
10/28/2015 c4
9CheshireKitKat
more please! I like the nice touch of your oc being the doctor's daughter. XD

more please! I like the nice touch of your oc being the doctor's daughter. XD
3/14/2015 c4
21Sierra Wood
Love it! As an amature photographer myself I know it must be a struggle to capture the eccentric hosts. Update soon!

Love it! As an amature photographer myself I know it must be a struggle to capture the eccentric hosts. Update soon!
1/17/2015 c4 Guest
Please upate soon
Please upate soon
12/10/2014 c4
6Fox Trot 9
Whoa... ( O_O ) OMFG, I'm speechless... THAT was amazing! I never thought Emi would be the birth daughter of this Dr. Yabu... I wonder how the doctor's gonna react to her sudden presence in this school and how that might change things... And you seem to have left a little cliffhanger at the end there... So I'm assuming that this is not the end to Emi's little family reunion... Though I also wonder what happened to her mother... Will she tell Dr. Yabu what happened to her? It looks like a major turning point in Emi's life has just arrived, so I wonder if she'll reconcile with the doctor or not... Hmmmmmmm... Can't wait for an update! ( _ )

Whoa... ( O_O ) OMFG, I'm speechless... THAT was amazing! I never thought Emi would be the birth daughter of this Dr. Yabu... I wonder how the doctor's gonna react to her sudden presence in this school and how that might change things... And you seem to have left a little cliffhanger at the end there... So I'm assuming that this is not the end to Emi's little family reunion... Though I also wonder what happened to her mother... Will she tell Dr. Yabu what happened to her? It looks like a major turning point in Emi's life has just arrived, so I wonder if she'll reconcile with the doctor or not... Hmmmmmmm... Can't wait for an update! ( _ )
12/10/2014 c3 Fox Trot 9
Hehehehehe... OMG, that was awesomely well-written... And the little part Emi added with the "accident" at the end of freaking awesome... And I think that would actually make sense, since Emi seems to be bisexual... And the fact that Emi took pictures of the even from the hosts/guests to that last part with Haruhi kissing Kaneko was awesome... I can imagine what the photo album would look like with THOSE pictures in it... A snapshot by snapshot of Tamaki's first kiss with Haruhi going up in flame... I can definitely see the twins taunting him with it just for kicks... Hehehe... Poor Tamaki... ( T_T )
Hehehehehe... OMG, that was awesomely well-written... And the little part Emi added with the "accident" at the end of freaking awesome... And I think that would actually make sense, since Emi seems to be bisexual... And the fact that Emi took pictures of the even from the hosts/guests to that last part with Haruhi kissing Kaneko was awesome... I can imagine what the photo album would look like with THOSE pictures in it... A snapshot by snapshot of Tamaki's first kiss with Haruhi going up in flame... I can definitely see the twins taunting him with it just for kicks... Hehehe... Poor Tamaki... ( T_T )
12/9/2014 c2 Fox Trot 9
Okay, I must be honest here... Hope I don't hurt your feelings, these are just my observations...
While I love the faithful characterizations of the hosts and overall anime plotline and overall effort you put into making this story seamlessly into the original story, the fact that I've already watched the anime means that the plot becomes kinda predictable for me...
And since this story follows the events of the anime so closely in the same episodic style as the anime, Emi Kaito becomes a passive character, more like an observer of what's happening (like in this chapter) than a participant that moves the story forward... As such, Emi's adventures with the hosts becomes kinda like a retelling of the original story line...
My suggestion/observation is this: Since this is Emi Kaito's story, and since she's apparently paired with the twins, add in some new adventures (chapters) that center around her adventures with the twins in between the adventures (chapters) that adhere to the original plot of the manga... This will add variety to the plot without impinging too much on Haruhi's original role in the original storyline... This might give Emi more narrative weight in her own story... Um... This is just a suggestion/observation, though...
Okay, I must be honest here... Hope I don't hurt your feelings, these are just my observations...
While I love the faithful characterizations of the hosts and overall anime plotline and overall effort you put into making this story seamlessly into the original story, the fact that I've already watched the anime means that the plot becomes kinda predictable for me...
And since this story follows the events of the anime so closely in the same episodic style as the anime, Emi Kaito becomes a passive character, more like an observer of what's happening (like in this chapter) than a participant that moves the story forward... As such, Emi's adventures with the hosts becomes kinda like a retelling of the original story line...
My suggestion/observation is this: Since this is Emi Kaito's story, and since she's apparently paired with the twins, add in some new adventures (chapters) that center around her adventures with the twins in between the adventures (chapters) that adhere to the original plot of the manga... This will add variety to the plot without impinging too much on Haruhi's original role in the original storyline... This might give Emi more narrative weight in her own story... Um... This is just a suggestion/observation, though...
12/9/2014 c1 Fox Trot 9
Wow, this is actually really good... All the hosts were in-character... Tamaki's wonderfully flamboyant, and Kyoya's coniving, the twins were twincestuous, Honey's cute, Mori's strong and silent and Haruhi's... well, Haruhi... Another thing I liked about this was that you included details of their surroundings to help the reader flesh out the scenes in my mind... I'm big on scenery and detail...
As for your OC, Emi Kaito, she intrigues me... Looks like Akira Komatzuzawa has some dirt on her parents... And unlike Kyoya, Akira won't have any qualms about ruining other people's lives... Makes me wonder who her parents are... Hmmmmm...
Oh, one more thing: "me" in the 4th paragraph should be "her"... And you said you were struggling with 3rd person in your pm, but that's natural... 3rd person get easier to write the more you write it, trust me...
Wow, this is actually really good... All the hosts were in-character... Tamaki's wonderfully flamboyant, and Kyoya's coniving, the twins were twincestuous, Honey's cute, Mori's strong and silent and Haruhi's... well, Haruhi... Another thing I liked about this was that you included details of their surroundings to help the reader flesh out the scenes in my mind... I'm big on scenery and detail...
As for your OC, Emi Kaito, she intrigues me... Looks like Akira Komatzuzawa has some dirt on her parents... And unlike Kyoya, Akira won't have any qualms about ruining other people's lives... Makes me wonder who her parents are... Hmmmmm...
Oh, one more thing: "me" in the 4th paragraph should be "her"... And you said you were struggling with 3rd person in your pm, but that's natural... 3rd person get easier to write the more you write it, trust me...
11/16/2014 c4
17MarionetteThePuppet
Haha! This is good! I wasn't expecting it to be like the show! Keep up the good work!
Braelynnway out

Haha! This is good! I wasn't expecting it to be like the show! Keep up the good work!
Braelynnway out
11/15/2014 c4
37FlowerChild23
aww. I feel sorry for her father being such a jerk. I don't blame her for not seeing him. cant wait for the next post. this story is good.

aww. I feel sorry for her father being such a jerk. I don't blame her for not seeing him. cant wait for the next post. this story is good.
10/29/2014 c3 Dango Queen
Please keep writing! This story is amazing and I can't stop reading it! I strongly encourage you to continue.
Please keep writing! This story is amazing and I can't stop reading it! I strongly encourage you to continue.
10/4/2014 c1 Guest
I love this think so globbing much.
I love this think so globbing much.
10/2/2014 c3 Loverly
I'm really likin' this fic so far! Keep up the good work! The idea of a bi-sexual or otherwise OC is very interesting!
I'm really likin' this fic so far! Keep up the good work! The idea of a bi-sexual or otherwise OC is very interesting!
10/1/2014 c3 IceMage4739
I love it! (so addicted to these stories, think I may have a problem he he...) It's amazing! Following
I love it! (so addicted to these stories, think I may have a problem he he...) It's amazing! Following