for Why Should I?1/15/2018 c1 nick
Here are my 5 questions on this fanfic as well. 1. Is there more to this plot, besides what was said in the summary? 2. What locations are being used in the fanfic? Be specific. 3. When does it take place? Be specific. 4. Who all is in the fanfic? 5. How old is everyone in the fanfic? Be sure to let me know.
Here are my 5 questions on this fanfic as well. 1. Is there more to this plot, besides what was said in the summary? 2. What locations are being used in the fanfic? Be specific. 3. When does it take place? Be specific. 4. Who all is in the fanfic? 5. How old is everyone in the fanfic? Be sure to let me know.
6/6/2017 c5 
27HolyVengeance
Whoa! Ash is being very secretive and is planning something very big. His timing sounds a bit hasty since his mom may still be awake at 9:28PM, but it'll probably work. This story is very mysterious.
27HolyVengeanceWhoa! Ash is being very secretive and is planning something very big. His timing sounds a bit hasty since his mom may still be awake at 9:28PM, but it'll probably work. This story is very mysterious.
1/29/2017 c1 27Dolphin02
Huh. This was an interesting take on...well, the fact that Ash 'knew' all the girls had crushes on him, and yeah...so. Yup. ;) Anyways, it was really quite strange, in a good way. I liked the interactions between the characters, because it felt authentic. :D
27Dolphin02Huh. This was an interesting take on...well, the fact that Ash 'knew' all the girls had crushes on him, and yeah...so. Yup. ;) Anyways, it was really quite strange, in a good way. I liked the interactions between the characters, because it felt authentic. :D
8/24/2016 c4 48reppad98
Oh yeah, I think this could be a very interesting story. It's an intriguing concept to have Ash deal with some sort of a depression since he lost another League, and I would really like to see his friends help him, it could be a cute story. But it seems you have more than that planned for this story, with the reveal of Ash's father being alive and there are also several other characters involved, though I'm not sure yet what their role will be. The thing with Ash getting updates on his friends via the TV was a bit odd, though, I mean, it's pretty coincidental that everything he wants to know just comes on at just the time he wants to see it. Also, in chapter 2 everything is bunched up together, which kind of makes it hard to read, so perhaps you could change that? This story also has some kind of humor, I liked the bit with Ash watching the documentary on Pikachu and Pichu haha, and Gary's cheesy line was also pretty funny.
Anyway, thank you for writing this, it was surprisingly fun to read (you know, for a story about Ash being so down), and keep writing!
48reppad98Oh yeah, I think this could be a very interesting story. It's an intriguing concept to have Ash deal with some sort of a depression since he lost another League, and I would really like to see his friends help him, it could be a cute story. But it seems you have more than that planned for this story, with the reveal of Ash's father being alive and there are also several other characters involved, though I'm not sure yet what their role will be. The thing with Ash getting updates on his friends via the TV was a bit odd, though, I mean, it's pretty coincidental that everything he wants to know just comes on at just the time he wants to see it. Also, in chapter 2 everything is bunched up together, which kind of makes it hard to read, so perhaps you could change that? This story also has some kind of humor, I liked the bit with Ash watching the documentary on Pikachu and Pichu haha, and Gary's cheesy line was also pretty funny.
Anyway, thank you for writing this, it was surprisingly fun to read (you know, for a story about Ash being so down), and keep writing!
7/14/2015 c4 27HolyVengeance
Oh yeah. I loved the dialogs between you and Ash. Ash has the right idea. Watching TV is much more exciting than participating in a pokemon battle. Olympia and Korrina sound like 2 angry female boxers. Also, Valerie was the referee. Ha! As for Malva and Siebold, they sound almost like bickering siblings. Adam sounds like an interesting and mysterious man. Who's son could be suicidal? Any way, the nick names "The Evolver" and "The Exchanger" are epic. They sound tough. I loved Silver's "What the fuck just happened?" line. That was funny. I love that Ash has a walkie talkie and that he kept his private chat with Gary and Leaf a secret. Secrets are interesting and mysterious. Dang! Ash goes to bed early. I wonder what Ash is going to do in 2 hours. He's up to something that's hush hush. That was an interesting poem. This story is getting more and more mysterious. I love it.
27HolyVengeanceOh yeah. I loved the dialogs between you and Ash. Ash has the right idea. Watching TV is much more exciting than participating in a pokemon battle. Olympia and Korrina sound like 2 angry female boxers. Also, Valerie was the referee. Ha! As for Malva and Siebold, they sound almost like bickering siblings. Adam sounds like an interesting and mysterious man. Who's son could be suicidal? Any way, the nick names "The Evolver" and "The Exchanger" are epic. They sound tough. I loved Silver's "What the fuck just happened?" line. That was funny. I love that Ash has a walkie talkie and that he kept his private chat with Gary and Leaf a secret. Secrets are interesting and mysterious. Dang! Ash goes to bed early. I wonder what Ash is going to do in 2 hours. He's up to something that's hush hush. That was an interesting poem. This story is getting more and more mysterious. I love it.
