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9/23/2020 c1 Kryn Womble
I’ve been enjoying this so far but reading PunchingBag!Harry is really difficult. Could you sharpen him up just a tad so he’s not getting conked out every five minutes for ridiculous reasons? I get the whole ‘nerf him by confiscating his stuff’ but it just seems unnecessary, he’s already trapped on the island.

Other than that, I love reading the growing relationship between Harry and Lara.

Do you have plans to finish this or is this on a permanent hiatus?
7/19/2020 c7 owl3764
Great Story. One of my favourite games mixed in with my favourite books (Though I thought the Lara Croft movies were good too) I hope you get back to it one day, but it's been a few years so maybe not. I don't like reading uncompleted stories, but you write so well. Regards
7/9/2020 c5 scyfly
did you know that a mace was used to break bones through heavy armor? what do you think would happen with a point blank hit to the side of the head? this is not even mentioning the spikes on a mace.

god you are stupid
7/9/2020 c4 scyfly
imperio, petrification spell. all good options for a hostage situations.
i havent read it but i can already gues him losing his wand
7/9/2020 c4 scyfly
a bear trap or something a little smallet has the power to break bones or worse shatter them, no way in hell you walk away from that uninjured.
and of harry pries it open instead of vanishing it
7/9/2020 c3 scyfly
he took point because he knew wielding a bow in a tunnel is less the ideal.

why not transfigure a machete, truly your harry suffers from brain damage
7/9/2020 c1 scyfly
falling into a 60ft sea? what does that even mean. you might've meant falling feom 60ft into the sea, but who in their right mind flies so low over the sea in a storm.

he needed shelter and a bag to carry things. if only he had this skill to conjure or transfigure stuff, that would be really handy

you really are using his skills only when you see it fit
7/9/2020 c1 scyfly
how can one loose their supplies when a simple accio returns your stuff. id you want to nerf your mc do it in a way that makes sense
6/29/2020 c7 HPotterfan101
Please update this is a good story
5/1/2020 c7 Guest
I really hope you come back and complete this sometime soon. I'm not really a fan of the fandoms you're currently writing in. I'm glad that you didn't leave this story on a giant cliffhanger like last chapter. I wish Harry was more powerful though. After the cliffhanger from the previous chapter I imagined all sorts of cool ways he could save Lara from the troll samurai thing. I was expecting him to be more worldly, knowledgeable, and powerful after offing Voldemort and traveling the world looking for adventure. He definitely comes off as still being a Hogwarts student. Nevertheless I'm really enjoying this story and I want to see more. I love the dynamic with Harry and Lara and even though Harry comes off as being like a fifth year hogwarts student I know that together they'll make it through. I hope to see you return to this story in the future. Keep it up!
4/16/2020 c7 Mari Wollsch
great, why did you stop writing? xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
3/24/2020 c1 Guest
It does not pass, he conjures several things while bemoaning the fact he doesn’t have a bag ( something he could have conjured)

He could have summoned his lost items back to himself.

And there are several far more effective ways he could have got up the cliff.
3/12/2020 c6 Guestinator
Annnnd done. Harry for no reason, admitting it even, that he doesn't show magic to Roth because 'Nah don't feel like it' killed what little bit of story you had left after you made Harry be such a massive moron constantly.

Can't forget how quickly he changes his tune with that either, and how it seems to have had no impact one way or another.

He has survived how many life and death situations? How many weird things? Dangerous things? But the second he gets here and knows he is in danger... He does nothing? He starts getting stupid? With you even admitting it is simply because you wanted-needed him to be a "punching bag"?

You forget that in game Lara is a badass to the highest degree. She very easily dies when hit most of the time and a single misstep kills her. Here is where you messed up with her - she survives. She wins. That means all the times she does die are not real, they are you simply not being good enough at the game.

Going further that means she is hardly ever hit, she never missteps and her aim along with dodging skills are simply incredible. How you equate that to her being a punching bag, meaning Harry has to be one, is reaching to a insane degree.

I suppose there is a reason you haven't updated this story in half a decade. Thank you for stopping instead of ruining such a amazing idea even more.
12/6/2019 c7 2mc.zero
Yayyy for possession foreshadowing! And yeah... it's time for harry to stop trying to shelter Lara from everything... I mean, it's her game!
9/12/2019 c7 sloksingh45
Please update
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