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12/6/2017 c1 7SSJ2 Future Gohan
This story is just...It's absolutely superb. You'd better finish this!
12/5/2017 c31 23BladeKnightmare
Hey maybe Goten and Trunks becomes ssj violet a fusion of ssj God energy and devil energy By a ritual by the 3 fractions but they can't go normal ssj to ssj 3 instead ssj v1 to ssj v3
11/30/2017 c31 3Mysterious Gamer X
How does Diodora know Akeno? Anyways, this is an amazing story. Can't wait to see how it progresses from here.
11/25/2017 c31 BadazzEXE
I'm glad to see that you've updated this story was kinda thinking it was dead and I'm glad I was proven wrong, but as I read I couldn't help but see that theirs almost no conflict, and when I say that I mean that there doesn't seem to be much of a purpose in Goten character being there he's just seems to be there in case the worse case senerio comes to pass and when it does he just solves it with ease, and that's not really interesting to read. Don't get me wrong I'm not trying to bash on your story but I really have to point out these flaws as to at least help a fellow author in bettering them selves.

So with that in mind I just want to throw out some ideas of mine to hopefully help develope the story more.

The first thing is conflict on the side of Goten and the Rest of the Z Warriors, as far as you've shown there doesn't seems to be any great threat for them to struggle against and well that's just doesn't give much purpose to there characters being present in the story they basically become become bystanders just commenting once in awhile, to fix this you of course have to introduce a threat that they can struggle against and theirs a lot of villains from DB that can be used but for be the most ideal Villain that would fit in the story would be Demigra the Demon god of time that was sealed away by the supreme Kai of time, he would make for an interesting villain that you can insert into the story slowly hinting at him and then revealing bits of information about him, a type of scenario that would make Goten and the rest think that someone is working against them behind the scenes, with that you can then develop the Highschool DxD characters more allowing them to see the level of threats that Gotens and the rest of his friends have had to face through there life time.

One other thing is Goku's standing in the supernatural side of the world, so in my point of view goku is widely know throughout the supernatural world as a being of incredible power unlike anything seen before but the question is what level of stance does goku's influence have in that world for me it would be cool if he's put in a position where he's compared to the likes of Great Red and Ophis and he would have his own title similar to how Ophis is Infinity and Great Red is Dreams Goku could represented "Ascenention" the prime example of someone who transcended his limits to achieve the fantastic.

Also there's the question of if the gods know or are oblivious of the existence of the Gods of destruction the angles the other universes and freaken Zeno himself I would recommend only a few select people knowing about Beerus and Zeno if only to keep the suspense of disbelief intact.

So those are pretty much my ideas I hope this helps in some ways and if not... I'm sorry?

But anyways I look forward to where you take this, hope to see the next update soon.

(Sorry for any grammer and punctuation errors, wrote this on my phone and well I'm just not all that great at writing yet.)
11/18/2017 c31 wweTheBeast2015
Great and this story was truly worth to read it and love the harem girls fights for goten attention is very sweet and love to see what happens next and finally caught up to where your at and it took me two days to do so and excited for the next chapter and until then?
11/18/2017 c30 wweTheBeast2015
Epic chapter and this story was truly worth reading it and glad to see goten and his harem girls bond deeper and like goten and akeno time as well and love to see goten spend more time with all his harem girls as well.
11/18/2017 c29 wweTheBeast2015
This chapter rocks and very entertaining and the hot moments with goten and his harem girl was very sweet and goten so lucky and heck I wish i had the same girls like goten has and love this chapter was fun and hot and entertaining as well and all in three words.
11/18/2017 c28 wweTheBeast2015
This story rocks and loving the moment goten is having with his girls here as well.
11/18/2017 c27 wweTheBeast2015
Sweet and marron third girl in goten harem and this story rocks as well and can't waited to see what happens next as well and more girl in goten harem from the list i seen as well.
11/18/2017 c26 wweTheBeast2015
Amazing and loving goten harem list
11/18/2017 c25 wweTheBeast2015
I hope goten beats trunks this time and great twist for them to have a rematch at a young age as well.
11/18/2017 c24 wweTheBeast2015
Well super chapter and dragon ball super went beyond words as well.
11/18/2017 c23 wweTheBeast2015
Wonderful chapter
11/18/2017 c22 wweTheBeast2015
11/18/2017 c21 wweTheBeast2015
Amazing fight and now Goten first harem is starting with Rias is bonding deeper and can't waited for goten to bond with the other girls in his harem deeper and Akeno as well.
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