5/10/2015 c3 HolyVengeance
It doesn't surprise me that Clemont isn't leaving his inventions to run his gym. He seems to be more interested in being an inventor rather than a gym leader. Malva sounds scary when she's angry. I wonder why exactly Brock has asked Forrest to monitor Ash's actions. I really wish the creators of pokemon would introduce Ash's father in the anime. I like how you included some of the anime characters' manga counter parts in this chapter. Very clever. Holy crap. Stop the presses. Iris and Cilan are getting married. Also, Dawn and Barry are a couple. Even more surprising, Paul and Zoey are a couple. "Does Twinleaf have a low boy population?". Rhonda insulted Barry by asking Dawn that. BURN! As for Paul, he had a rough childhood it sounds like. How did Jeremy David Gold die and how is it exactly that even though he died at 22, he had a son that sounds like he's a few years old? I loved Gary's line when he said "It's like she used attract on me and it was super effective.". That was a clever awesome line. I don't think Leaf should've smacked Gary for his clever awesome line.
It doesn't surprise me that Clemont isn't leaving his inventions to run his gym. He seems to be more interested in being an inventor rather than a gym leader. Malva sounds scary when she's angry. I wonder why exactly Brock has asked Forrest to monitor Ash's actions. I really wish the creators of pokemon would introduce Ash's father in the anime. I like how you included some of the anime characters' manga counter parts in this chapter. Very clever. Holy crap. Stop the presses. Iris and Cilan are getting married. Also, Dawn and Barry are a couple. Even more surprising, Paul and Zoey are a couple. "Does Twinleaf have a low boy population?". Rhonda insulted Barry by asking Dawn that. BURN! As for Paul, he had a rough childhood it sounds like. How did Jeremy David Gold die and how is it exactly that even though he died at 22, he had a son that sounds like he's a few years old? I loved Gary's line when he said "It's like she used attract on me and it was super effective.". That was a clever awesome line. I don't think Leaf should've smacked Gary for his clever awesome line.
2/9/2015 c2 13QuartzClaw
Nice chapter! I liked getting a little history on Mr. Mime. And Pikachu and his love for ketchup! Hm, I can't remember the episode Ash pulls Brock's ear, but for the seven Pokemon, are they Mankey, Machop, Espeon, Mudkip, Riolu, Throh, and Furfrou?
13QuartzClawNice chapter! I liked getting a little history on Mr. Mime. And Pikachu and his love for ketchup! Hm, I can't remember the episode Ash pulls Brock's ear, but for the seven Pokemon, are they Mankey, Machop, Espeon, Mudkip, Riolu, Throh, and Furfrou?
2/9/2015 c1 QuartzClaw
Yeah, I remember when Ash lost to Cameron in the Unova league. He sounds pretty upset about it. I like how he remembers all of his previous travelling companions. The psychic trainer who'll be appearing, maybe it's Sabrina?
Yeah, I remember when Ash lost to Cameron in the Unova league. He sounds pretty upset about it. I like how he remembers all of his previous travelling companions. The psychic trainer who'll be appearing, maybe it's Sabrina?
9/2/2014 c2 6RPG1115
good long chapter and the pokemon you mentioned are monkey, macho, espeon, mud kip, riolu, throb, and panocha i believe thats the right pokemon though if they mean anything I don't know it.
6RPG1115good long chapter and the pokemon you mentioned are monkey, macho, espeon, mud kip, riolu, throb, and panocha i believe thats the right pokemon though if they mean anything I don't know it.
8/24/2014 c2 27HolyVengeance
56 is mankey, 66 is machop, 196 is espeon, 258 mudkip, 447 is riolu, 538 is throh, and 674 is pancham. Forrest is talking like a stalker.
27HolyVengeance56 is mankey, 66 is machop, 196 is espeon, 258 mudkip, 447 is riolu, 538 is throh, and 674 is pancham. Forrest is talking like a stalker.
8/24/2014 c1 HolyVengeance
It was a shame that Ash did worser in the Unova league then what he did during the Sinnoh league. I'm not familiar with the character Forrest Harrison. This story is very interesting already.
It was a shame that Ash did worser in the Unova league then what he did during the Sinnoh league. I'm not familiar with the character Forrest Harrison. This story is very interesting already.