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1/17/2019 c4 Lucky Lucy Heart
PLEASE UPDATE! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE this story! The plot is AWESOME and your writing is AMAZING! I can’t wait to read the next chapter and I hope you upload it SOON!
5/19/2018 c4 LunaUchiha20
UPDATE PLEASE!
6/12/2017 c4 9Firefly9202002
You need to work on spelling and grammar. Also you never explained where Naruto is actually staying since there is no way he could stay with Natsuki if she lives in the same apartment as canon Naruto.
1/16/2017 c1 Oblivion196
This is great plz continue!
12/12/2016 c4 arinasution5
Ho
4/16/2016 c4 Sexy Fox girl
interesting fanfic i wish you would continue it until he mets tsunade
7/4/2015 c4 desdelor97
This was a great chapteR. Please keep up the great worK.
4/8/2015 c4 2SmilyXD
Your stories really good, you should update soon. But I think you need a beta, just to ,correct your spellings and grammar
4/8/2015 c3 SmilyXD
I laughed so much :)
2/14/2015 c4 8RogueAngel82
I do like the idea of this story, and it does have potential to be a very good story. However you really need to start picking up to gramma and spelling mistakes. I'm not sure if your writing this without a spell check on because some of these should have been picked up. Also the lack of proper punctuation is disrupting the flow of story and making some of the paragraphs difficult the read and understand. Usually I don't comment when I find this happen, I just move on. But this story has potential and if a very new take I that I haven't come across yet. I strangely stress reread your story at least a couple of times, and get yourself a beta reader.
Don't give up. That's what this site is for to help you improve, and ignore the jerk reviewers (Too small brains, and too much time on their hands)
Jess
2/11/2015 c1 I-Nex-I
Wat da fuck is dis shit dood lern to write u scrub.

Seriously though, you might want to retake 4th grade.
12/22/2014 c4 Amyb11
Love the concept, but make sure you correct your grammar/spelling!
12/21/2014 c4 5War Sage
good chapter
12/21/2014 c4 mattcun
plz write more
10/30/2014 c3 mattcun
plz write more
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