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9/26/2014 c6 xp3r1a
Great story so far, loving where you're going it.

The only thing that irritates me is the fact that you have harry shouting "Lightning Dragon's..." whenever he uses lightning, which is much more a manga device than something for written work, considering you can describe in much better terms using words. It also breaks the flow of the story, and makes the quality of your writing seem far lower than it actually is (excellent, by the way).

Aside from that, I have no other gripes, I hope you continue writing it so I can read MOAR.
9/28/2014 c7 Xepheria
Thanks for responding to the review :D

Just a couple ideas that I was tossing around in my head:

Why limit Harry to lightning? The destructive stuff is cool and all, and could be useful in certain scenarios, but you could introduce a more fine tuned aspect to his abilities, both for utility and combat - say, messing with the electrochemical impulses in a Death Eater's body to cause untold havoc in their nervous system. Hell, you could even introduce aspects of magnetism to it (seeing as they are the same thing), conscious or inadvertently - with the amounts of power he stores, he should be creating hellish magnetic fields around his body, which could serve as an annoyance (wiping credit cards etc), or a boon (deflecting radiation - though I don't know where said radiation would come from, a spell perhaps).

There are so many angles that you could explore with his abilities, don't limit yourself. The more depth you give it, the more exciting it could possibly get.
9/28/2014 c7 LittleFaeChild
Love it!

"Voldemort riding a Nundu, for sure." Don't forget his pet giant! You forgot the pet giant, didn't you?

Amazing story! :D
9/28/2014 c7 2mwinter1
Awaiting more.
9/28/2014 c7 dobbys-stinger
lol I like this story
9/28/2014 c7 23Remzal Von Enili
Thanks for answering my question, care you answer one more?

Dragonforce yes or no?
9/28/2014 c7 karthik9
It is excellent chapter.I look forward to future updates.
9/27/2014 c6 sertry
Awesome!:)
9/26/2014 c6 karthik9
It is excellent chapter.I look forward to future updates.
9/26/2014 c6 2lip123456789
I sense foreshadowing! I can't wait for Harry to get back to Hogwarts so he can really shake things up! Will Umbridge still be there? If she is, how will harry react/deal with her! I can't wait to find out what happens next! I really love this story, please update soon!

-EM
9/26/2014 c6 LittleFaeChild
Love it!

Daphne Greengrass, eh?
WOO!
9/26/2014 c6 2mwinter1
Awaiting more.
9/26/2014 c6 23Remzal Von Enili
Question, is Harry eventually going to go double dragon like most of the dragons slayers did? And if so what's the second element?
9/26/2014 c6 Melikalilly
i like this story
9/26/2014 c6 joda-jiji
great story i have now in my had how harry enplanes porn to Sirius during dinner XD
hope you update soon
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