9/21/2014 c5 Guest
Oh, that is an interesting change at the end, Fu is in Konoha. Will she be allowed to stay even after Naruto and Hinata return?
Oh, that is an interesting change at the end, Fu is in Konoha. Will she be allowed to stay even after Naruto and Hinata return?
9/21/2014 c5 3Deathmvp
Great work on this chapter here. I have to say though I think the high light was the flash back as even if he was still under the fake memerys it would have started to turn him agenst the 10 year plain.
I am suprised about him asking for more slaves as I would have though it would make things even harder.
Great work on this chapter here. I have to say though I think the high light was the flash back as even if he was still under the fake memerys it would have started to turn him agenst the 10 year plain.
I am suprised about him asking for more slaves as I would have though it would make things even harder.
9/21/2014 c5 2SilentSambo88
This chapter raised a red flag with the possibility of the pairing turning into NaruHarem. In the original, Naruto didn't take multiple slaves, and instead just freed all of them at once when he finally rebelled. For now, it's only a pretense, a lie spoken to protect, but Naruto is bound to develop romantic feelings for more people than Hinata, if he takes more slaves.
This chapter raised a red flag with the possibility of the pairing turning into NaruHarem. In the original, Naruto didn't take multiple slaves, and instead just freed all of them at once when he finally rebelled. For now, it's only a pretense, a lie spoken to protect, but Naruto is bound to develop romantic feelings for more people than Hinata, if he takes more slaves.
9/21/2014 c5 DragonPony022
Great that they have each other. Naruto will have a hell of a time breaking her of that slave mindset. I do wonder how long it will be before he start to become attracted to her as more then a friend. I know she will fall for him quick with how he is treating her as a person and not property which will mean the world to her. I bet he will also train her in secret so she can defend herself. If he can get a summoning he can contact the leaf and let them know what is going on. I just thought of it, wont he HAVE to sleep with her by their next check up to show he is trying to revive his clan. They will be able to tell if they haven't done it yet, unless they fix that during her training which would piss Naruto off that they would go that far to get her ready to be a slave.
Good job with this chapter, can't wait to see what is next. I hope we get to see some cute moments between our trapped lovebirds
Great that they have each other. Naruto will have a hell of a time breaking her of that slave mindset. I do wonder how long it will be before he start to become attracted to her as more then a friend. I know she will fall for him quick with how he is treating her as a person and not property which will mean the world to her. I bet he will also train her in secret so she can defend herself. If he can get a summoning he can contact the leaf and let them know what is going on. I just thought of it, wont he HAVE to sleep with her by their next check up to show he is trying to revive his clan. They will be able to tell if they haven't done it yet, unless they fix that during her training which would piss Naruto off that they would go that far to get her ready to be a slave.
Good job with this chapter, can't wait to see what is next. I hope we get to see some cute moments between our trapped lovebirds
9/21/2014 c5 101VFSNAKE
Awesome! Naruto now has Hinata. Fu is now in Konoha. Interesting. Keep going. Who else will Naruto rescue under the presence of taking another slave?
Awesome! Naruto now has Hinata. Fu is now in Konoha. Interesting. Keep going. Who else will Naruto rescue under the presence of taking another slave?
9/18/2014 c4 SkyUnih
Glad to see Naruto is ready to turn on the Raikage when the time is right, and hoping Naruto picks Hinata as his before someone else does in that program.
Glad to see Naruto is ready to turn on the Raikage when the time is right, and hoping Naruto picks Hinata as his before someone else does in that program.
9/18/2014 c4 3Deathmvp
Great work on this chapter espeacly the details on Hinata in this chapter. I do think you should have her dreaming about Naruto though even it all she can rember when she wakes up is the wiskers and blond hair.
Great work on this chapter espeacly the details on Hinata in this chapter. I do think you should have her dreaming about Naruto though even it all she can rember when she wakes up is the wiskers and blond hair.
9/17/2014 c4 2SilentSambo88
From what I remember in the original, Naruto was limited to the version two cloak. Not sure what to think of giving him Nine-Tails Chakra Mode in the rewrite, even at 10%.
Namikaze is not a clan. As someone else stated, Minato was an orphan.
I know you can't reveal anything major, but there is one thing that bothers me by not knowing: what is your stance on writing lemon scenes? The original had Hinata knocked up before Naruto destroyed Kumo and freed the slaves. While I am not against pre-time skip lemons for the Naru/Hina pairing, I feel that the other readers deserve to know your stance on this issue, as it will affect the rewrite. Personally, I don't care what you do here as long as it's well-written, but it's the one question I feel should be answered before you get to that point. If you can't answer in an A/N, then PM me?
From what I remember in the original, Naruto was limited to the version two cloak. Not sure what to think of giving him Nine-Tails Chakra Mode in the rewrite, even at 10%.
Namikaze is not a clan. As someone else stated, Minato was an orphan.
I know you can't reveal anything major, but there is one thing that bothers me by not knowing: what is your stance on writing lemon scenes? The original had Hinata knocked up before Naruto destroyed Kumo and freed the slaves. While I am not against pre-time skip lemons for the Naru/Hina pairing, I feel that the other readers deserve to know your stance on this issue, as it will affect the rewrite. Personally, I don't care what you do here as long as it's well-written, but it's the one question I feel should be answered before you get to that point. If you can't answer in an A/N, then PM me?
9/17/2014 c4 JOHNXgambit
Thank you I felt that canon naruto is ridiculously forgiving yes I get that is his character but I refuse to believe at any point in time someone would call their parents murderer cool. And after sasuke's latest dickmoves to top all dickmoves I have honestly ran out of sympathy for anything uchiha related.
Thank you I felt that canon naruto is ridiculously forgiving yes I get that is his character but I refuse to believe at any point in time someone would call their parents murderer cool. And after sasuke's latest dickmoves to top all dickmoves I have honestly ran out of sympathy for anything uchiha related.
9/17/2014 c4 101VFSNAKE
Awesome! Soon Naruto and Hinata will be together. Can't wait. Soon Kumo will burn. WHAHAHAHA!
Awesome! Soon Naruto and Hinata will be together. Can't wait. Soon Kumo will burn. WHAHAHAHA!
9/17/2014 c4 Guest
I like how you didn't make B completely evil, but just grey by going with his family, is there hope for B to defect to the leaf?
I like how you didn't make B completely evil, but just grey by going with his family, is there hope for B to defect to the leaf?
9/17/2014 c4 drannakka
after the pein arc the namikaze "clan" was revealed to only contain both minato and naruto as minato was an orphan, just like naruto, who became hokage thus making his name a clan name.
after the pein arc the namikaze "clan" was revealed to only contain both minato and naruto as minato was an orphan, just like naruto, who became hokage thus making his name a clan name.
9/17/2014 c4 DragonPony022
I am happy to see he broke the seal on his memory and even better that he is partners with Kyu. Now he just has to be the one to be with Hinata before they pass her off to someone else. All he would have to do is talk about how epic their kids will be and that bloodline hungry fool will jump at the chance. Now convincing her about her past will be hard but i am sure he can do it. I wonder if he can do the chakra transfer to her to help get her to become stronger to make it easier to get out of there together.
I am happy to see he broke the seal on his memory and even better that he is partners with Kyu. Now he just has to be the one to be with Hinata before they pass her off to someone else. All he would have to do is talk about how epic their kids will be and that bloodline hungry fool will jump at the chance. Now convincing her about her past will be hard but i am sure he can do it. I wonder if he can do the chakra transfer to her to help get her to become stronger to make it easier to get out of there together.