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8/1/2015 c4 7Myra the Dovahkiin
great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.

I think Ash should have at least one legendary (perferably Mewtwo who Ash could of caught, but rarely use. Namely against legendaries only). Ash could of caught his clones or they have lived long enough to live on their own (seriously it's been 5 maybe 6 years now).
8/1/2015 c4 Ranmaleopard
This is just fucking amazing and I can't wait for more. Please continue!
3/12/2015 c4 Cerberus13
looks like Charizard going to show up soon.
update soon.
2/22/2015 c4 1SprocketLeaderKara
Not bad... not bad. Better than most pieces on this website, as there are quite a few unfinished messes, but this is not an unfinished mess, this is an unfinished painting. You have nice writing, as well as making sure that Ash got the slap in the face he needed to continue. I'd ask you to please continue the story, as you show Ash using unique and interesting tactics, and your battles are not just 'Use Flamethrower, Use Hyper Beam, Finish it with Thunderbolt' etc.

Also... would you happen to be a WWE fan? Having the ref's name as Mike Chioda (who is an official referee in the WWE) is one possible sign, but Alder's 'Are. You. REAAADDDDDDYYYY.' reminds me of a certain degenerate.
2/18/2015 c4 Guest
Nicely done in this with ash getting dragonite since iris truly had no claim to dragonite in the anime other than her dragon fetish and it's very appreciated to see a story where ash actually preps for the unova league instead of him treating it like a slightly more mature kanto or invincible with powerhouses randomly appearing. But please don't create anything similar to trollbias for this story to conviently have someone able to beat a serious ash.
2/8/2015 c4 Guest
Great story!
1/18/2015 c4 Honeysingh96
Great chapter here!
12/24/2014 c4 1WhenWindWhirls
Hmmm, good one thst fight, great battle scene. Yiu could make Ash more knowledgeable in matters concerning the fairer sex though, I still don't believe how naive and dense most of the protagonists are, I mean seriously? An 16yr old guy wondering about holding hands & stuff...
The rest is great though...
Plz update soon...
12/7/2014 c4 RIP my GPA
Yes, Ash won!
12/7/2014 c3 RIP my GPA
lol, u incorporated muks body from ur other story.
12/7/2014 c2 RIP my GPA
Poor piplup
12/6/2014 c1 RIP my GPA
Not bad looks like a good read
12/3/2014 c4 6Mad Library Scientist
Gotta say, I love these two stories of yours, though I do wish there was a bit more romance that there currently is, but I understand that it's not the main focus of the story.
12/1/2014 c4 Foxsadist712
Nice chapter, but the competitive battler in me just laughed at the Heatran reveal at the end. Typically, barring Choice Scarf variants, Mamoswine outspeeds Heatran and OHKO's with earthquake. So in my mind, Dawn's got nothing to worry about. I am excited to see how you handle the situation though. Can't wait for the next chapter
11/26/2014 c4 Guest
Loved the attention to detail, and Ive gotta say that you must really like fire typing, yeah?

Pignite's evolution seemed really realistic, and Magmortar's strength was just awesome.

Awesome chapter overall. Will be waiting for Ash vs Heatran. Coz there's no way Dawn will win...
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