for Pokemon: Moths to a Flame12/14/2014 c3 Cosmic Gerbil
Saturn has many weapons! Good, good, he needs them. He functions better with Medieval weapons, everybody must agree!
Saturn has many weapons! Good, good, he needs them. He functions better with Medieval weapons, everybody must agree!
12/13/2014 c1 
4telli21
That was really interesting. I feel like I couldn't picture Ash holding a weapon but I really hope to see him more aggressive than in the show. Awesome story, great idea!
4telli21That was really interesting. I feel like I couldn't picture Ash holding a weapon but I really hope to see him more aggressive than in the show. Awesome story, great idea!
12/13/2014 c2 No Longer Active Here
Chapter two! Here I am! Betcha you didn't expect this!
I do enjoy the violence.
Lol at poor Barry tripping over. Guy just doesn't catch a break.
Aww Garchomp sounds so cute!
As per usual, I know I'm only at chapter two, but this is going well still.
Aquila
Chapter two! Here I am! Betcha you didn't expect this!
I do enjoy the violence.
Lol at poor Barry tripping over. Guy just doesn't catch a break.
Aww Garchomp sounds so cute!
As per usual, I know I'm only at chapter two, but this is going well still.
Aquila
12/12/2014 c2 DistortionDaxe
Cool. Didn't expect so much metal weapons. This wouldn't even need to be a Pokemon story. Pretty awesome. Not really much I can tell that you could improve on. Maybe a little back story.
Cool. Didn't expect so much metal weapons. This wouldn't even need to be a Pokemon story. Pretty awesome. Not really much I can tell that you could improve on. Maybe a little back story.
12/12/2014 c1 DistortionDaxe
Amazing. Good descriptions, background, and kick-ass Cynthia action. Well done.
Amazing. Good descriptions, background, and kick-ass Cynthia action. Well done.
12/2/2014 c6 pikachewy1
very unique plot, I like. Also, nice touch with the teenage Sabrina. It's clear that you put a lot of thought into this. I didn't spot any grammar errors or plot holes so excellent work. However, it seems you are falling into the trap of asking for reviews. It's only natural for writers to want reviews: it's the only way to get real feedback on this site and good reviews give a sense of accomplishment, but repeatedly asking for reviews is frowned on by most people and actually makes them less likely to review. Asking once or twice, at least after the first few chapters or so, is fine, but beyond that and people tend to get annoyed. It's just the (admittedly somewhat odd) etiquette on this site, but just something you should be aware of. While we are on the topic, I personally believe it is always best to write for fun as something you enjoy first and foremost. Also, if you put your heart into a story and keep at it, people will notice and the reviewers will come (like yours truly). Maybe not a large number of them, simply due to the volume of stories and search options on this site, but they will come. Hope that helps and stay awesome.
very unique plot, I like. Also, nice touch with the teenage Sabrina. It's clear that you put a lot of thought into this. I didn't spot any grammar errors or plot holes so excellent work. However, it seems you are falling into the trap of asking for reviews. It's only natural for writers to want reviews: it's the only way to get real feedback on this site and good reviews give a sense of accomplishment, but repeatedly asking for reviews is frowned on by most people and actually makes them less likely to review. Asking once or twice, at least after the first few chapters or so, is fine, but beyond that and people tend to get annoyed. It's just the (admittedly somewhat odd) etiquette on this site, but just something you should be aware of. While we are on the topic, I personally believe it is always best to write for fun as something you enjoy first and foremost. Also, if you put your heart into a story and keep at it, people will notice and the reviewers will come (like yours truly). Maybe not a large number of them, simply due to the volume of stories and search options on this site, but they will come. Hope that helps and stay awesome.
10/13/2014 c3 1ThunderHawk14
Another good chapter, Cynthia kicked some more ass, but she still got pushed off of a cliff...
I think the pokemon league arent taking the crisis in front of them seriously enough but i like how Cynthia took the oppurtunity to do it alone even when outnumbered.
In short, awesome chapter.
1ThunderHawk14Another good chapter, Cynthia kicked some more ass, but she still got pushed off of a cliff...
I think the pokemon league arent taking the crisis in front of them seriously enough but i like how Cynthia took the oppurtunity to do it alone even when outnumbered.
In short, awesome chapter.
10/13/2014 c2 ThunderHawk14
Oce again Cynthia is being a total badass aand kicking more ass, even making Mars scream like a little girl and run away!
The humor, to me, made this chapter really enjoyable to read, along with everything else good with it, but i just like the funny stuff i guess...
Overall though, great chapter.
Oce again Cynthia is being a total badass aand kicking more ass, even making Mars scream like a little girl and run away!
The humor, to me, made this chapter really enjoyable to read, along with everything else good with it, but i just like the funny stuff i guess...
Overall though, great chapter.
10/13/2014 c1 ThunderHawk14
I love the detail that went into this chapter. Everything was described well enough to the point where i could picture it in my head very clearly. Cant wait for a new chapter!
I love the detail that went into this chapter. Everything was described well enough to the point where i could picture it in my head very clearly. Cant wait for a new chapter!