World Eaters' Index Astartes article. And if Guilliman is alive despite getting his soul burned by the Emperor's wrath, then again from the Blood Angels' Index Astartes article Horus' shade is still up and kicking.
Oh and Perturabo...
Up next: Death Guard. And then after that, the Thousand Sons. I can hardly wait.
P.S. Judging from what's been seen so far, I have high hopes you can do better than GW did with End Times and Age of Sigmarines when you make an End Times equivalent for this. With that said, it would be nice if we could also get some more information about this world apart from the Astartes after the Index Astartes is finished. Like the history of the Grey Knights (there are still Astartes legions so shouldn't they be a legion as well instead of a mere chapter), or the Sisters of Battle (did the legions and which ones - probably Word Bearers and Night Lords and of course World Eaters - attack Terra during the end of the Age of Apostasy like in canon) for some things.
69Jaenera TargaryenAh, so just as the self-sacrifice of his mother showed Curze the true path, so too did the ignoble death of his mother turned Guilliman into a path of madness.
Be'lakor...nice, a very nice callback to the glory days before of Age of Sigmarines.
Guilliman is alive, eh? But then again so are Magnus (who if I interpret the Dark Angels Index Astartes' article and the part where he fights Lion has the Emperor's scepter), Angron, Fulgrim, and Lorgar (even if they are wandering around somewhere) based on the World Eaters' Index Astartes article. And if Guilliman is alive despite getting his soul burned by the Emperor's wrath, then again from the Blood Angels' Index Astartes article Horus' shade is still up and kicking.
Oh and Perturabo...
Up next: Death Guard. And then after that, the Thousand Sons. I can hardly wait.
P.S. Judging from what's been seen so far, I have high hopes you can do better than GW did with End Times and Age of Sigmarines when you make an End Times equivalent for this. With that said, it would be nice if we could also get some more information about this world apart from the Astartes after the Index Astartes is finished. Like the history of the Grey Knights (there are still Astartes legions so shouldn't they be a legion as well instead of a mere chapter), or the Sisters of Battle (did the legions and which ones - probably Word Bearers and Night Lords and of course World Eaters - attack Terra during the end of the Age of Apostasy like in canon) for some things.
4/22/2016 c12 2Dragonkeeper10
Thiel is the man! Also god damn it Guilliman is still alive but he should remember, Chaos may be eternal but so is order. He better get alive before a Tyranid finds him and eats him. Then the Hivemind will have a new toy.
2Dragonkeeper10Thiel is the man! Also god damn it Guilliman is still alive but he should remember, Chaos may be eternal but so is order. He better get alive before a Tyranid finds him and eats him. Then the Hivemind will have a new toy.
4/9/2016 c11 AU Angron
ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED?!
best quote by far
ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED?!
best quote by far
3/9/2016 c3 jimmy carter
just reading some of these now. really like them. best was the reference to the current 40k universe were the EC are the traitors and that the loyalist versions in this universe (roboutian heresy) see their deeds
just reading some of these now. really like them. best was the reference to the current 40k universe were the EC are the traitors and that the loyalist versions in this universe (roboutian heresy) see their deeds
3/4/2016 c8 1Archetype-Moon
This easily the best chapter I have read so far. I honestly like this Heresy more than canon since I believe that most of the Traitor Primarchs (Horus, Fulgrim, Mortarion, Konrad Kurze (cuz you can't turn the goddamn Batman) and Alpharius/Omegon (are they actually traitors?)) should have fallen.
Speaking of the Alpha Legion, I believe they are the ones "responsible for writing "Horus Heresy" somewhere just passed the middle instead of "Roboutian Heresy".
1Archetype-MoonThis easily the best chapter I have read so far. I honestly like this Heresy more than canon since I believe that most of the Traitor Primarchs (Horus, Fulgrim, Mortarion, Konrad Kurze (cuz you can't turn the goddamn Batman) and Alpharius/Omegon (are they actually traitors?)) should have fallen.
Speaking of the Alpha Legion, I believe they are the ones "responsible for writing "Horus Heresy" somewhere just passed the middle instead of "Roboutian Heresy".
2/16/2016 c1 StonerSmurf
Bro, you're an awesome writer! Every time you post a new chapter of whichever fic you're working on, I start at chapter 1 and reread the whole story. This one I think is better than the Dornian Heresy by that other dude, whatever his name is! Warband is just one of the top tales on the whole frikkin website and I'm a li'l upset that you haven't written a short story based on an idea that I posted a while back, considering I'm such a loyal reader.
