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5/6/2016 c1 80peppe1951
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8/16/2014 c1 29Edhla
Hi there :) I'm not strictly speaking canon blind, but it's been many years since I watched this show.

I love a bit of graveside angst, and I think you've done a good job of conveying how heavily Ray's death weighs upon Hannibal. The "white cross standing vigil" is a lovely turn of phrase.

For concrit, there did seem to be a few spelling, punctuation and grammar errors in this, for example, missing apostrophes in "Ray's army beret", and commas from [like BA had said, they owed Ray, and his death didn't negate that.] The beginning part, regarding the "neutralising" of the Watkins, felt a little rushed over and I felt myself longing for more details, but if that's something that was covered at length in canon, it may well be my own canon blindness talking.

I enjoyed this. Thank you for writing it x
7/31/2014 c1 24MissEclipse
Have our stories just crossed in transit!

Nice tribute, kimosabi. The Special Forces' motto fitted the atmosphere of the story perfectly.

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