for once upon a time1/21/2015 c1 
682Lamia of the Dark
Not capitalizing anything strikes me as an odd stylistic choice, and makes it a bit difficult to read for those of us who prefer proper grammar... Other than that, you have a few minor spelling/grammar issues (such as confusing plural nouns with possessives), but nothing major.
Even though it's mostly just a recap of canon events, framing it as a fairy tale gives the story an interesting twist.
682Lamia of the DarkNot capitalizing anything strikes me as an odd stylistic choice, and makes it a bit difficult to read for those of us who prefer proper grammar... Other than that, you have a few minor spelling/grammar issues (such as confusing plural nouns with possessives), but nothing major.
Even though it's mostly just a recap of canon events, framing it as a fairy tale gives the story an interesting twist.