Moving on, these are just well written stories.
Bro, you're an awesome writer! Every time you post a new chapter of whichever fic you're working on, I start at chapter 1 and reread the whole story. This one I think is better than the Dornian Heresy by that other dude, whatever his name is! Warband is just one of the top tales on the whole frikkin website and I'm a li'l upset that you haven't written a short story based on an idea that I posted a while back, considering I'm such a loyal reader.
Moving on, these are just well written stories.
1/28/2016 c11 Zralock
My only question is, will we get to hear anymore about Eldrad and the consequences he has to face for deciding not to attack Angron?
My only question is, will we get to hear anymore about Eldrad and the consequences he has to face for deciding not to attack Angron?
1/23/2016 c1 Ravill Pryde
After many years as a lurker i finally made an account to let the writers, who weave such grand tales, know my appreciation. And i am starting here, with the, in my opinion, greatest of them all . This review is representative of all your stories. Since i lack literary training i cannot offer any kind of criticism. All i can do is say that i like your writing style a lot, and i appreciate that you stick to the fluff consequently enough for me not to notice any deviations from it. And i am a real nerd. Keep up your good work if you feel like it. It is greatly appreciated.
After many years as a lurker i finally made an account to let the writers, who weave such grand tales, know my appreciation. And i am starting here, with the, in my opinion, greatest of them all . This review is representative of all your stories. Since i lack literary training i cannot offer any kind of criticism. All i can do is say that i like your writing style a lot, and i appreciate that you stick to the fluff consequently enough for me not to notice any deviations from it. And i am a real nerd. Keep up your good work if you feel like it. It is greatly appreciated.
1/21/2016 c11 6Nemris
For the first time during this whole series, I had to take a small pause because of all the talk about World Eaters and moral compass and what not at the beginning.
Who would have thought that the World Eaters would have been the largest Legion of the present day Imperium. I Understand the reasons why Emperor's children would be the smallest, but I would have bet that the World Eaters would have been a close second.
This thing you are doing with Night Lords and World Eaters, making them the most humane ones, is kinda strange thing to read about. I know you want to reverse them as equally good guys as they were bad guys in the canon, but something about these awesome blood brothers defending the good values in the darkening Imperium just makes me take a deep breath after all these years of 'Blood for the Blood God'.
I think you did well with the name of the legion. that is pretty much the only reasoning I could understand, and I even think it really speaks volume about the character of the XIIth Primarch.
Too bad we did not get to see him taking on other Primarchs, or a speech to Guilliman about Courage and Honor.
You are moving too fast, I still have the Iron Hands under a brush!
The Ultramarines are next then. Really looking forward to that one.
Keep up the good work.
6NemrisFor the first time during this whole series, I had to take a small pause because of all the talk about World Eaters and moral compass and what not at the beginning.
Who would have thought that the World Eaters would have been the largest Legion of the present day Imperium. I Understand the reasons why Emperor's children would be the smallest, but I would have bet that the World Eaters would have been a close second.
This thing you are doing with Night Lords and World Eaters, making them the most humane ones, is kinda strange thing to read about. I know you want to reverse them as equally good guys as they were bad guys in the canon, but something about these awesome blood brothers defending the good values in the darkening Imperium just makes me take a deep breath after all these years of 'Blood for the Blood God'.
I think you did well with the name of the legion. that is pretty much the only reasoning I could understand, and I even think it really speaks volume about the character of the XIIth Primarch.
Too bad we did not get to see him taking on other Primarchs, or a speech to Guilliman about Courage and Honor.
You are moving too fast, I still have the Iron Hands under a brush!
The Ultramarines are next then. Really looking forward to that one.
Keep up the good work.
1/20/2016 c11 69Jaenera Targaryen
Huh...so Angron and his legion are the 'Space Wolves' of this universe. How very interesting...
As for the Primarchs' disappearing...well I'm sure that when darkest hour comes, and Humanity's need is dire, they will return to be Humanity's Sword and Shield once more.
69Jaenera TargaryenHuh...so Angron and his legion are the 'Space Wolves' of this universe. How very interesting...
As for the Primarchs' disappearing...well I'm sure that when darkest hour comes, and Humanity's need is dire, they will return to be Humanity's Sword and Shield once more.