for When Two Universes Collide7/1/2016 c6 Guest
Goten is a pervert
Raynare becomes good? Wtf?
If Goten is dense about Marron's feelings, why does he apologize to her after introducing rias to her.
Overall I liked the fic before the rewrites. It felt more natural. The harem seems forced and a dense harem character never loses his dense personality.
The story is Amazing and the fact that this isn't one of those inter dimensional travel fic is great.
But the development felt more believable before the rewrites.
Keep up with the good work and I hope you don't take this review the wrong way. I really love your fic but I hope you make changes :)
Goten is a pervert
Raynare becomes good? Wtf?
If Goten is dense about Marron's feelings, why does he apologize to her after introducing rias to her.
Overall I liked the fic before the rewrites. It felt more natural. The harem seems forced and a dense harem character never loses his dense personality.
The story is Amazing and the fact that this isn't one of those inter dimensional travel fic is great.
But the development felt more believable before the rewrites.
Keep up with the good work and I hope you don't take this review the wrong way. I really love your fic but I hope you make changes :)
6/29/2016 c1 Guest
Chapter 2 is messed up
Goten was sleeping
Then he was laughing on the balcony
And when issei is getting beat up he's sleeping again
I think the rewrites are messing up the story
Chapter 2 is messed up
Goten was sleeping
Then he was laughing on the balcony
And when issei is getting beat up he's sleeping again
I think the rewrites are messing up the story
6/29/2016 c29 Guest
Mdhunter here. Great chapter and story so far! Good job with this crossover! Please continue with the next chapter soon! Looking forward to it, and have a good night!
Mdhunter here. Great chapter and story so far! Good job with this crossover! Please continue with the next chapter soon! Looking forward to it, and have a good night!
6/28/2016 c9 AkaruiNagaiyumi
i think riser does not love rias, not even her body, all he wanted was children with her to live up the glory of his family.
i think riser does not love rias, not even her body, all he wanted was children with her to live up the glory of his family.
6/26/2016 c29 Asshat
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next one
6/26/2016 c29 
1kyro11
Great Chapter, glad that you updated. Man I could feel the tension between Rias and Marron. It's great to see Chi CHi very mellow down over the years and how everyone loves to see the trouble Goten is in. Can't wait for the next update
1kyro11Great Chapter, glad that you updated. Man I could feel the tension between Rias and Marron. It's great to see Chi CHi very mellow down over the years and how everyone loves to see the trouble Goten is in. Can't wait for the next update
6/25/2016 c1 Guest
love the story and i agree with the other comment on here future trunks in this would be pretty lit
love the story and i agree with the other comment on here future trunks in this would be pretty lit
6/25/2016 c29 Guest
awesome great chapter. i hope you can updated more frecuently and about grafia why dont make a reunion with goku and his friends with rias parent and in the reunion grayfia voluntary be the personal maid of goten or somthing like that i mean is only a idea but for some reason you are the writter any way good luck
awesome great chapter. i hope you can updated more frecuently and about grafia why dont make a reunion with goku and his friends with rias parent and in the reunion grayfia voluntary be the personal maid of goten or somthing like that i mean is only a idea but for some reason you are the writter any way good luck
6/25/2016 c29 THE CROW 88
awesome that finally updated great chapter.
i hope you can updated more frecuently.
awesome that finally updated great chapter.
i hope you can updated more frecuently.
6/25/2016 c29 The Tell-Tale Man
Excellent chapter you've finally done there, so please keep updating for the next chapter soon and take care.
Excellent chapter you've finally done there, so please keep updating for the next chapter soon and take care.
6/24/2016 c29 Rebmul
oh god damn I think hes gona end up with rias akeno marron the neko and bird as well as xenovia heheh oh well he has the stamina and this is infinitely more funny with alcohol
oh god damn I think hes gona end up with rias akeno marron the neko and bird as well as xenovia heheh oh well he has the stamina and this is infinitely more funny with alcohol